Lessons Learned and Spiritual
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi DebiThis is a smoothly rhymed poem. Appeareth and Spirit seems forced because appeareth is the only Biblical style word in the poem and you have to hyphenate to make the slant rhyme more obvious.
Otherwise it is a good poem of your faith and show us what faith should be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Merry Christmas
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Hi DebiThis is a smoothly rhymed poem. Appeareth and Spirit seems forced because appeareth is the only Biblical style word in the poem and you have to hyphenate to make the slant rhyme more obvious.
Otherwise it is a good poem of your faith and show us what faith should be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Merry Christmas
Joan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you Joan, I appreciate your kind words for my poem so very much!
I always appreciate feedback, so thank you for that. I did do some things on that line to fix the forced feel to it, and I'm not sure why it wasn't showing the hyphenated word, but it was all screwed up. I had to delete it all and redo it. Hopefully it is fixed now. Something had happened to my poem and picture maybe about the time when you were reading it. I was having technical difficulties. Like I said, hopefully it is ok now. Thank you again, my sweet friend!
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No problem, Debi.I
I like the change. Technological glitches are a pain.
Joan
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh, I so agree with you. Jesus and His father are such truly wonderful friends. I don't make it to church every Sunday, as I do Livestream, but they definitely are with a person no matter where we sit to listen to a sermon.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Oh, I so agree with you. Jesus and His father are such truly wonderful friends. I don't make it to church every Sunday, as I do Livestream, but they definitely are with a person no matter where we sit to listen to a sermon.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you Roemary, I appreciate your kind words for my poem so very much! I'm not sure if you saw the mess that had happened to my poem and picture when you were reading it. I was having technical difficulties, but I think all is fixed now. Thank you again, my sweet friend!
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Yes, I did see the technical difficulties. I'm sure it is fine now.
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Thank you Rosemary, and I do appreciate it very much my friend. Your poem is absolutely wonderful. I didn't review them all yet, but plan to.
Comment from estory
A great praise poem, and I think its appropriate for Thanksgiving. Most people seem to have forgotten that Thanksgiving was originally a day conceived to give thanks to God for your blessings in the year. It's very rooted in the bible and biblical philosophy of faith. I liked how you put in there how the Spirit is the consciousness of our action. It is important to understand that we must accept we are failing in life and agree to be changed and saved by Jesus in order to live in the body of Christ. Today people seem to want to make up their own rules. estory
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
A great praise poem, and I think its appropriate for Thanksgiving. Most people seem to have forgotten that Thanksgiving was originally a day conceived to give thanks to God for your blessings in the year. It's very rooted in the bible and biblical philosophy of faith. I liked how you put in there how the Spirit is the consciousness of our action. It is important to understand that we must accept we are failing in life and agree to be changed and saved by Jesus in order to live in the body of Christ. Today people seem to want to make up their own rules. estory
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Hi there, and thank you so much for your lovely words for my poem. I appreciate it so much. Can I ask a favor of you? When you read my poem, did it look terribly large or could you look to see if it does now? I just got a message from Jan, saying that it is way too big, picture and poem. And it is not showing on my ipad. So I am worried if that is just her computer or maybe she made something bigger before with her fingers and forgot to bring it back in. Thank you, I truly appreciate you kind comments and your answer!
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Yeah it did seem a bit out of drawing, as it were. This site can have some weird effects on the posting. I use the traditional posting method try to keep it simple. estory
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Thank you so much. I had to delete it all and start over. Hopefully it's fixed now, Thanks again.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Superb, Debi! What a lovely poem, and how beautifully it's written. You've put into words all that we feel and believe, but you did it better than I could have done. This is wonderful, my friend, and I wish you the best luck in the world in the contest. Loved it!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Superb, Debi! What a lovely poem, and how beautifully it's written. You've put into words all that we feel and believe, but you did it better than I could have done. This is wonderful, my friend, and I wish you the best luck in the world in the contest. Loved it!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Hi Sandra, thank you so much for your lovely words for my poem. I appreciate it so much. Can I ask a favor of you? When you read my poem, did it look terribly large or could you look to see if it does now? I just got a message from Jan, saying that it is way too big, picture and poem. And it is not showing on my ipad. So I am worried if that is just her computer or maybe she made something bigger before with her fingers and forgot to bring it back in. Thank you, I truly appreciate you kind comments and your answer.
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Yes it was large, and a big gap from the title until the beginning of your poem. The lines mingled with your picture and profile. But moving it, I was able to read it. I didn't say anything in case it was my laptop. I'm not sure what to suggest. xxxx
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Thank you Sandra, now I know it wasn't just Jans so I will write to Tom and ask him what is going on. Thanks again
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You're very welcome, Debi. I read it fine! xxx
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
You explained well the different ways the members of the trinity work in our lives-all together making one God. I'm so glad that they are at work in my life.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
You explained well the different ways the members of the trinity work in our lives-all together making one God. I'm so glad that they are at work in my life.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Hi Verna, thank you so much for your lovely words for my poem. I appreciate it so much. Can I ask a favor of you? When you read my poem, did it look terribly large or could you look to see if it does now? I just got a message from Jan, saying that it is way too big, picture and poem. And it is not showing on my ipad. So I am worried if that is just her computer or maybe she made something bigger before with her fingers and forgot to bring it back in. Thank you, I truly appreciate you kind comments and your answer
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AMEN!! Thank you for presenting this entire package for us. I enjoyed reading and listening. It warmed my heart. In today's world we need more of beautiful poetry like this. I continue to pray for your family.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
AMEN!! Thank you for presenting this entire package for us. I enjoyed reading and listening. It warmed my heart. In today's world we need more of beautiful poetry like this. I continue to pray for your family.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much Barb. I so appreciate your lovely words because I know you too have such a strong faith. Can I ask a favor and I hope you get this right away? I just got a message from Jan saying that my poem and picture are huge and taking up more than normal space, but is not showing that on my ipad. Could you look or did you notice that????
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Yes, it was huge and went into your profile listing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This skillfully-written, deeply reverent and joyous poem has moved me greatly. You have so concisely and definitively explained the precious significance of each member of the Trinity.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
This skillfully-written, deeply reverent and joyous poem has moved me greatly. You have so concisely and definitively explained the precious significance of each member of the Trinity.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Hi Janice, and thank you so much for your lovely words for my poem. I appreciate it so much. Thank you for the incredible gift of six stars too. You are always so sweet. ..... Can I ask a favor of you? When you read my poem, did it look terribly large or could you look to see if it does now? I just got a message from Jan, saying that it is way too big, picture and poem. And it is not showing on my ipad. So I am worried if that is just her computer or maybe she made something bigger before with her fingers and forgot to bring it back in. Thank you, I truly appreciate you kind comments and your answer!
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Yes, picture and poem are really BIG. :-)
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I had to delete everything and start over. Thank you so much Janice for looking. I hope it is fixed now because I couldn't see that from my end. You have no idea how much I appreciate you!!😘
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Comment from John Ciarmello
Beautiful, Debi, from your writing to the video of Jimmy fortune! I'm not an overly religious person, but I do believe, and I love that song. A delightful piece, Debi. Best JohnC
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Beautiful, Debi, from your writing to the video of Jimmy fortune! I'm not an overly religious person, but I do believe, and I love that song. A delightful piece, Debi. Best JohnC
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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John, you are always so sweet. And these inspirational poems were meant to give food for thought, which was perfect for the Holidays. Did you know that Jimmy Fortune was one of the Statler Brothers? I just love his voice and he is one of my favorite singers. Been to many concerts of his.
Thanks so much for the kind review and comments for my poem. I truly appreciate it my dear friend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine faithful write Debi and I felt your dedication to your beliefs here as you want to share your joy. Life eternal may exist and we hope it does, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
A fine faithful write Debi and I felt your dedication to your beliefs here as you want to share your joy. Life eternal may exist and we hope it does, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you Dolly. My faith is my greatest passion and I believe without it, we live in limbo. It's what keeps my joy, when there are times, nothing else works. So I thank you so much for your kind words for my poem. They are truly appreciated my lovely friend.
Comment from Sanku
Beautiful and deep sentiments, Debi. I loved the song also.The lines flows freely and the rhymes are incorporated naturally . That is a proof of your faith.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Beautiful and deep sentiments, Debi. I loved the song also.The lines flows freely and the rhymes are incorporated naturally . That is a proof of your faith.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Oh Santha, thank you for your lovely words for my poem. It is hard to go wrong when your heart is so deeply attached to the subject, as you so very much know through your faith. I appreciate also the gracious gift of six stars. You are so generous, my sweet friend. Thank you again!