Perennials of War
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Well done, well said this chapter in continuation, there is a natural catch in the beginning, stepwise steady plot development, dialogues are realistic, curious and violent ending. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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Well done, well said this chapter in continuation, there is a natural catch in the beginning, stepwise steady plot development, dialogues are realistic, curious and violent ending. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ulla
A great chapter Barbara. No wonder they have difficulty accepting all the help from Anderson. It is very generous, after all. I have some difficulty with the concern of Shane's parents. She's 25!!! Surely she can look after herself. We're in 2018 not in 1918! Sorry if I got carried away. All the best. Ulla:)))
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A great chapter Barbara. No wonder they have difficulty accepting all the help from Anderson. It is very generous, after all. I have some difficulty with the concern of Shane's parents. She's 25!!! Surely she can look after herself. We're in 2018 not in 1918! Sorry if I got carried away. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Not a problem. Shana's led a very sheltered life. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Barbara - must have been 80 percent dialogue. You are so good with this technique to drive your story and then your wonderful prose to set it all up. Maybe when I grow up I'll be more like you! Always warm regards, Bill
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Barbara - must have been 80 percent dialogue. You are so good with this technique to drive your story and then your wonderful prose to set it all up. Maybe when I grow up I'll be more like you! Always warm regards, Bill
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LOL It's always a joy hearing from.
Comment from judiverse
So glad I have sixes again. Your write deserves it. Benjamin is very traditional. He can't accept that Shana is 25 and capable of making her own decisions. They can't believe that Anderson is able and willing to do so much for the family. It reminds me of Darcy in "Pride and Prejudice" rushing to help Elizabeth's family. Excellent characterization, and I like the way you show the different attitudes as expressed by Benjamin and Anderson. I believe Shana will have the strength to do what she wants to. judi
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So glad I have sixes again. Your write deserves it. Benjamin is very traditional. He can't accept that Shana is 25 and capable of making her own decisions. They can't believe that Anderson is able and willing to do so much for the family. It reminds me of Darcy in "Pride and Prejudice" rushing to help Elizabeth's family. Excellent characterization, and I like the way you show the different attitudes as expressed by Benjamin and Anderson. I believe Shana will have the strength to do what she wants to. judi
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Shana will but, all in good time. LOL Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You're welcome. Shana is a great character. Very sensible. judi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
All seemed to sound very nice in this chapter until your closure of this chapter
She can lock the damn door," interrupted Anderson. "I won't break it down." At a sound of commotion, he glanced toward Shana and ran toward her, as he yanked a knife from his back waistband.
GAVE ME FRIGHT
Gert
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Hello Barb
All seemed to sound very nice in this chapter until your closure of this chapter
She can lock the damn door," interrupted Anderson. "I won't break it down." At a sound of commotion, he glanced toward Shana and ran toward her, as he yanked a knife from his back waistband.
GAVE ME FRIGHT
Gert
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I hope it all works out. LOL Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from c_lucas
It looks as if Shana's parents are taking the situation without knowledge of the problems involved. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
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It looks as if Shana's parents are taking the situation without knowledge of the problems involved. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
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Shana's parents have no clue about the problems. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sugarray77
Well written dialogue and story line. Easy to follow and read. It builds the mystery and suspense in a good flow and adds the right dramatic moment. Well done. I'm looking forward to reading more.
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Well written dialogue and story line. Easy to follow and read. It builds the mystery and suspense in a good flow and adds the right dramatic moment. Well done. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter again. I noticed the missing Expression marks from the continued dialogue but I understand that is ok for same person speaking. Getting exciting looks like.
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Good chapter again. I noticed the missing Expression marks from the continued dialogue but I understand that is ok for same person speaking. Getting exciting looks like.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check it out, just in case.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
it seems that Benjamin and Anderson are as strong willed as one another. Just one has considerably more money... and influence it seems.
Nice stopping off point.
I won't break it down." - need opening speech marks here.
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Hi there,
it seems that Benjamin and Anderson are as strong willed as one another. Just one has considerably more money... and influence it seems.
Nice stopping off point.
I won't break it down." - need opening speech marks here.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I will fix that area. Thank you for catching it. I wonder where that quotation mark went. LOL
Comment from royowen
Things are really hotting up Barbara. Poor old Anderson is trying to convince Benjamin that to stay protected and secure is far better thank a very frail and dangerous thought of reputation opposed to sensible procedure, Jews are hard to crack, (look at the difficulties Jesus had with compassion and grace versus tradition and law) well dine Barbara, great post, blessings, Roy
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Things are really hotting up Barbara. Poor old Anderson is trying to convince Benjamin that to stay protected and secure is far better thank a very frail and dangerous thought of reputation opposed to sensible procedure, Jews are hard to crack, (look at the difficulties Jesus had with compassion and grace versus tradition and law) well dine Barbara, great post, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement. I have often wondered about that; AND Jesus was a Jew and lived among them.
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And Jesus gave the law to Moses, the ultimate paradox Barbara