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Comment from country ranch writer
Down on his luck seems he is stuck with people making fun of him and he's there ti try to find work and is very confused by it all.
11/13/2022--1:23 pm
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Down on his luck seems he is stuck with people making fun of him and he's there ti try to find work and is very confused by it all.
11/13/2022--1:23 pm
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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This is apparently a duplicate review. I hope I get to have two 6 star ratings, but I doubt it.
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Gremlins in my computer,
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your script is skillfully written and fun to read. The dialogue and scene descriptions are perfect and move the story along in a great manner. Nice work.
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Your script is skillfully written and fun to read. The dialogue and scene descriptions are perfect and move the story along in a great manner. Nice work.
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for your review and your kind words. I hope you continue along with my play.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent scene III, Jay, that has a lot of emotion from each character and the gallery.
-I think Zachery and Mr. Kincaid are trying to understand one another, but aren't accomplishing too much as it relates to the job situation.
-It seems like they are two lost souls trying to understand each other and their backgrounds.
-In doing so, there are some misconceptions along the way, especially when the gallery takes part in the dialogue.
-They seem to think he is well off and using them to show off who he is by using his "fancy talk," as they call it.
-They are interested in jobs and security, and they see Zachery as a threat. They really let him have it, you might say, but he is trying to tell them their impressions are not true; he will be out on the streets trying to stay warm while Mr. Kincaid is wondering whether he really wants a job.
-Well done, and you give us a lot to think about.
**Allow me a moment to finish my smile. Did you mean simile here since that was mentioned later?
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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-An excellent scene III, Jay, that has a lot of emotion from each character and the gallery.
-I think Zachery and Mr. Kincaid are trying to understand one another, but aren't accomplishing too much as it relates to the job situation.
-It seems like they are two lost souls trying to understand each other and their backgrounds.
-In doing so, there are some misconceptions along the way, especially when the gallery takes part in the dialogue.
-They seem to think he is well off and using them to show off who he is by using his "fancy talk," as they call it.
-They are interested in jobs and security, and they see Zachery as a threat. They really let him have it, you might say, but he is trying to tell them their impressions are not true; he will be out on the streets trying to stay warm while Mr. Kincaid is wondering whether he really wants a job.
-Well done, and you give us a lot to think about.
**Allow me a moment to finish my smile. Did you mean simile here since that was mentioned later?
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your close reading, Katharine. I'll have to search out the use of smile, which was intentional, but I hadn't though of its connection with Zachary's mention of Simile, later. I'll probably change it to "finish smiling". As to the "lost souls" reference ... look for a deeper dive into Mr. Kincade's soul next scene.
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You are welcome, Jay, put Katherine didn't give you this review😊😊 I appreciate your reply.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love Zachary. He is a thinker, a dreamer, a light in the darkness. There is an air of innocence in him despite his less than perfect upbringing. I'm sure bring illegitimate in the 1930s had its own set of challenges. He reminds me of Aaron in my story. Though Aaron isn't educated and more niave. This is getting good. Wait, it's been good, it's getting better and better. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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I love Zachary. He is a thinker, a dreamer, a light in the darkness. There is an air of innocence in him despite his less than perfect upbringing. I'm sure bring illegitimate in the 1930s had its own set of challenges. He reminds me of Aaron in my story. Though Aaron isn't educated and more niave. This is getting good. Wait, it's been good, it's getting better and better. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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I like that "light in the darkness". I thought of the same similarity when I read about Aaron. BTW, I sent out that letter Saturday. I tried Friday, but it was Veterans' day. I hope you have enough to go on with this scene to come up with some lyrics. No pressure, though. I know you're busy. Expect a big reveal about Mr. Kincade's past next scene.
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I cant wait.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I see this as an opera, really, I do. I enjoyed reading. I am cheering that Zachery gets a job. I have no clue what he's suited for, but I am cheering for him anyway.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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I see this as an opera, really, I do. I enjoyed reading. I am cheering that Zachery gets a job. I have no clue what he's suited for, but I am cheering for him anyway.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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An opera? Well, I'll take that as a compliment, Barbara. You'll get a deeper look into both Zachary and Mr. Kincade next scene. Thanks for the six stars, Barbara!