Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

Sorry to hear of your loss, and it sounds like your family is rallying to meet the demands.
This is a good chapter showing the care and support Ali is getting after the attack. I liked the last lines, Jim riding shotgun for extra safety.
The 'Cowboy Code' was pretty accurate, I was told that code very young by my father, and again by the hands working on our ranch. The Code is also a guide to a successful life.
Good work,
irish

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for the encouragement.

Comment from estory

Excellent

Love all the emotion in the voices of your characters. You're a master at that. We get all these roiling feelings, even in the characters on the sidelines. But the strong compassion Cord has for Ali trumps everything. We see her finally having to rest in his arms, so to speak. estory

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for the encouragement.

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Hi, Barbara; I'm sorry to hear about your father-in-law's passing. This is a great chapter, and we should live by a cowboy's rules. I enjoyed that part, and the last line gave me a chuckle. Best, JohnC

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for your support. I appreciate the kind review,

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I'm sorry about your father-in-law, even when we know it's coming, it's still no easy. Have a safe trip and I'm sure many of us will be praying for you. Thanks for sharing.

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for your support. I appreciate the kind review.

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

what I love about your story is that it moves in a steady pace .No rushing. I liked the cowboy code .the dialogues are well done and there is just sufficient tension in the story

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from K.L. Rockquemore

Excellent

This chapter has a nice balance between dialogue and action.

I could picture the orange flames heating up the room.

The tender relationship between Alexandra and Cordero is ever present, and enjoyable.

I do have a question.

How did you select the character names that you used?

I suppose it depends on the theme and backstories.

I like to use names that give an immediate visual,
such as:
-Antonio
-Sven
-Kimiko
- Lamar

I am curious about your process.

I find it extremely useful to ask questions to seasoned authors.

If you don't know, then ask...right?

Happy Holidays:)

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

I outline the story first and then spend a lot time researching the names. The bad part about is my characters end up choosing their names as I write the story. The story is finished before I post it on Fanstory. When I first wrote this story, the names were Andrea and Erica. I think Alexandra and Cord are at least their third names. Luckily Samson was always Samson. In the story I'm writing right now, the stupid dog has changed his name three times. Not good. In one of my previous storis the heroine wanted a cat. I didn't want her to have a cat. She has a cat. LOL My muse wakes me in the middle of the night and changes things for me. It won't allow me back to sleep until I get up and change it. I'm sure this is as clear as mud. Bottom line every part of my story is character driven. Thank you for asking and the kind review.

reply by K.L. Rockquemore on 12-Dec-2022

Your points were crystal clear, and I thank you for your reply.

reply by K.L. Rockquemore on 12-Dec-2022

Hello, again.
I have two more questions if you wouldn?t mind.

1. When using a character?s full name, do you research that person exists?

What if you use an actual person, and they see their name being used on
your book cover.

For example, I probably spent way too much time until I found the right combination of first and last name for my antagonist, who is the main character and a stalker.

Jack is VERY common name:)

2. Can you use a photo from the web as a book cover?
What if that persons face is recognized on the cover?
I mean, I might freak out if an author used my face on their cover.

Thoughts?
Suggestions?

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

I did accidentally use a real person's name. A FanStory fan mentioned, and I changed it. Here on FanStory you can use a picture from google or wherever but it's good to give them credit. Now for a publisher no. They will help you choose it.

reply by K.L. Rockquemore on 12-Dec-2022

Good to know!
I appreciate your time.

K

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

I enjoyed the attention to descriptive detail as Cord and the other men took care to make sure Ali was not injured further. The way you described the placement of the pillows, with her sitting sideways in the Pickup seat. It was easily visualized.

I loved your inclusion of Cord's "Cowboy Code".

All and all, a great chapter, Barbara.

Jay

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

This is coming along great. I enjoyed the discussion of the cowboy code. Gene Autry had a code for his young fans. I believe there were 10 points in his. It sounds like Ali has been getting good care, even though it's from a horse doctor, at least for now. Too bad it took so long to get to a doctor. I am glad we live within a few miles of the hospital and a convenient care clinic! It's sad Ali went through so much mistreatment from Alan without saying anything about it. I would associate part of her reluctance comes from being over-protected by her family, especially her father. Sorry to hear of your father-in-law's passing. Don't worry about the reviewing. judi

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Yes, Ali was totally protected and not really allowed to make any decisions growing up. I completely understand that. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by judiverse on 12-Dec-2022

You're welcome. I just had to weigh in with my analysis. (No charge.) judi

Comment from Shirley McLain

Exceptional

Cord is such a caring man, and I'm glad Ali is beginning to see the light. You did a great job as aways. As I've told you every week, I enjoy your writing. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022

Thank you for the kind review and for being a fan.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There's lots of violence towards women, and while I have little understanding of why, one should still be aware of what is plainly wrong, bullying and oppression of fellow human beings is endemic, why this desire to control one's.fellow man is beyond, it's a form of slavery. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typy: It's (editable) edible?

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022

I giggled at my mistake, and I'm surprised you're the only one who's caught it. Thank you for the catch and the kind review.

reply by royowen on 11-Dec-2022

Yes, it?s something predictive text can do.