Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
Two well developed characters having a feel your way conversation. The flow is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are clear. The scene stays on point. It ends with an unresolved question which is good.
Thanks for a good read.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Two well developed characters having a feel your way conversation. The flow is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are clear. The scene stays on point. It ends with an unresolved question which is good.
Thanks for a good read.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Love the chapter and yup I get it it's hard to be in a romantic relationship when you live in different cities. There is something that needs to be corrected, and please forgive me for pointing this out, I know when you transfer text from a different format this happens a lot :""No tomatoes or jalape�±os." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Love the chapter and yup I get it it's hard to be in a romantic relationship when you live in different cities. There is something that needs to be corrected, and please forgive me for pointing this out, I know when you transfer text from a different format this happens a lot :""No tomatoes or jalape�±os." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I fixed that, once. I will recheck it. It might have reverted back. Thank you for pointing it out. I don't have a problem with people helping me.
Comment from judiverse
The Mexican Street corn sounds delicious. It sounds like Ali could very well establish herself as a lawyer in Texas. She might prefer it to corporate law. Great comments about the two Ali's. She did show a different side during her meeting with the abused women. Working out the pizza order is a great way of showing how they might work out their differences. Sometimes it seems like Ali is deliberately trying to complicate things, maybe because of what happened with Alan. Great development of characters. judi
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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The Mexican Street corn sounds delicious. It sounds like Ali could very well establish herself as a lawyer in Texas. She might prefer it to corporate law. Great comments about the two Ali's. She did show a different side during her meeting with the abused women. Working out the pizza order is a great way of showing how they might work out their differences. Sometimes it seems like Ali is deliberately trying to complicate things, maybe because of what happened with Alan. Great development of characters. judi
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Ali is being extremely careful this time around.
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You're welcome. Sounds like you're enjoying your summer. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter, and they're becoming more serious with each other. I like that. Below are some Spanish corrections.
No te he visto hace mucho tiempo. This is the correct way of saying it.
Me alegro que estas aqui. Or you could just say: Me alegro verte. = I'm glad to see you.
Quien es la quapa senora contigo? Again more natural and correct.
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter, and they're becoming more serious with each other. I like that. Below are some Spanish corrections.
No te he visto hace mucho tiempo. This is the correct way of saying it.
Me alegro que estas aqui. Or you could just say: Me alegro verte. = I'm glad to see you.
Quien es la quapa senora contigo? Again more natural and correct.
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I made the corrections. My Spanish is rusty and the lady who usually checks it is extremely busy right now. I appreciate the help.