Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Football Chapter 1 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Sankey
Loving your new tale. Looking forward to where it is headed. I do have my suspicions though. Just one tiny spag this time. Riley, your [m](M)om's on the phone."
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Loving your new tale. Looking forward to where it is headed. I do have my suspicions though. Just one tiny spag this time. Riley, your [m](M)om's on the phone."
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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I will fix that area. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a cute story and I'm sure I'm going to enjoy it. The gentleman keeps bumping into her in ways that aren't making her like him better. I sure that will change over time. I look forward to more.
Beth
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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This is a cute story and I'm sure I'm going to enjoy it. The gentleman keeps bumping into her in ways that aren't making her like him better. I sure that will change over time. I look forward to more.
Beth
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from teols2016
Gotta love how small towns defy coincidences. I am just barely able to suspend disbelief that this mother would her son go with this stranger, no matter his precautions, but I'll take it to see where this story goes. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Gotta love how small towns defy coincidences. I am just barely able to suspend disbelief that this mother would her son go with this stranger, no matter his precautions, but I'll take it to see where this story goes. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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It has a happy ending. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AJ McCall
This is funny. And football is a big thing here in TX. I loved the part where Katherine asked, if the guy was stalking her. It was short, simple and easy to read. At the end in the author notes you only mention Jeremy and Jordan, and you mention Jeremey again. I liked this very much though.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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This is funny. And football is a big thing here in TX. I loved the part where Katherine asked, if the guy was stalking her. It was short, simple and easy to read. At the end in the author notes you only mention Jeremy and Jordan, and you mention Jeremey again. I liked this very much though.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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It was a mistake I have corrected it. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb, ( barbara.wilkey)
What an unusual, but humorous way of attracting us readers to find how Katherine discovers who the gentleman is. I had to smile about the spill of coffee on Katherine' s blouse and her inpatient son, who kept saying, "Mom I'm going to be late.
Gert
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Hello Barb, ( barbara.wilkey)
What an unusual, but humorous way of attracting us readers to find how Katherine discovers who the gentleman is. I had to smile about the spill of coffee on Katherine' s blouse and her inpatient son, who kept saying, "Mom I'm going to be late.
Gert
by barbara.wilkey
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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A typical son. Thank you for the kind review.
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Barb You are welcome
Gert
Comment from judiverse
Katherine meets up with the guy with the big dog again. Is there something mysterious about his name? Maybe when she learns it, it will mean something to her. I can understand her being concerned about him giving her son a lift to football practice. Jordan is well characterized. He sounds like the typical teenager, and he's in a new school and doesn't want to be marked as a mama's boy. Juliet--now, that's an interesting name for an athletic trainer. I think I'd like to see her in upcoming chapters. This is going great so far. judi
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Katherine meets up with the guy with the big dog again. Is there something mysterious about his name? Maybe when she learns it, it will mean something to her. I can understand her being concerned about him giving her son a lift to football practice. Jordan is well characterized. He sounds like the typical teenager, and he's in a new school and doesn't want to be marked as a mama's boy. Juliet--now, that's an interesting name for an athletic trainer. I think I'd like to see her in upcoming chapters. This is going great so far. judi
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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You will only get glimpses of Juliet. LOL One of my son's had a female trainer and she was great. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I was just intrigued with the name! judi
Comment from Ulla
Ah, so do I detect what I think I do, Barbara? A new budding romance in the waiting? She's only been widowed for six months, but who knows what the back story is. I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Ah, so do I detect what I think I do, Barbara? A new budding romance in the waiting? She's only been widowed for six months, but who knows what the back story is. I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Part of her backstory is going to be be released soon. The whole story will take time. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Of course, I understand that. Much better to learn about it bit by bit. :)))
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Nice addition to the story. Funny how she keeps RUNNING INTO HIM - literally. ha
Some notes:
1.) Monday morning, after her early morning run, Katherine rushed
--> 'morning' x2
2.) Jordan grumbled, "Mom, common on! I'm going to be late for practice.
--> come on
3.) Keep my driver's license, and I'll give you my pick-up registration." In twenty minutes call the school and
--> no quote marks in the middle
Nice chapter - I enjoyed!
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Barb,
Nice addition to the story. Funny how she keeps RUNNING INTO HIM - literally. ha
Some notes:
1.) Monday morning, after her early morning run, Katherine rushed
--> 'morning' x2
2.) Jordan grumbled, "Mom, common on! I'm going to be late for practice.
--> come on
3.) Keep my driver's license, and I'll give you my pick-up registration." In twenty minutes call the school and
--> no quote marks in the middle
Nice chapter - I enjoyed!
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the catches. Corrections made. I'm always surprised at how many times I edited this and didn't see them. I truly appreciate the help.