Perennials of War
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Comment from rheabug
This was another great post. Thanks for sharing. Love the story line and I am sure others are liking it too. I saw nothing that needed to be edited. Have a great week. Hugs...
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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This was another great post. Thanks for sharing. Love the story line and I am sure others are liking it too. I saw nothing that needed to be edited. Have a great week. Hugs...
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Lawsuits makes lawyers wealthy. The working class usually lose. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Lawsuits makes lawyers wealthy. The working class usually lose. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Oh so true. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara.
I didn't realise that American attornies were only licenced to practice in some states and not others--interesting. I suppose federal law differs from state to state.
This section is confusing. Maybe it could be broken up into different lines. I had a hard time working out who spoke. Too many names and actions in one small paragraph:
Helen picked up Emily's glass. "I'll be right back."
Anderson watched Helen and shook his head. "White milk is fine." Emily pouted, as he continued, "That's why I want to hire an attorney who specializes in these types of situations." / Helen/ Anderson / Emily
Anderson is watching Helen, shaking his head and talking--to Emily or Helen? *maybe: Emily pouted--needs a new line.
Nicole
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Hi, Barbara.
I didn't realise that American attornies were only licenced to practice in some states and not others--interesting. I suppose federal law differs from state to state.
This section is confusing. Maybe it could be broken up into different lines. I had a hard time working out who spoke. Too many names and actions in one small paragraph:
Helen picked up Emily's glass. "I'll be right back."
Anderson watched Helen and shook his head. "White milk is fine." Emily pouted, as he continued, "That's why I want to hire an attorney who specializes in these types of situations." / Helen/ Anderson / Emily
Anderson is watching Helen, shaking his head and talking--to Emily or Helen? *maybe: Emily pouted--needs a new line.
Nicole
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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I will recheck that area. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter or part there of, once again. I love the interaction with Emily and Shana and Shana's obvious delight in the little girl. We got a Tiramasus(sp??) cake as part of a birthday thing a few years ago. I loved it!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Great chapter or part there of, once again. I love the interaction with Emily and Shana and Shana's obvious delight in the little girl. We got a Tiramasus(sp??) cake as part of a birthday thing a few years ago. I loved it!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the help. I have corrected that word. It can't be plural. LOL
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. Now they are stirring the pot, as the old saying goes, and I don't expect things to stay quiet too long. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. Now they are stirring the pot, as the old saying goes, and I don't expect things to stay quiet too long. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from royowen
Whle Kuznetsov endeavours to find a lawyer, he has to find someone who's an expert in artwork, a person who can be trusted in this form of pursuit, so, thing are hotting up, of course Shana says she can't afford one, but Anderso can! Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo Emily, (quite) playing. Quit? 2: But I can(,) so let me help.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Whle Kuznetsov endeavours to find a lawyer, he has to find someone who's an expert in artwork, a person who can be trusted in this form of pursuit, so, thing are hotting up, of course Shana says she can't afford one, but Anderso can! Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo Emily, (quite) playing. Quit? 2: But I can(,) so let me help.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
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Glad to Barbara
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Barbara;
I wonder that Shana really couldn't keep herself from exploding. They actually spoke with the person that has the painting!
I will be surprised at the receipt - whom was the painting purchased from?
A few nits: '"Emily, quite(quit) playing or...'
'"I understand, but I can(+,) so let me help.'
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Hi Barbara;
I wonder that Shana really couldn't keep herself from exploding. They actually spoke with the person that has the painting!
I will be surprised at the receipt - whom was the painting purchased from?
A few nits: '"Emily, quite(quit) playing or...'
'"I understand, but I can(+,) so let me help.'
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Janilou
I am so glad I am not the only one who can read their own work over and over again, find all the mistakes and then discover through good reviewers that Im apparently blind! Lol
Your partial chapter is very well written. I found just one possible typo.
"Can Aunt Helen put some chocolate in it? It (takes) like milk. Mommy let me have strawberry milk."
tastes?
Hope this helps
All the best.
Jan
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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I am so glad I am not the only one who can read their own work over and over again, find all the mistakes and then discover through good reviewers that Im apparently blind! Lol
Your partial chapter is very well written. I found just one possible typo.
"Can Aunt Helen put some chocolate in it? It (takes) like milk. Mommy let me have strawberry milk."
tastes?
Hope this helps
All the best.
Jan
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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I can't believe I did that. Thank you for the catch. I do appreciate it.
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At least you only had ONE tiny typo. Last time I posted a chapter thinking I just had to have caught every error, the first reviewer found two and later another found A few more. Sigh.