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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Katherine is a great mom. So glad that someone told her how wonderful she really is after being married to a man that was gone for days at a time. Like your story....

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for going back and reading.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Just went back and read the prior--somehow I missed it last week. I wanted to get the backstory on the beating. Very disturbing, as intended, gripping confrontation--scene--all interactions ring true. As for Kenny's "punishment"--that makes no sense. Surely charges should be and would be filed.

Maybe I'll need to move it to [Sunday's=>SUNDAYS]

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for going back and reading. I have fixed the error.
Comment from nomi338
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Argh! I understand, but I am still frustrated. I am an unapologetic romantic, and darn it, I want these two to get together. I do not want to rush the process, but at the same time I want to see these two people in a loving relationship. I have taken a deep breath and I feel better now. carry on.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. T
Comment from judiverse
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I am wondering why Katherine didn't go to the guidance counselor with Rhonda's problem. That's what they're for, and it would have taken some of the load off Katherine. Also Rhonda doesn't seem to appreciate what's being done for her. That young man should have been sent to juvenile court instead of playing on the football team. The prank played on the freshmen boys wasn't very nice, but that sounds like something the older boys would do. Katherine's boys are growing quite attached to Gabriel. Things are really moving along for Katherine and Gabriel. Great developments. judi

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 29-May-2021
    You're very welcome. Enjoy Memorial Day weekend. judi
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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barbara:

The football team of one of the rivals of our newest high school super-glued all the doors to our two-year-old building so that the keys would not work. Fortunately, they missed one door and we were able to conduct school, per usual. You never know what might happen between team rivals, right? I really enjoyed this chapter.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
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Gabriel is using a lot of restraint when it comes to Katherine. Of course you stories tend to seem like they've known each other longer than they actually have. The boys would certainly approve if Gabriel becomes a permanent part of their life. They don't seem to miss their own father.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elchupakabra
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This was really great work. The football culture up here in Canada is vastly different from American football, I thought you did a great job capturing the essence of the game through your characters. Great work thus far, I look forward to reading more. Later daze.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alaskastory
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"Football Chapter 18 part 1" moves along smoothly and shows good reactions from the young boys as well as their mom and the coach. With a romance bound to take off, this will be a challenge even for a coach to manage. So far, it is well done.


 Comment Written 23-May-2021


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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Things are "hotting" up between Gabriel and Katherine, and it sounds like he's really in love with her, and, although she won't admit it, she with him. He knows her low self esteem is due because "call occasionally" George, but your character is of high moral character, and coach knows it, it was nice Gabe would go with Jeremy to the dad/son gathering. Well done Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 29-May-2021
    Well done Barbara
Comment from Leann DS
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A nice chapter with great descriptions and dialogue. I enjoyed this.

If I may, I noticed a couple typos for your review:
After Katherine exhaled, she said, "Sound like
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"Usually Saturday mornings, but I'm not sure now that there are cross country races. Maybe I'll need to move it to Sunday's but I hate doing it then. We need to find a church home." Katherine hesitated. "I don't see any other choice. Maybe I'll move it temporarily. Cross county
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Well done. Thanks for sharing. Have a great week.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 23-May-2021
    Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.