Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Working on a plan is here so well expressed; author has managed the theme to express thru plot so progressively, placed realistic characters so live in action, used the setting so well and manifested the climax logically to go for a curious ending, I enjoyed the read with so contributory and realistic dialogues.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017

Thank you for the generous review.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Barbara,

good chapter again. I like the normalcy of the discussion between Anderson and Philip over a game of pool. The caution is well noted as well.

Helen put her forearms on the arms of the chair and adjusted herself in the chair - you could say 'adjusted her position' to negate the repetition of chair here.

"No, not really. We're family." - insert a clear line before this.

All the best
G

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 Comment Written 05-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017

Thank you for both those catches. I always appreciate the help.

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

A quick chapter that moves the story along.
I don't even know any cousins I have twice removed so Jane must have a really close family.
Phillip is starting to sense that Anderson has feelings for Shana.
Great writing!
Michael

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 Comment Written 05-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017

Thank you for catching the hint I placed about Anderson's feelings. I wondered if anybody would catch it.