Perennials of War
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written again and moves the story along well I like your references to king Lear I enjoyed well done again regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written again and moves the story along well I like your references to king Lear I enjoyed well done again regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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King Lear will be important later on in the novel. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rasmine
Good writing. :)
I have one question -- is there action going to happen sooner or later with the painting? I picture this being like a James Bond movie. :P
Take care
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Good writing. :)
I have one question -- is there action going to happen sooner or later with the painting? I picture this being like a James Bond movie. :P
Take care
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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LOl There will be action concerning the painting soon. This post is important because of Shana's relationship with her dad.
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from trumby
Well written piece of discourse.
I notice that, in most romance novels, the hero seems to be a billionaire for some reason or other.
Sorry that I've been away for awhile. I must have missed some of your writing.
Shona sounds like a very caring person.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Well written piece of discourse.
I notice that, in most romance novels, the hero seems to be a billionaire for some reason or other.
Sorry that I've been away for awhile. I must have missed some of your writing.
Shona sounds like a very caring person.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. In my two previous romance, the heroine was the rich person, not the hero.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm thinking that Shana is wondering if this would happen between her and her father. Shakespear's work is still as up with the times as it was all those years ago. Would Shana's father banish her if she fell in love with Drew. Hmm. Have a lovely few days off, Barbara! Another fabulous part. :) Sandra xxx
ps. I still want those dogs!!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I'm thinking that Shana is wondering if this would happen between her and her father. Shakespear's work is still as up with the times as it was all those years ago. Would Shana's father banish her if she fell in love with Drew. Hmm. Have a lovely few days off, Barbara! Another fabulous part. :) Sandra xxx
ps. I still want those dogs!!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for catching the reason for this post. I was afraid people wouldn't. It 's very important.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Good chapter--even includes a lesson in Shakespeare. Well written with natural dialogue and believable characters. I enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Good chapter--even includes a lesson in Shakespeare. Well written with natural dialogue and believable characters. I enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
So the scene is set for some advancement on the plot. After Shana had explained the reasons for her interest in the painting, Jeff takes the dogs fo a walk, with a coffee and dogs in tow. Well done, Barbara, good progress, with the story, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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So the scene is set for some advancement on the plot. After Shana had explained the reasons for her interest in the painting, Jeff takes the dogs fo a walk, with a coffee and dogs in tow. Well done, Barbara, good progress, with the story, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Yes, this post will become important in the future. Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara. I enjoyed reading this coffee cup chatter. I'm not familiar with King Lear's story, so it was a treat to hear. He sounded like a foolish man, but his daugher's honesty probably shocked and offended him.
Suggestion:
"Good morning, Shana," greeted Jeff.
"Good morning, Shana," Jeff greeted.
By putting the speaker's name before the action (greeted) the reader knows in an instant who to picture. It's a style choice--not a rule.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Hi, Barbara. I enjoyed reading this coffee cup chatter. I'm not familiar with King Lear's story, so it was a treat to hear. He sounded like a foolish man, but his daugher's honesty probably shocked and offended him.
Suggestion:
"Good morning, Shana," greeted Jeff.
"Good morning, Shana," Jeff greeted.
By putting the speaker's name before the action (greeted) the reader knows in an instant who to picture. It's a style choice--not a rule.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I will make that change. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Ric Myworld
"For nothing is neither good nor bad, but thinking makes it so," if you can believe that malarkey. Shakespeare's brilliant mind came along so far before his time. Him and Truman Capote could have done the Watusi together had he just waited. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)â?¦
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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"For nothing is neither good nor bad, but thinking makes it so," if you can believe that malarkey. Shakespeare's brilliant mind came along so far before his time. Him and Truman Capote could have done the Watusi together had he just waited. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)â?¦
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Another in a long line of excellent posts. I liked how you worked Shakespeare into the post. The flow was smooth,the dialogue natural and interactions between your your characters natural and not forced. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Another in a long line of excellent posts. I liked how you worked Shakespeare into the post. The flow was smooth,the dialogue natural and interactions between your your characters natural and not forced. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
OUT OF SIXES
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Lilol
Nice but I think that this chapter should have a little more sentences to it and focus on the finding of the painting also rather than just King Lear.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Nice but I think that this chapter should have a little more sentences to it and focus on the finding of the painting also rather than just King Lear.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I feel this chapter will have a GREAT impact on future chapters when it comes to Shana and her dad. I'm sorry you didn't pick up the relevance of that; others have.