Rougarou Nights
Wrong place at the wrong time.36 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I guess one could say it just wasn't our hero's day, or night, wasn't a good one.
I really enjoyed this clever, quite complicated plot, in which, as an aside, he meets up with the rougerou, (which I don't think needed it, it was obtrusive, and was almost superfluous, I would delete it, the main plot stands alone) blessings Roy
Query, "Why would you use the "obsidian" something hairy rolling down a chest."
Typo : her. anything but. = She(.) anything but dead. 2 : (in) the floor. On?
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I guess one could say it just wasn't our hero's day, or night, wasn't a good one.
I really enjoyed this clever, quite complicated plot, in which, as an aside, he meets up with the rougerou, (which I don't think needed it, it was obtrusive, and was almost superfluous, I would delete it, the main plot stands alone) blessings Roy
Query, "Why would you use the "obsidian" something hairy rolling down a chest."
Typo : her. anything but. = She(.) anything but dead. 2 : (in) the floor. On?
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy, for taking time to read my silly story. Yes, there is a lot going on, and for a simple mind like mine it gets hard for even me to keep up. I appreciate you generous review and helpful comments.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sally Law
This was a ton of fun and more laughs than I've had for awhile. This was the funniest horror story I have ever read! Very creative writing, Ric.
A few improvements for your consideration.
-A la carte. Use the French spelling in Advanced Editor. It has the little accent thingy on the A.
-"The sun had sunk fast." The boat sunk, not the sun. The sun sets, the sun disappeared, the sun bows in the sky, the sun bids adieu. Just a few from my writer's book.
(I) froze in fear as I floated along; (the swamp) a blanket of darkness in ominous silence. (Separate you from the swamp.)
-Paragraph that starts "How quickly things change." This needs some improvements. I would suggest another look here. Good content though. :))
I hope this is helpful and adds to your fine work. My very best to you, dear Ric.
Blessings,
Sal XOs.....
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This was a ton of fun and more laughs than I've had for awhile. This was the funniest horror story I have ever read! Very creative writing, Ric.
A few improvements for your consideration.
-A la carte. Use the French spelling in Advanced Editor. It has the little accent thingy on the A.
-"The sun had sunk fast." The boat sunk, not the sun. The sun sets, the sun disappeared, the sun bows in the sky, the sun bids adieu. Just a few from my writer's book.
(I) froze in fear as I floated along; (the swamp) a blanket of darkness in ominous silence. (Separate you from the swamp.)
-Paragraph that starts "How quickly things change." This needs some improvements. I would suggest another look here. Good content though. :))
I hope this is helpful and adds to your fine work. My very best to you, dear Ric.
Blessings,
Sal XOs.....
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Sally, for your kind words, suggestions, and generous review. As crazy as it might sound, I used the sun sunk on purpose, because in the swamp, it doesn't set or just disappear, bow from the sky, or bid adieu. It just sinks into the abyss, and it happens almost instantaneously. LOL. I guess, I better start looking for another way to say what I mean. But, the fella who is writing this story isn't a writer. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from country ranch writer
A thermal cell from the sporting goods store will help keep rpthem at bay we yes them when we go fishing in the mangoes by the salt water.will ward off sand flies too.wrong place wrong time on the bayou that's for dar sure. My advice is get the heck out of that Parish.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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A thermal cell from the sporting goods store will help keep rpthem at bay we yes them when we go fishing in the mangoes by the salt water.will ward off sand flies too.wrong place wrong time on the bayou that's for dar sure. My advice is get the heck out of that Parish.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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LOL. Thank you so much for your advice and generous review. I used to race horses in Louisiana from November to April. An old Kentucky boy use to fishing, hunting, and traipsing through the wilderness. But it didn't take me long to figure out that my outdoorsman skills were way under par of what they needed to be in the swamps. LOL. Thanks again!
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Louisiana is one place you do not want to be in the water ar night you might end up gator bait great dumping grounds fir the mafia out there.. I will take the wilds any day to hunt and fish in but he?ll no not there this country girl don?t to the swamps.
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Yes, ma'am. It didn't take me long to learn that lesson.
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Hugs
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((HUGS))
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I'm confused. Did I miss something? I find here two completely different stories. One is you are lost in a swamp. Two is your experience with the wrong house, jail, and then release.
So I am surmising that One is a dream and Two really happened. Both are pretty scary. All in all your descriptive narrative was very good.
Ralf
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I'm confused. Did I miss something? I find here two completely different stories. One is you are lost in a swamp. Two is your experience with the wrong house, jail, and then release.
So I am surmising that One is a dream and Two really happened. Both are pretty scary. All in all your descriptive narrative was very good.
Ralf
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Ralf, for taking time to read my story. Although, it couldn't have been too much fun when you didn't catch the connection in the parts. He was in the swamp. Then, where those five stars separate, it takes you back to what happened before the swamp, before it takes him back to his predicament in the swamp again. But thanks for reading. I appreciate YOU!
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Thanks. Ric.
Ralf
Comment from Brett Matthew West
First paragraph immediately sets the locale.
Very descriptive all the way through.
Touch of a run-on sentence in paragraph five.
In paragraph ten would consider taking the two thens out.
Same in paragraph eleven and beyond.
Definitely a case of being in the wrong place at the wrong time.
High tension and plenty of action throughout.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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First paragraph immediately sets the locale.
Very descriptive all the way through.
Touch of a run-on sentence in paragraph five.
In paragraph ten would consider taking the two thens out.
Same in paragraph eleven and beyond.
Definitely a case of being in the wrong place at the wrong time.
High tension and plenty of action throughout.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Brett Mathew, for your kind words, suggestions, and extra-special six-star review. This piece wasn't ready to post. I meant to save it and make some corrections and changes before sending it live. I guess I hit the wrong button. Anyway, I appreciate You!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This should have been in a Horror story contest. I enjoyed reading. Your descriptions had me on the edge of my seat to get closer to my computer screen. I was so interested in the words I forget to actually review. Sorry, I didn't see any mistakes.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This should have been in a Horror story contest. I enjoyed reading. Your descriptions had me on the edge of my seat to get closer to my computer screen. I was so interested in the words I forget to actually review. Sorry, I didn't see any mistakes.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Barbara, for your kind words and extra-special six-star review. I'm glad you didn't notice any mistakes, because I've never even got to edit it. I planned to make corrections before it went live, but must have messed up when I clicked save. LOL. Ol' well, dummy me. I appreciate YOU!