Perennials of War
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Comment from tfawcus
I think this reads well, Barbara, and gives a good idea of what the novel is about. I can't see any SPAGS in it. It's not easy to condense the plot of a novel into so few words. You've done a good job.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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I think this reads well, Barbara, and gives a good idea of what the novel is about. I can't see any SPAGS in it. It's not easy to condense the plot of a novel into so few words. You've done a good job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help.
Comment from Asante
I didn't see any mistake in your novel (I couldn't find my glasses sorry) but I really liked it. I'm sorry if this comment doesn't help your but I think you should list it as historical too just because you said you're using WWII references. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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I didn't see any mistake in your novel (I couldn't find my glasses sorry) but I really liked it. I'm sorry if this comment doesn't help your but I think you should list it as historical too just because you said you're using WWII references. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
her ancestors had owned the artwork and had hid it [I checked out the conjugation of this just to make sure, and it should be "...and had HIDDEN it..." It is the past perfect tense, and only the simple past tense uses "hid". In case you are sending in your synopsis to an agent or editor, you'll want to make sure that is corrected. (I'm sending you a PM about that matter tonight).]
Your synopsis is concise and well-written. As to genre, definitely Romance is in order, and suspense as a secondary would work. Naturally, it goes without saying that you need to be on top of the Jewish religion as it impacts this novel, as well as historical verisimilitude, as far as the stolen painting and the Russian Mafia are concerned.
Any way I can help you, please let me know.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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her ancestors had owned the artwork and had hid it [I checked out the conjugation of this just to make sure, and it should be "...and had HIDDEN it..." It is the past perfect tense, and only the simple past tense uses "hid". In case you are sending in your synopsis to an agent or editor, you'll want to make sure that is corrected. (I'm sending you a PM about that matter tonight).]
Your synopsis is concise and well-written. As to genre, definitely Romance is in order, and suspense as a secondary would work. Naturally, it goes without saying that you need to be on top of the Jewish religion as it impacts this novel, as well as historical verisimilitude, as far as the stolen painting and the Russian Mafia are concerned.
Any way I can help you, please let me know.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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You're wonderful. Thank you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Synopsis of the novel
A chapter in the book Perennials of War
Please Help!!
Just to let you know that I'm not good at editing, one thing I know long as your new novel keeps my interest will to keep me reading.
Your Synopsis: drew me in to read more of your new novel.
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Synopsis of the novel
A chapter in the book Perennials of War
Please Help!!
Just to let you know that I'm not good at editing, one thing I know long as your new novel keeps my interest will to keep me reading.
Your Synopsis: drew me in to read more of your new novel.
Gert
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help.
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You are welcome Barb.
Gert
Comment from nomi338
Sorry to say, I am probably a poor choice for editing. Much of my work suffers from inadequate editing. The story sounds wonderful and exciting. I would say that it qualifies as a romantic thriller. I wish you all the success in the world and cannot wait to purchase and read it when it becomes available.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Sorry to say, I am probably a poor choice for editing. Much of my work suffers from inadequate editing. The story sounds wonderful and exciting. I would say that it qualifies as a romantic thriller. I wish you all the success in the world and cannot wait to purchase and read it when it becomes available.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup, it's definitely romance, I will not put historical because the action happens in present days, adding the tag suspense makes sense. I think you have a good start. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the publishing sounds interesting.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Yup, it's definitely romance, I will not put historical because the action happens in present days, adding the tag suspense makes sense. I think you have a good start. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the publishing sounds interesting.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the input.
Comment from Cass Carlton
To find out the correct genre for your proposed novel I would suggest visiting a large bookshop and study the books therein. Look for books set in the same or similar time and see what they are
put in. Otherwise, I would go with what you already have in mind. Romance/historical. The plot of this story seems sound and well based. I encourage you to! go ahead with it. It is also very much "on trend" with a great deal of interest in the retrieval of stolen wealth and precious things taken as spoil by the Nazis during WW11.
You just might have a winner here Girl. Go for it.
cheers Cass
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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To find out the correct genre for your proposed novel I would suggest visiting a large bookshop and study the books therein. Look for books set in the same or similar time and see what they are
put in. Otherwise, I would go with what you already have in mind. Romance/historical. The plot of this story seems sound and well based. I encourage you to! go ahead with it. It is also very much "on trend" with a great deal of interest in the retrieval of stolen wealth and precious things taken as spoil by the Nazis during WW11.
You just might have a winner here Girl. Go for it.
cheers Cass
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
You are miles ahead of me. I have no background in writing synopses and solititing agents. What you've come up with seems reasonable. I offer a general suggestion per below:
In case you aren't aware of the film on this theme:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Woman_in_Gold_(film)
It may be a good resource for background-- check into historical details to make sure yours gibe.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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You are miles ahead of me. I have no background in writing synopses and solititing agents. What you've come up with seems reasonable. I offer a general suggestion per below:
In case you aren't aware of the film on this theme:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Woman_in_Gold_(film)
It may be a good resource for background-- check into historical details to make sure yours gibe.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I sure wish I could be of help, but my limited abilities would just get in the way. I hope you find the input you're looking for from the many outstanding talents on this site and elsewhere. It's a great story!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Well, I sure wish I could be of help, but my limited abilities would just get in the way. I hope you find the input you're looking for from the many outstanding talents on this site and elsewhere. It's a great story!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the input.
Comment from Raul1
Well, to tell you the truth I don't know any agents and editors and not any are friends. How I can help, though is for you to go to writer's digest and Poets & Writers websites. They have tons of agents and editors. Also, buy a current of books where they have a list of editors and agents. These are the only help I can give you. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Well, to tell you the truth I don't know any agents and editors and not any are friends. How I can help, though is for you to go to writer's digest and Poets & Writers websites. They have tons of agents and editors. Also, buy a current of books where they have a list of editors and agents. These are the only help I can give you. Best of luck!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help.
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You're welcome!