The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer #7"America's First Female Comic
35 total reviews
Comment from Eugenette Morin
Excellent! I now have to go looking for the beginning :-) Your use of vernacular speech is very well done and the diffidence on the part of the reporter is believable. I would go see this on stage. ð?¥°
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Excellent! I now have to go looking for the beginning :-) Your use of vernacular speech is very well done and the diffidence on the part of the reporter is believable. I would go see this on stage. ð?¥°
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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You've made my day, Eugenette. Now ask me if I will ever write a play again in dialect. (!!) Oddly, I felt, the overwhelming commentary is positive about her Texas brogue. I'm happy to have you aboard my play. Your six stars is over the top! Thank you!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like how you show much about Fanny's characterization without having to tell. That's good theater. I love how she so calmly eats the cruller and talks about the napkins. We learn a lot about the reporter through Fanny's reaction to him. I'm hoping there is another act. I do like Fanny, alot.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I like how you show much about Fanny's characterization without having to tell. That's good theater. I love how she so calmly eats the cruller and talks about the napkins. We learn a lot about the reporter through Fanny's reaction to him. I'm hoping there is another act. I do like Fanny, alot.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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There will be another couple of acts, Liz, before I pull down the curtain. I look forward to seeing you next time.
Jay
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I'm looking forward to it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I finished my popcorn and have been sitting in the theater waiting for the curtain to open. This scene was well worth the wait. Every time I had a question, or didn't understand, the reporter would ask Miss Fanny to explain a little more. I love it when he refers back to his notebook to keep Miss Fanny on point. She tells as little as possible, but I feel you're going to have the reporter pull the entire story from her. This play is totally intriguing, so I'll sit here and wait for the next scene.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I finished my popcorn and have been sitting in the theater waiting for the curtain to open. This scene was well worth the wait. Every time I had a question, or didn't understand, the reporter would ask Miss Fanny to explain a little more. I love it when he refers back to his notebook to keep Miss Fanny on point. She tells as little as possible, but I feel you're going to have the reporter pull the entire story from her. This play is totally intriguing, so I'll sit here and wait for the next scene.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Ah-ha, LJ! You make me so happy knowing that you're taking something away from this play. Yes, it's been quite a challenge to keep Fanny on task and to keep the reporter from strangling her.
Comment from tfawcus
That darned reporter's like a dog with a bone. He doesn't give up easily! He's having to drag each piece of information out of Miss Fanny and in the process, you continue to set up great dramatic tension. This is a fascinating play.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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That darned reporter's like a dog with a bone. He doesn't give up easily! He's having to drag each piece of information out of Miss Fanny and in the process, you continue to set up great dramatic tension. This is a fascinating play.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Tony, you are so kind. And I feel gratified that you feel the tension. I've just been busy trying to sew up this tear in the fabric and that one, keeping it whole until the final curtain.
Comment from royowen
The conviction of Juniper was life imprisonment, but it seems to me she wanted to be hanged and banged, not clanged. But there's some digging to go on if the much thumb-tacked reporter can wrest himself from the towering presence of Fanny, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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The conviction of Juniper was life imprisonment, but it seems to me she wanted to be hanged and banged, not clanged. But there's some digging to go on if the much thumb-tacked reporter can wrest himself from the towering presence of Fanny, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Roy. Yes, the digging continues. It's been good having you in the audience for every scene.
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Most welcome
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another wonderful scene. I am enjoying this story of yours, and it appears to be getting deeper at this point.
There is a lot to take in. Sometimes I have some problems understanding Miss Fanny. Great job. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Another wonderful scene. I am enjoying this story of yours, and it appears to be getting deeper at this point.
There is a lot to take in. Sometimes I have some problems understanding Miss Fanny. Great job. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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To be sure, Fanny is not easy to understand. But if she was a Hawvehd graduate, she wouldn't be Miss Fanny. Thank you so much for reading. I love your biopic, by the way.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Well done. The scene still leaves a lot of loose ends that need to be explained and tied up. A nice setup for the remainder of the posts. Miss Fanny is a sly one, lol, and keeps things hanging, pun intended.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Well done. The scene still leaves a lot of loose ends that need to be explained and tied up. A nice setup for the remainder of the posts. Miss Fanny is a sly one, lol, and keeps things hanging, pun intended.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Yes, I caught the pun! Haha, she is sly. I wonder how long she'll last without the Reporter's company?
Comment from Judy Lawless
There are still so many unanswered questions, Jay, although I think I see what Fanny is trying to say. It's all still very intriguing. Very well written. Again I look forward to the next Scene.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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There are still so many unanswered questions, Jay, although I think I see what Fanny is trying to say. It's all still very intriguing. Very well written. Again I look forward to the next Scene.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Judy. You've been such a wonderful presence at this play. Your six stars make me smile! Happiness, not because it's funny.
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You are most welcome, Jay.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The reporter has become Miss Fanny's greatest fan, he even knows some of her answers before she gives them. But understand Juniper's reasoning is still hard for him. Very interesting and very difficult with the way you use dialect, which reads very realistically.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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The reporter has become Miss Fanny's greatest fan, he even knows some of her answers before she gives them. But understand Juniper's reasoning is still hard for him. Very interesting and very difficult with the way you use dialect, which reads very realistically.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Ohhhhh, the dialect. It's been a blessing and a curse. The hardest thing is being consistent in my use of it. I'm going entirely by a seventy-some-year-old memory of my Missouri grandmother. Not easy. I'll be glad when she goes to bed.
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My Missouri Grandmother could put you to sleep it took so long for her to get to the end of the sentence.
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Jay
As a latecomer to the table, I'm happy that the reporter's interrogation is uncovering facts that aid my understanding of the story. The sense of inevitable tragedy in your work is reminiscent of a Shakespearean play, with Miss Fanny and Miss Juniper as its heroines. There is a regal quality about both these women (Juni has become as real as her friend to me as a reader) that transcends the dialect in which Miss Fanny speaks. My personal jury is still out on the reporter as a character. I'm wondering if. consciously or subconsciously, you are using his stutters and stammers to balance out Miss Fanny's broken English. In any event, his role acts as a foil to the main characters, much like the Fool in Shakespeare.
Looking forward to the continuation. You have undertaken a most ambitious task but your skill is equal to it.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Hello Jay
As a latecomer to the table, I'm happy that the reporter's interrogation is uncovering facts that aid my understanding of the story. The sense of inevitable tragedy in your work is reminiscent of a Shakespearean play, with Miss Fanny and Miss Juniper as its heroines. There is a regal quality about both these women (Juni has become as real as her friend to me as a reader) that transcends the dialect in which Miss Fanny speaks. My personal jury is still out on the reporter as a character. I'm wondering if. consciously or subconsciously, you are using his stutters and stammers to balance out Miss Fanny's broken English. In any event, his role acts as a foil to the main characters, much like the Fool in Shakespeare.
Looking forward to the continuation. You have undertaken a most ambitious task but your skill is equal to it.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Ah, Julia. You make me puff up with pride. That can be dangerous at my age. It's hard to walk when I'm out of balance. You are soooo articulate in your review, though. I can feel the depth of your reading in your words.
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It is great work, Jay