Football - A Novel
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Comment from BethShelby
This was good chapter. Katherine seems to be warming up to Gabriel. They
seem comfortable with each other and the boys seem to like him. I wonder what she will tell him about her marriage. I think it may have been less than perfect. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Beth
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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This was good chapter. Katherine seems to be warming up to Gabriel. They
seem comfortable with each other and the boys seem to like him. I wonder what she will tell him about her marriage. I think it may have been less than perfect. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Beth
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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She will only tell a little bit. More to come later. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AJ McCall
Haha, Margarita! (I'm not originally from Texas. I'm from Brooklyn but it's cold out here in Houston.) At least Katherine, Gabriel, and her boys are having much better weather, lol. My goodness, everything's moving so fast! I really want to hear more about George just like Gabriel. How he died so suddenly is kinda surprising. And maybe Gabrial will replace him... It's going in that lovely direction and some other things will be happening very very soon hopefully. But... I'll be waiting to read that next chapter!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Haha, Margarita! (I'm not originally from Texas. I'm from Brooklyn but it's cold out here in Houston.) At least Katherine, Gabriel, and her boys are having much better weather, lol. My goodness, everything's moving so fast! I really want to hear more about George just like Gabriel. How he died so suddenly is kinda surprising. And maybe Gabrial will replace him... It's going in that lovely direction and some other things will be happening very very soon hopefully. But... I'll be waiting to read that next chapter!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Only a small piece of info will be given. More to come later. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome! Forgive me for replying so late. My power went out for about two days.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Barbara, I'm so glad we're finally getting somewhere in the romance department. At least our heroine, Is willing to share some of her former life.
I am so glad to see the six Most important characters in the story, already starting to create a family unit.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Dear Barbara, I'm so glad we're finally getting somewhere in the romance department. At least our heroine, Is willing to share some of her former life.
I am so glad to see the six Most important characters in the story, already starting to create a family unit.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Katherine will only share a part of it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RetroStarfish
I like that you've got the two characters lightly touching, or a quick peck on a finger, without any over the top drama and swooning of romance novels. This is a great story without it. You've got the two of them slowly circling each other while growing closer all the time. And, you've ended the chapter - or this section - on a bit of a cliff hanger. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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I like that you've got the two characters lightly touching, or a quick peck on a finger, without any over the top drama and swooning of romance novels. This is a great story without it. You've got the two of them slowly circling each other while growing closer all the time. And, you've ended the chapter - or this section - on a bit of a cliff hanger. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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I don't do lust. If people want lust they need to go elsewhere. My couples have unconditional love that takes a while to build. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
They've quite definitely got to the sharing stage of their relationship, Gabriel has sorted his life out from the selfish, youthful corruption, to the stage of making worthwhile decisions in life, which makes sense, we are all confronted with them, I was when I met God, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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They've quite definitely got to the sharing stage of their relationship, Gabriel has sorted his life out from the selfish, youthful corruption, to the stage of making worthwhile decisions in life, which makes sense, we are all confronted with them, I was when I met God, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Welcome Barbara,
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, another fine chapter and a few things are now starting to come out about both their lives. Do I detect a budding romance?
I'm sure you don't me around you boys. =I'm sure you don't want me around your boys.
After she walked entered the living room, = delete 'walked'
Great writing and I look forward to more. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Hi Barbara, another fine chapter and a few things are now starting to come out about both their lives. Do I detect a budding romance?
I'm sure you don't me around you boys. =I'm sure you don't want me around your boys.
After she walked entered the living room, = delete 'walked'
Great writing and I look forward to more. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the correction. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Sankey
Once again, a good chapter, leaving us hanging which is good. When are we gonna find out who is snooping? Now for some spgs. I'm sure you don't (want)me around you(r) boys.
EITHER After she walked [entered](into) the living room, OR
After she [walked] entered the living room,
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Once again, a good chapter, leaving us hanging which is good. When are we gonna find out who is snooping? Now for some spgs. I'm sure you don't (want)me around you(r) boys.
EITHER After she walked [entered](into) the living room, OR
After she [walked] entered the living room,
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
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You beat Ulla today dunno where she is I am missing Thaities too.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Okay, she finally admits it that she has a sweet spot for the coach and now the disclosure part starts. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Okay, she finally admits it that she has a sweet spot for the coach and now the disclosure part starts. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Football's plenty popular in Indiana, but I think the fans here are more wild about basketball. It seems like Katherine was more or less joking when she made that remark about playing pro football corrupting him. Gabriel must be pretty sensitive about his past. Now he's showing a vulnerability, just as Katherine has. I'll be interested to hear more about Katherine's marriage and what her husband was like. She must have been pretty young when she married him and pretty much under his thumb. The boys seem to have their reservations about their father. Great work. Look at the sentence "I'm sure you..." I think you meant to add the word "want." You might leave off "the next day" phrase after Tuesday. It'll be clear without that. judi
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Football's plenty popular in Indiana, but I think the fans here are more wild about basketball. It seems like Katherine was more or less joking when she made that remark about playing pro football corrupting him. Gabriel must be pretty sensitive about his past. Now he's showing a vulnerability, just as Katherine has. I'll be interested to hear more about Katherine's marriage and what her husband was like. She must have been pretty young when she married him and pretty much under his thumb. The boys seem to have their reservations about their father. Great work. Look at the sentence "I'm sure you..." I think you meant to add the word "want." You might leave off "the next day" phrase after Tuesday. It'll be clear without that. judi
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and I've made the changes.
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You're very welcome. I think you had just omitted a word at that one spot. judi
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is the first time I've read any of this novel. Looks like I need to go back and catch up. Coming in at this point, I'm not sure what it's really about, but it sounds like an interesting story line and is well written.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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This is the first time I've read any of this novel. Looks like I need to go back and catch up. Coming in at this point, I'm not sure what it's really about, but it sounds like an interesting story line and is well written.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. I hope you like it.