The French Letter
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. The long lost sister of Helen was noticed in the Mouli Roughe show where she was a dancer. The two sisters meet up and it seems Kayla has her suspisions about Jeanne.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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A very well-written chapter. The long lost sister of Helen was noticed in the Mouli Roughe show where she was a dancer. The two sisters meet up and it seems Kayla has her suspisions about Jeanne.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks!
Comment from LIJ Red
Excellent writing that carries me through landscapes as alien as the back of the moon...and a dramatic story line that bounces right along. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Excellent writing that carries me through landscapes as alien as the back of the moon...and a dramatic story line that bounces right along. Excellent post.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Appreciated.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is just wonderful story writing and what a story! So Kayla killed her attacker and only found out the next day that it was so. Wow. And in Bangkok of all places. If caught and found guilty it would be a sure death sentence. What now?
I loved the scene outside the stage door when Kayla finally appeared to be greeted by the theatrical Andre aka Scaramouche. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Hi Tony, this is just wonderful story writing and what a story! So Kayla killed her attacker and only found out the next day that it was so. Wow. And in Bangkok of all places. If caught and found guilty it would be a sure death sentence. What now?
I loved the scene outside the stage door when Kayla finally appeared to be greeted by the theatrical Andre aka Scaramouche. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Ulla. Glad you are still enjoying it. I appreciate the extra star. All the best, Tony
Comment from Debbie Pope
And then what is a great question. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Kayla makes Helen look stupid and gullible--not the strong character that I thought she was. Helen is spunky, but naive.
Your writing is professional.i can never give you helpful comments. I can just tell you my impressions. Hope that is helpful.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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And then what is a great question. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Kayla makes Helen look stupid and gullible--not the strong character that I thought she was. Helen is spunky, but naive.
Your writing is professional.i can never give you helpful comments. I can just tell you my impressions. Hope that is helpful.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Debbie. I particularly appreciate this review as it puts out a warning signal about consistency of character. Kayla is definitely the stronger sister - more streetwise, perhaps - but I don't want this to be too much at the expense of Helen. I'm hoping that, as the story progresses, their different personalities will complement each other.
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Usually Helen looks very strong. At least she looks spunky for sure.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
WELL. WELL, WELL!!!! I am not sure what to say, but I am pretty sure that Helen was being set up as a mule to run opium for the Mafia and Jeanne is a very suspicious person as I had already suspected. Where do we go from here???? I LOVE this story.
His monocle fell from his eye, dangling from a silken sash, flaccid as the appendage of an aging gigolo. (great description)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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WELL. WELL, WELL!!!! I am not sure what to say, but I am pretty sure that Helen was being set up as a mule to run opium for the Mafia and Jeanne is a very suspicious person as I had already suspected. Where do we go from here???? I LOVE this story.
His monocle fell from his eye, dangling from a silken sash, flaccid as the appendage of an aging gigolo. (great description)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Barbara. I appreciate the extra star. I seem to have got Kayla into a sticky situation here. I hope that I can get her out of it again in one piece! As you say, where to now? I'll have to leave that up to Charles, the narrator.
Comment from apky
A wonderful continuation.
Kayla seems to have been through quite a bit and like Helen I'm curious to know more. When she described how she fought off Bhukari, it reminded me of my story chapter which I've just posted - Fairuza forced into a fight to defend herself.
And poor Scaramouche. He was so delightful I didn't want him off the "set" so to speak. Anyway, now we have a giant leap with much to be said or learnt.
A definite six, which I still have, thank God.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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A wonderful continuation.
Kayla seems to have been through quite a bit and like Helen I'm curious to know more. When she described how she fought off Bhukari, it reminded me of my story chapter which I've just posted - Fairuza forced into a fight to defend herself.
And poor Scaramouche. He was so delightful I didn't want him off the "set" so to speak. Anyway, now we have a giant leap with much to be said or learnt.
A definite six, which I still have, thank God.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank apky. I appreciate the validation of the extra star. I had fun creating Scaramouche. It would be a pity if he didn't reappear at some point! I shall have to have a look at your latest chapter. Thanks for the heads-up on that. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an ending!! LOL, ...and then what? Lol, absolute classic! What a brilliant chapter, Tony, I loved it. Poor Scaramouche, he went off with his tail between his legs!! Well, now we have more of the story, and what a story Kayla has to tell! Now she is a murderess, she'll have to be careful that she isn't identified as the person who killed him. So, as the great Helen so cleverly said, ... and then what? lol. Well done, my friend, superb chapter again. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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What an ending!! LOL, ...and then what? Lol, absolute classic! What a brilliant chapter, Tony, I loved it. Poor Scaramouche, he went off with his tail between his legs!! Well, now we have more of the story, and what a story Kayla has to tell! Now she is a murderess, she'll have to be careful that she isn't identified as the person who killed him. So, as the great Helen so cleverly said, ... and then what? lol. Well done, my friend, superb chapter again. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Sandra. Glad this one went down well. I appreciate the extra star! Glad you enjoyed Scaramouche. Now Charles has four days to come up with a satisfactory answer to Helen's question! At least he doesn't have a new puppy to disturb his writing!
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Oh, have you got a new puppy? What breed? How wonderful! xxx
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He's a Miniature Schnauzer, ten weeks old with very sharp little teeth and a rather small bladder! He features on my latest profile picture.
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I'll take a look. I have to laugh at the very small bladder! LOL, the imagery in those words are umm, very vivid! lol. :))
Comment from giraffmang
Super continuation once again. Charles' phrasing is excellent and is a colourful narrator.
A dour doorman ground - dour's a great word, not used much these days. Perfect for the French! lol
flaccid as the appendage of an aging gigolo - very nice.
I broke a finger nail trying to gouge - fingernail could be a single word here.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Super continuation once again. Charles' phrasing is excellent and is a colourful narrator.
A dour doorman ground - dour's a great word, not used much these days. Perfect for the French! lol
flaccid as the appendage of an aging gigolo - very nice.
I broke a finger nail trying to gouge - fingernail could be a single word here.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, G. I appreciate the extra star and your generous comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sugarray77
This is an exciting part of your story. You did a good job with the reunion section... even providing an over the top Scaramouche....I like how you have different levels and relationships going that support the theme. The tension is definitely mounting... Great job.
Melissa
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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This is an exciting part of your story. You did a good job with the reunion section... even providing an over the top Scaramouche....I like how you have different levels and relationships going that support the theme. The tension is definitely mounting... Great job.
Melissa
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Melissa. Glad you enjoyed Scaramouche! Best wishes, Tony