Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Football Chapter 1 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
33 total reviews
Comment from Tpa
I enjoyed your excellent opening, especially the manner, which the two adults met. I also enjoyed your down to earth monologue with her boys. Looking forward to more of your reading.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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I enjoyed your excellent opening, especially the manner, which the two adults met. I also enjoyed your down to earth monologue with her boys. Looking forward to more of your reading.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A great image, Barbara,
and very good story to go with it.
-I think there are quite a few
underlying issues going on
with the mysterious gentleman.
-You develop the scenes with
Katherine and her son very well.
-Some of her thoughts are very
revealing, like those about George's
parents, and the humorous one
about the older brothers wanting
to send Jeremy to the Salvation Army!
-Mystery Man has some interesting
thoughts, too, about Katherine not
knowing about the town and football.
-My favorite line is "Mom, strange things
impress you. Can we skip the veggies?"
-You might have me hooked on this story!
-A great job.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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-A great image, Barbara,
and very good story to go with it.
-I think there are quite a few
underlying issues going on
with the mysterious gentleman.
-You develop the scenes with
Katherine and her son very well.
-Some of her thoughts are very
revealing, like those about George's
parents, and the humorous one
about the older brothers wanting
to send Jeremy to the Salvation Army!
-Mystery Man has some interesting
thoughts, too, about Katherine not
knowing about the town and football.
-My favorite line is "Mom, strange things
impress you. Can we skip the veggies?"
-You might have me hooked on this story!
-A great job.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement. I hope you're hooked.
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You are welcome. I will give it my best!
Comment from teols2016
A great start. I can absolutely relate to Jeremy's wos, having gone through two major moves myself. I'm also a dog lover, so you've got another great hook for me there. Looking forward to more. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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A great start. I can absolutely relate to Jeremy's wos, having gone through two major moves myself. I'm also a dog lover, so you've got another great hook for me there. Looking forward to more. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
This is kind of how I felt moving to Texas. I also wondered about why so many homes had fireplaces. (Ours did, too.) Katherine is an engaging character. Making such a move was a big step, but she has good reasons for doing it. Jeremy doesn't seem quite so sure. It is hard to leave friends behind. Great meeting with the man with the huge English Mastiff. A coincidence they met again in the grocery store, but that happens. Of course Jeremy is curious about the dog, so they'll likely meet. Off to a great start! judi
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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This is kind of how I felt moving to Texas. I also wondered about why so many homes had fireplaces. (Ours did, too.) Katherine is an engaging character. Making such a move was a big step, but she has good reasons for doing it. Jeremy doesn't seem quite so sure. It is hard to leave friends behind. Great meeting with the man with the huge English Mastiff. A coincidence they met again in the grocery store, but that happens. Of course Jeremy is curious about the dog, so they'll likely meet. Off to a great start! judi
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement. Ours has a fireplace too.
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You're welcome. You're off to a great start with this. I don't know how you can do as much as you do what with the difficulties of teaching during the corona virus. judi
Comment from Sankey
So pleased you have another novel up for reviewing and enjoying. You have done well introducing us to the stars of the show. Wondering if the gentleman is a widower or single and something might happen later between he and Katherine? Don't tell. One spag. "W[h]ere you racing the cart?"
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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So pleased you have another novel up for reviewing and enjoying. You have done well introducing us to the stars of the show. Wondering if the gentleman is a widower or single and something might happen later between he and Katherine? Don't tell. One spag. "W[h]ere you racing the cart?"
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Will fix that. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from royowen
This sounds like destiny to me, those chance meetings between two "needy" people, who don't know they're needy, who happen to know and love dogs, and this Katherine knows now what a "big" dog is. A wonderful start to your story Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This sounds like destiny to me, those chance meetings between two "needy" people, who don't know they're needy, who happen to know and love dogs, and this Katherine knows now what a "big" dog is. A wonderful start to your story Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the catch. I can't believe I did that.
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Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Ben Colder
You can tell this writer knows what raising boys is like. LOL. The supermarket, the clerk, oh, so real in today's world. The dog bit was good as they come. That big fellow would scare the pants off anyone. LOL.
Good one Barb. Wholesome.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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You can tell this writer knows what raising boys is like. LOL. The supermarket, the clerk, oh, so real in today's world. The dog bit was good as they come. That big fellow would scare the pants off anyone. LOL.
Good one Barb. Wholesome.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wabigoon
Barbara--
I enjoyed this. A nice...reminiscence? We have a female St. Berdoodle, a Saint Bernard poodle mix but she's not as big as Reggie. She's big enough to be able to eat anything you leave on the counter or kitchen table without jumping up, though. I will keep an eye out for more of your story. It's in the 60s here today and that's a "warm front!" Texas! Bah, humbug!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Barbara--
I enjoyed this. A nice...reminiscence? We have a female St. Berdoodle, a Saint Bernard poodle mix but she's not as big as Reggie. She's big enough to be able to eat anything you leave on the counter or kitchen table without jumping up, though. I will keep an eye out for more of your story. It's in the 60s here today and that's a "warm front!" Texas! Bah, humbug!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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LOL I grew up with a Great Dane, he once helped himself to a meatloaf from the take. He just reached over and took it. LOL. Thank you for understand. Here in Texas it got down to 69 this morning, people where wearing their winter coats. It's up to 83 now, a real Texas cold front. LOL
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brab barbara.wilkey your novel Football Chapter 1 part 1
grabbed my interest of who is this gentleman who to me has interest when he met( I believe her name is Katherine?)
Love the idea she has four sons and the over sized dog.
I'm wondering if you title your new novel Football because the gentleman likes football maybe plays football in a team
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Hello Brab barbara.wilkey your novel Football Chapter 1 part 1
grabbed my interest of who is this gentleman who to me has interest when he met( I believe her name is Katherine?)
Love the idea she has four sons and the over sized dog.
I'm wondering if you title your new novel Football because the gentleman likes football maybe plays football in a team
Gert
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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We'll see. I am looking for a real name for it. It's just my nickname for it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Barbara, do I see a romance coming along? I know it's primature, but something is cooking here. Now, this is a good start to your new novel. I like it, and can't wait to see what will happen. Well written. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Awe, Barbara, do I see a romance coming along? I know it's primature, but something is cooking here. Now, this is a good start to your new novel. I like it, and can't wait to see what will happen. Well written. Ulla xx
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.