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Comment from JudyE
It's starting to get really interesting. I don't have any suggestions and I wasn't able to find any glitches. It's really well written and not a bit forced or contrived (IMHO) so I'm giving you six stars. Cheers. Judy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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It's starting to get really interesting. I don't have any suggestions and I wasn't able to find any glitches. It's really well written and not a bit forced or contrived (IMHO) so I'm giving you six stars. Cheers. Judy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Judy. I appreciate the sixth star and all the encouragement. On the downhill run now, I think.
Comment from Pantygynt
There was plenty of action here as the plot thickens. Most of it well described, maintaining the tension.
I noticed a couple of grammatical glitches -- unlike you I thought. You must be getting carried away with your own story.
'She brushed passed me, ignoring my mimicry.' This should read 'brushed past me
'She sat there, saying nothing and waiting for me to make the next move.' This strikes me as rather odd. I would have thought that, since it goes no further, it should read either, 'She sat there, saying nothing[,] (and) waiting for me to make the next move.' or alternatively, 'She sat there, saying nothing and (waiting) [waited] for me to make the next move.'
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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There was plenty of action here as the plot thickens. Most of it well described, maintaining the tension.
I noticed a couple of grammatical glitches -- unlike you I thought. You must be getting carried away with your own story.
'She brushed passed me, ignoring my mimicry.' This should read 'brushed past me
'She sat there, saying nothing and waiting for me to make the next move.' This strikes me as rather odd. I would have thought that, since it goes no further, it should read either, 'She sat there, saying nothing[,] (and) waiting for me to make the next move.' or alternatively, 'She sat there, saying nothing and (waiting) [waited] for me to make the next move.'
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Jim. Can't think how 'passed' got past me. The Americans seem not to like the 't' endings (e.g. 'learned' instead of 'learnt'). They must be getting to me!
On the downhill run now, I think.
Comment from estory
This was a great chapter and lots of the untied loose ends are being tied together here, as we find out how Charles has been lured into this espionage ring by Helen and then blackmailed into becoming a tool of their's. And all done through the steely dialogue. I think the descriptions of Durand, with that metallic pin and cold stone, paint a good picture of her part in the story. The story is coming into focus and the intrigue is dense and there lots of possibilities moving forward. The suspense is building too. estory
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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This was a great chapter and lots of the untied loose ends are being tied together here, as we find out how Charles has been lured into this espionage ring by Helen and then blackmailed into becoming a tool of their's. And all done through the steely dialogue. I think the descriptions of Durand, with that metallic pin and cold stone, paint a good picture of her part in the story. The story is coming into focus and the intrigue is dense and there lots of possibilities moving forward. The suspense is building too. estory
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments. Yes, I?m beginning to tie up a few of the loose ends. Glad to hear that it?s coming together for you. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Tootsie55
Another great chapter. Madame Durand has reappeared and somehow seems to be tied up in this supposedly MI5 thing of the British constabulary. Seems we can review on both accounts for the time being.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Another great chapter. Madame Durand has reappeared and somehow seems to be tied up in this supposedly MI5 thing of the British constabulary. Seems we can review on both accounts for the time being.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks - the first time I've received a 12-star review! I'm honoured!
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Yeah well he fixed whatever it was so no more hehe.
Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a great twist this is. So Madame was a part of all the scheme supposedly for the good of the country what not! Cloak and dagger stuff ahead, I presume? No spags.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Wow! What a great twist this is. So Madame was a part of all the scheme supposedly for the good of the country what not! Cloak and dagger stuff ahead, I presume? No spags.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks - the first time I've received a 12-star review! I'm honoured!
Yes - it looks as though Charles may have got himself involved in a spot of espionage. Albeit unwillingly.
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Yeah seems that Air Vice Marshall was a shyster as well huh!
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No more 12 star reviews Tom has fixed whatever it was. It was fair though.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh this gets more intriguing all the time. I guess Mme Durand is not really just a magazine editor. She must also be in some kind of espionage. Poor Charles!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Oh this gets more intriguing all the time. I guess Mme Durand is not really just a magazine editor. She must also be in some kind of espionage. Poor Charles!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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There certainly does seem to be more to Mme Durand than initially met the eye. It'll be interesting to see how Charles responds to this.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi TF,
You have crafted yet another intriguing chapter, my friend. You have left me wondering abouf his visitor, the long-prange plan and whether he will escape or go along. Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Hi TF,
You have crafted yet another intriguing chapter, my friend. You have left me wondering abouf his visitor, the long-prange plan and whether he will escape or go along. Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review, Jan. some of this may seem a bit confusing as it harks back to much earlier chapters in the book.
Comment from Ben Colder
Sorry to be coming in late reading your work. Character at the door , description is spot on. The chain dropping is important and now the story. I find nothing wrong. Very enjoyable.
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Sorry to be coming in late reading your work. Character at the door , description is spot on. The chain dropping is important and now the story. I find nothing wrong. Very enjoyable.
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Ben. Appreciated. (I have read so many 6-word poems recently that have been contest entries, that I assumed yours was, too.)