The French Letter
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Comment from Adri7enne
I was thinking how the quality of writing has improved substantially since my two year hiatus from this site. I read your piece, comparing it to an old Leon Uris novel I'm reading now and it held my attention every bit as well as Uris. I enjoyed the driving scene. Having driven in Canada, I can appreciate the risks of driving half blind through winter storms. I like how you describe the scenes, giving us a taste of Versailles. Well done, Tony.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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I was thinking how the quality of writing has improved substantially since my two year hiatus from this site. I read your piece, comparing it to an old Leon Uris novel I'm reading now and it held my attention every bit as well as Uris. I enjoyed the driving scene. Having driven in Canada, I can appreciate the risks of driving half blind through winter storms. I like how you describe the scenes, giving us a taste of Versailles. Well done, Tony.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thanks very much, Adrienne. Six stars and a comparison with Leon Uris! As Helen said, "Flattery will get you anywhere". LOL
Seriously, I very much appreciate your kind words. It is years since I have met those sorts of driving conditions, but I do remember meeting them a few times when I was based in Germany with the armed forces. That was a while ago now!
Comment from heart of Lou
Congratulations on the continuation of your very well written and entertaining story. Your characters are interesting. You did miss adding the word 'the' in the sentence 'quite a scandal attached to (the) name.'
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Congratulations on the continuation of your very well written and entertaining story. Your characters are interesting. You did miss adding the word 'the' in the sentence 'quite a scandal attached to (the) name.'
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Lou. I appreciate your keen eyes in picking up that edit needed. Now fixed. It's so easy to read what you thought you had written when self-editing!
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No problem! I hope others would do the same for me!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So far their search is empty but the future does have a promising outlook. I hope they find out something. I am wondering why anybody would dye a poodle pink or any dog. Poor dog. LOL
"Oh, dear! This doesn't look very promising for our picnic!" (I think 'very' isn't needed it. It's redundant.)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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So far their search is empty but the future does have a promising outlook. I hope they find out something. I am wondering why anybody would dye a poodle pink or any dog. Poor dog. LOL
"Oh, dear! This doesn't look very promising for our picnic!" (I think 'very' isn't needed it. It's redundant.)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Barbara. Some people do pretty weird things with their dogs. I don't understand it either.
I've taken out the redundant 'very' and it does read better without it. I am sometimes in two minds about excising redundant words from dialogue, for many people do use them when they are speaking.
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I agree, but sometimes the sentence flows better.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter and it seems that the two are hot on the tail to solve the mystery, if Helen's driving skills don't let them land in the cemetry, they will get the answers they're looking for.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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A very well-written chapter and it seems that the two are hot on the tail to solve the mystery, if Helen's driving skills don't let them land in the cemetry, they will get the answers they're looking for.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra. Appreciated.
Comment from Debbie Pope
You are definitely "on the trail of something exciting here." This is a great story, and it appears as though the best is yet to come. I love your car ride. Your dialog should be scripted for a movie. It is extremely funny. And, I like the relationship between Helen and, I can't find his name. I like their interaction. Helen is a strong woman and can hold her own. That makes for a great character these days.
I look forward to meeting Monsieur le Cure.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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You are definitely "on the trail of something exciting here." This is a great story, and it appears as though the best is yet to come. I love your car ride. Your dialog should be scripted for a movie. It is extremely funny. And, I like the relationship between Helen and, I can't find his name. I like their interaction. Helen is a strong woman and can hold her own. That makes for a great character these days.
I look forward to meeting Monsieur le Cure.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Debbie. I appreciate your kind words and the six stars! A movie script - now there's a thought. I guess that this will need to become a best-seller first! I wish! LOL
Comment from Pantygynt
What a series of enjoyable repasts I am being fed this Sunday. This becomes more and more intriguing as one reads on, a hair-raising car ride, at least as exciting as Steve McQueens chase in Bullitt, a pink poodle and now we are about to dive into a century old archive. Merde! What next?
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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What a series of enjoyable repasts I am being fed this Sunday. This becomes more and more intriguing as one reads on, a hair-raising car ride, at least as exciting as Steve McQueens chase in Bullitt, a pink poodle and now we are about to dive into a century old archive. Merde! What next?
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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You're right - there's been some good writing about at the start of this week. I've already spent most of my six star allocation. I'm beginning to get into the swing of writing this now. I never really thought I'd get much beyond 5000 words, but having quite a few people reading and commenting is a strong motivator. It's a luxury that few novice writers get.
Comment from royowen
The mismatched twosome, (or are they?) continue their escapade, first encountering a massive, almost undrivable in storm, hiding behind a truck's slipstream. But miraculously arriving at a destination, and finding out how to reach their final objective, the plot thickens. Well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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The mismatched twosome, (or are they?) continue their escapade, first encountering a massive, almost undrivable in storm, hiding behind a truck's slipstream. But miraculously arriving at a destination, and finding out how to reach their final objective, the plot thickens. Well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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They certainly seem to be gradually coming together as a twosome. Perhaps there is still a mismatch - I'm not sure! We'll have to see.
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Welcome Tony
Comment from kiwijenny
You get a six because of the details...loved the pink pooch looking reproachfully at her owner. Loved the maniacal driving,..loved the French facts and the hunchback reference. Love that I'm reading a novel because I never get to. Keep writing and I will keep reading...usually when I read novels there's no hot meals or clothes in the drawers . I get all in .
God bless
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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You get a six because of the details...loved the pink pooch looking reproachfully at her owner. Loved the maniacal driving,..loved the French facts and the hunchback reference. Love that I'm reading a novel because I never get to. Keep writing and I will keep reading...usually when I read novels there's no hot meals or clothes in the drawers . I get all in .
God bless
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Love your review, Jenny! So encouraging! Six stars, too. You've made my day!
Comment from Ricky1024
The road to vercelli's was very well written rich and semen imagery it was no grammar issues and as it flowed very well the objective content was great and adjectives content excellent and exceptional descriptive measures are lined up perfectly thanks for this and have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
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The road to vercelli's was very well written rich and semen imagery it was no grammar issues and as it flowed very well the objective content was great and adjectives content excellent and exceptional descriptive measures are lined up perfectly thanks for this and have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Ricky.