The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is unexpected, that she paid for Flourney's marker. It may not be a surprise when we learn what is written on it. I'm enjoying the epilogue and I hated to see Fanny's story end.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is unexpected, that she paid for Flourney's marker. It may not be a surprise when we learn what is written on it. I'm enjoying the epilogue and I hated to see Fanny's story end.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Carol. It does my heart good that you hate to see it end. I've completed part two of the epilogue but will have to wait until I earn enough shekels to promote it, so it will probably go up a week from next Saturday.
Comment from lancellot
A three part epilogue? Well, I suppose that makes sense. This is a good FanStory script and the I'm sure the members will like the directions and conversation.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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A three part epilogue? Well, I suppose that makes sense. This is a good FanStory script and the I'm sure the members will like the directions and conversation.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you for saying. But God protect me from another script!
Comment from lyenochka
That's fascinating why Fanny covered Thurston's burial costs. I wonder what the motive was - a penance? forgiveness? I wonder who benefited from the money that Thurston didn't use of his own property since his cattle could have been used to pay for it. Your characters keep getting interesting even after death!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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That's fascinating why Fanny covered Thurston's burial costs. I wonder what the motive was - a penance? forgiveness? I wonder who benefited from the money that Thurston didn't use of his own property since his cattle could have been used to pay for it. Your characters keep getting interesting even after death!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I hoped that would pass by the smarter reader, since I said that it took some finagling by Maples (a power in the town) since Fanny and Juni wanted to make sure the site remained in Brady. Hopefully, motive will be clear in the third part.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I want part 2. You did a great job and left me wanting more, as usual. I didn't see anything that was wrong or I would change. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I want part 2. You did a great job and left me wanting more, as usual. I didn't see anything that was wrong or I would change. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Shirley, you are so sweet and your six stars so appreciated. I hope you'll like the ending.
Comment from royowen
I think that's always the best finish when Miss Juniper came to meet Fanny at the end. But like many interviews. There's always loose ends, and you're certainly tying up up those loose ends in this post Jay, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I think that's always the best finish when Miss Juniper came to meet Fanny at the end. But like many interviews. There's always loose ends, and you're certainly tying up up those loose ends in this post Jay, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Roy. Ithink most people liked that ending.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay. So there is still some more to the story. How come I'm not the least bit surprised?
Now I have to wait another week to get some more answers. As you know I love this is story. What an amazing script.
My family from Denmark has been here for most of the week. It has been great to seeing my young granddaughters after 2 years and 9 months. Hence I'm not posting this week either. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Hi Jay. So there is still some more to the story. How come I'm not the least bit surprised?
Now I have to wait another week to get some more answers. As you know I love this is story. What an amazing script.
My family from Denmark has been here for most of the week. It has been great to seeing my young granddaughters after 2 years and 9 months. Hence I'm not posting this week either. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Ulla. I'm just happy you took time away from really important things to read and review my play. And gave it a six! You are da bomb!
Jay
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Big smile!!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm amazed at how much more there is to learn after Fanny's death. Every episode has had an unexpected surprise. Now, there are new questions to be answered. I look forward to Part 2 of the epilogue.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I'm amazed at how much more there is to learn after Fanny's death. Every episode has had an unexpected surprise. Now, there are new questions to be answered. I look forward to Part 2 of the epilogue.
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Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Lorraine. Part two will answer one prime question, but part three will wrap everything up... I hope, and leave a smile on people's faces.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this. I am guessing, and am not complaining, that Fanny's story has not been completely told. There is so much more to it. I really like this skit. It's great!!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed reading this. I am guessing, and am not complaining, that Fanny's story has not been completely told. There is so much more to it. I really like this skit. It's great!!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Barbara. I am losing people by attrition, I'm afraid. I'll be lucky to get ATB for this one. I'm only at 15 now, and haven't had a new review in hours. Your six stars is lovely. Thank you.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I'm glad that you are finally bringing this to close. What an incredible tale of love, betrayal and loyalty. I had trouble reading the accented dialogue that I'm sure you had labored over greatly. But you are a very good writer and that's why I'm giving you a six-stars.
Excellant.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I'm glad that you are finally bringing this to close. What an incredible tale of love, betrayal and loyalty. I had trouble reading the accented dialogue that I'm sure you had labored over greatly. But you are a very good writer and that's why I'm giving you a six-stars.
Excellant.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Well ... there wasn't any accent in this scene. I'm delighted that you're still hanging in there and reading this. Your six means SO much. But I'm not getting the numbers. I'll be lucky to get 20 reviews, though I am at the top of the board.
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I know. It's hard to get people to read prose more than 80 words or poem more than a Haiku.
Take care. I'm getting writing done.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Of course there were some things missing from Fanny's story, Jay, and you're doing an incredible job of bringing it out in the epilogue through this dialogue. I look forward to reading the last two parts.
One minor suggestion: "the gun that Miss Juniper used to kill Thurston Flourney with." - the 'with' is unnecessary and only ends the sentence with a dangling participle. :)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Of course there were some things missing from Fanny's story, Jay, and you're doing an incredible job of bringing it out in the epilogue through this dialogue. I look forward to reading the last two parts.
One minor suggestion: "the gun that Miss Juniper used to kill Thurston Flourney with." - the 'with' is unnecessary and only ends the sentence with a dangling participle. :)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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You know, about your suggestion, you are absolutely right. I looked at it several times, wondering whether I should leave "with" out, but it just seemed conversationally right. I even thought of saying, "The gun with which Miss Juniper used to kill ..." etc., but that seemed pedantic. I DO thank you for pointing it out. I'm going to mull it around a while and also see if it comes up in other reviews.
You are so sweet to honor me with a six!
Jay
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You are most welcome, Jay. This is a really easy one. There is no need for any other changes. Simply said: the gun that Miss Juniper used to kill Thurston Flourney. Unless you're thinking this isn't the way it would be spoken in this context, of course. :)