The French Letter
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Comment from Ulla
Ah, again there is a twist. What will Alain reveal. I'm so sorry and dismayed that Kayla is in such a bad state. I now wonder what will happen next.
that Kayla might have been radicalised whilst in Thailand. Whilst I didn't believe a word of that, it was plausible = I would change one of the 'whilst'.
As you know, I'm intrigued by this story. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Ah, again there is a twist. What will Alain reveal. I'm so sorry and dismayed that Kayla is in such a bad state. I now wonder what will happen next.
that Kayla might have been radicalised whilst in Thailand. Whilst I didn't believe a word of that, it was plausible = I would change one of the 'whilst'.
As you know, I'm intrigued by this story. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Ulla. As always, I appreciate your review and the pick up on 'whilst'. Have now fixed it. Have a good weekend. Best wishes, Tony
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The same to you. :))
Comment from juliaSjames
This is a vivid and emotional chapter. It appears that Charles and Helen have arrived in the nick of time to hopefully save Kayla.
There is also a hint of menace. The shadow of international terrorism draws closer.
Note: Towards the end I think you mean "clam up" not " clamp up".
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This is a vivid and emotional chapter. It appears that Charles and Helen have arrived in the nick of time to hopefully save Kayla.
There is also a hint of menace. The shadow of international terrorism draws closer.
Note: Towards the end I think you mean "clam up" not " clamp up".
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Very many thanks for your positive comments and sixth star, Julia. Much appreciated. I agree with you that 'clam up' is better than 'clamp up' and have made the change.
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You're welcome Tony.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait to her Alain's version about his sister. I should be very interesting. Once again, I enjoyed reading. I like the photo of the dog too.
absinthe (I have read that absinthe was and is very dangerous)
They had intimated connections with drugs and with terrorism. (I don't think you need the second 'with)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I can't wait to her Alain's version about his sister. I should be very interesting. Once again, I enjoyed reading. I like the photo of the dog too.
absinthe (I have read that absinthe was and is very dangerous)
They had intimated connections with drugs and with terrorism. (I don't think you need the second 'with)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Barbara, and for your suggestion about the repetition of 'with'. I'll have another look at that. Have a great weekend! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sankey
This was a very deep chapter. A lot of revelations and new angles perhaps, again. Good read though. Possible change ahead. I was a little confused in the following suggest change...[He](Alain then) sat next to Helen and looked at her
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This was a very deep chapter. A lot of revelations and new angles perhaps, again. Good read though. Possible change ahead. I was a little confused in the following suggest change...[He](Alain then) sat next to Helen and looked at her
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Geoffrey, and for your suggestion to clarify who is doing what. I'll have another look at that. Have a great weekend! All the best, Tony
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello sir. Though I am just now reading your story at chapter 72, I can say I enjoyed it. It didn't feel like I was just coming in at chapter 72, the characters were well written. Good Job.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Hello sir. Though I am just now reading your story at chapter 72, I can say I enjoyed it. It didn't feel like I was just coming in at chapter 72, the characters were well written. Good Job.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review. Have a great weekend! All the best, Tony
Comment from Gail Denham
Very good mixing in dialog with action - and believeable plot and story line. It read well. You toss in a number of words and names that stump me - perhaps because it deals with a different country and its way. But the basic bottom line of addiction and human compassion is sure there.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Very good mixing in dialog with action - and believeable plot and story line. It read well. You toss in a number of words and names that stump me - perhaps because it deals with a different country and its way. But the basic bottom line of addiction and human compassion is sure there.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review, Gail. I appreciate your positive comments. Perhaps I should add a short glossary of terms to make things clearer. Anyway, thanks for hanging in there! Have a great weekend! All the best, Tony
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Yet another finely crafted addition. It reads beautifully as for some reason I seemed to get a very strong rhythm from it - as if the tempo and tone of the wording were determining the emotion as I moved through the storyline. Cocaine and absinthe - that ought to fry a few much needed brain cells. I had just a sip of absinthe once as I read so much about it I was curious - egads! I hadn't been so tipsy since Nickel Beer night in college LOL! Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Yet another finely crafted addition. It reads beautifully as for some reason I seemed to get a very strong rhythm from it - as if the tempo and tone of the wording were determining the emotion as I moved through the storyline. Cocaine and absinthe - that ought to fry a few much needed brain cells. I had just a sip of absinthe once as I read so much about it I was curious - egads! I hadn't been so tipsy since Nickel Beer night in college LOL! Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Monica, and for your comments about the rhythm of the writing in this chapter. I once had a wipe-out on absinthe, too. A most forgettable occasion! LOL
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LOL! That stuff should be marked lethal.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an interesting turn of events, Tony. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job with all of the details. Everything is in order and the story flow naturally. The drug scenes were written well. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This is an interesting turn of events, Tony. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job with all of the details. Everything is in order and the story flow naturally. The drug scenes were written well. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Very many thanks, Jan. I appreciate your supportive comments. Have a great weekend! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hmm, more intrigue! I hope we get to hear what Alain had to say in the next part. Poor Kayla, she's really in a bad way and will be for a while. This is a wonderful continuation, Tony, your pacing is perfect. I noted a couple of tiny nits: Put a space between the last paragraphs, and you need a 'd' where I've shown below, nothing serious, just those sort of things that happen while your back is turned! :)) I look forward to the next part!! Sandra xx
had taken a (d)ifferent directon.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Hmm, more intrigue! I hope we get to hear what Alain had to say in the next part. Poor Kayla, she's really in a bad way and will be for a while. This is a wonderful continuation, Tony, your pacing is perfect. I noted a couple of tiny nits: Put a space between the last paragraphs, and you need a 'd' where I've shown below, nothing serious, just those sort of things that happen while your back is turned! :)) I look forward to the next part!! Sandra xx
had taken a (d)ifferent directon.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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What a lovely review, Sandra - and a sixth star at this time of the week! Most unexpected! I appreciate the editing suggestions. All fixed now. Thank you! Have a great weekend. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
This chapter would seem to set a whole new scene, ready for exposure in the future. Despite being lost in its many convolutions, I still find your skill as a raconteur holds me spellbound. I keep saying to myself, perhaps next time, with one more shake this kaleidoscope will resolve itself into a pattern that will give meaning to the whole.
Recently, reading some of the horror story contest entries, I had a similar feeling, but few of those gripped me with any kind of passion unlike this story.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This chapter would seem to set a whole new scene, ready for exposure in the future. Despite being lost in its many convolutions, I still find your skill as a raconteur holds me spellbound. I keep saying to myself, perhaps next time, with one more shake this kaleidoscope will resolve itself into a pattern that will give meaning to the whole.
Recently, reading some of the horror story contest entries, I had a similar feeling, but few of those gripped me with any kind of passion unlike this story.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review and comments, Jim. I keep shaking the kaleidoscope with the same hope. Have a great weekend. Best wishes, Tony.