Perennials of War
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Comment from Ricky1024
Thanks for this post.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thanks for this post.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Apparently they've shot and killed at least four "Russians" and even Anderson killed one of them. Why would they be foolish enough to storm a heavily guarded compound-like condo in the middle of Chicago?, they must be desperate. But the police have comevandvtaken care of three more. Well done Barb,. Great action episode, blessings, Roy
Typo : He (shown) a flashlight into the room. Shone?
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Apparently they've shot and killed at least four "Russians" and even Anderson killed one of them. Why would they be foolish enough to storm a heavily guarded compound-like condo in the middle of Chicago?, they must be desperate. But the police have comevandvtaken care of three more. Well done Barb,. Great action episode, blessings, Roy
Typo : He (shown) a flashlight into the room. Shone?
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you. I will fix that typo, right now.
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Good job,
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
What ever corrections you made are great.
Your action scenes to me were just fine.
The only one think I wonder should be in this chapter is- when Anderson sat Shanna As she sat in a chair, he handed her a flashlight and kissed her cheek. "You'll be safe. I promise.
((( Don't use the light any more than necessary. I don't want them to know you're here."))) If Anderson wanted Shana to be safe why even give her Flash light?
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Barb
What ever corrections you made are great.
Your action scenes to me were just fine.
The only one think I wonder should be in this chapter is- when Anderson sat Shanna As she sat in a chair, he handed her a flashlight and kissed her cheek. "You'll be safe. I promise.
((( Don't use the light any more than necessary. I don't want them to know you're here."))) If Anderson wanted Shana to be safe why even give her Flash light?
Gert
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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I figured he thought she might need it at some point and i didn't want her without. Not sure. I will think about it. Thank you.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Zue65
My dear author you don't even need suggestions, because you are so good at what you do. I even look up to you as a veteran writer and reading your work made me realize I can never be a prose writer because I don't have the gift like yours. Thanks for sharing another excellent post.
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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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My dear author you don't even need suggestions, because you are so good at what you do. I even look up to you as a veteran writer and reading your work made me realize I can never be a prose writer because I don't have the gift like yours. Thanks for sharing another excellent post.
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate.