The French Letter
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28 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Appealing narrative taletelling, good stand of characterization, fantastic real and contributory dialogues, organized plot development, catchy beginning, formal ending; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Appealing narrative taletelling, good stand of characterization, fantastic real and contributory dialogues, organized plot development, catchy beginning, formal ending; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanks very much for your review and encouraging remarks, Alcreator. Most affirming.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter about the bumpy ride and the spillage right at the place where it will draw suspicious attention when the stain dries. To eat food we do not normally eat sometimes seem to backfire.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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A very well-written chapter about the bumpy ride and the spillage right at the place where it will draw suspicious attention when the stain dries. To eat food we do not normally eat sometimes seem to backfire.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Many thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from JudyE
Very realistic writing as always. Thankfully I've never been airsick although I can't read when travelling by car. I couldn't find anything to criticise here - or even to critique! lol
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Very realistic writing as always. Thankfully I've never been airsick although I can't read when travelling by car. I couldn't find anything to criticise here - or even to critique! lol
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Judy. I appreciate the extra star. Most affirming.
I used to be terribly airsick when I went through flying training. Almost enough to make me give up. However, when I moved on to larger aircraft, I was no longer bothered by it, except occasionally during low level flights in bumpy weather.
All good wishes, Tony
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I understand. Smaller aircraft can upset me too although it's been a long time since I travelled in one.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a beautiful and intriguing story, I can't wait to read more. Good played, initially I was thinking that is going to be something with a bomb attendant, but is safe is just travel:) Good luck with your writing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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What a beautiful and intriguing story, I can't wait to read more. Good played, initially I was thinking that is going to be something with a bomb attendant, but is safe is just travel:) Good luck with your writing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Very many thanks, Iza, for dropping by to review this chapter. I appreciate your encouragement and good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
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Waiting for the next one:)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Nice little bit of humour amongst the not so good plane fight for Charles.Another great chapter Tony, and now the adventure really begins for these two. Going great with this book
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Nice little bit of humour amongst the not so good plane fight for Charles.Another great chapter Tony, and now the adventure really begins for these two. Going great with this book
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Valda. Things are beginning to come to a head. I hope they survive it! LOL
Comment from WryWriter
Your expert ability to set scenes is astounding. You put the reader into the story with ease. Then you grip them to their seats and take them on a wild ride. The ending sentences were perfection! (It still baffles me how these jet engines can just pop into reverse without grinding themselves to bits.) Some suggestions below for your consideration:
(awhile instead of "a while"?)
The evening meal, on the other hand, was excellent. (I'd reverse this to: On the other hand, the evening meal was excellent.)
Subconscious images drifted through my mind:
(I would omit subconscious...redundant with "through my mind.")
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Your expert ability to set scenes is astounding. You put the reader into the story with ease. Then you grip them to their seats and take them on a wild ride. The ending sentences were perfection! (It still baffles me how these jet engines can just pop into reverse without grinding themselves to bits.) Some suggestions below for your consideration:
(awhile instead of "a while"?)
The evening meal, on the other hand, was excellent. (I'd reverse this to: On the other hand, the evening meal was excellent.)
Subconscious images drifted through my mind:
(I would omit subconscious...redundant with "through my mind.")
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Many thanks for you review and comments. Appreciated, as always. I'll have another look at 'a while' (noun) versus 'awhile' (adverb).
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Charles seems to be a nervous passenger on planes unlike you, a pilot who even knows to call the lights "anti-collision lights." I'm sure all the visions of the hunted markhor and advice from Bamforth and hints about Mme Durand's future influence serve as tantalizing foreshadowing.
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Poor Charles seems to be a nervous passenger on planes unlike you, a pilot who even knows to call the lights "anti-collision lights." I'm sure all the visions of the hunted markhor and advice from Bamforth and hints about Mme Durand's future influence serve as tantalizing foreshadowing.
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Many thanks for you review and comments, Helen. Appreciated, as always. The narrative is beginning to increase its impetus as we charge in towards the climax. That's the idea, anyway!
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Debbie Pope
This whole book is so well written. I do hope you are planning to publish. This strength of this chapter, as with so many, is the relationship between Charles and Helen. It really an unlikely pair, but it certainly works. I like your description of the flight. Makes me glad to be on the ground.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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This whole book is so well written. I do hope you are planning to publish. This strength of this chapter, as with so many, is the relationship between Charles and Helen. It really an unlikely pair, but it certainly works. I like your description of the flight. Makes me glad to be on the ground.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Many thanks for you review and comments, Debbie. Appreciated, as always. The narrative is beginning to increase its impetus as we charge in towards the climax of this lengthy tale. That's the idea, anyway! Very kind of you to bestow a sixth star. Most affirming.
All good wishes, Tony