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Comment from tfawcus
Mutts like this are the salt of the earth. They can be blamed for almost any of our weaknesses such as letting one rip and traipsing muddy footprints through the house. Great entry for the epitaph contest. Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Mutts like this are the salt of the earth. They can be blamed for almost any of our weaknesses such as letting one rip and traipsing muddy footprints through the house. Great entry for the epitaph contest. Good luck with it.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Tony,thank you, yes are most forgiving with our mutts!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an unusual take on the writing challenge because it features a dog, who might have been your own pet. It is cute and upbeat and I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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This is an unusual take on the writing challenge because it features a dog, who might have been your own pet. It is cute and upbeat and I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Susan thank you! I might have been able to say the same about some of my Pinochle buddies. LOL
Comment from RetroStarfish
Gumption is one of my favourite words in the world. Your epitaph for dear Fergus is a doozy. '...his snout was long as was his girth...'
It brought a wistful smile. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Gumption is one of my favourite words in the world. Your epitaph for dear Fergus is a doozy. '...his snout was long as was his girth...'
It brought a wistful smile. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank very much!
Comment from mmayen
Well, the photo was perfect for the epitaph. I couldn't get over the eyes, LOL. It was all-encompassing. This mutt sure had some personality.
Wishing you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Well, the photo was perfect for the epitaph. I couldn't get over the eyes, LOL. It was all-encompassing. This mutt sure had some personality.
Wishing you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
well, what you have is good. I think you have three things I would recommend changing. First, you should increase the font size. Second, change or delete the picture as it does not match your description, and gives the reader pause. Lastly and most important. You have seven lines. Take one out or reform.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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well, what you have is good. I think you have three things I would recommend changing. First, you should increase the font size. Second, change or delete the picture as it does not match your description, and gives the reader pause. Lastly and most important. You have seven lines. Take one out or reform.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Hey Lance the stupid format with the page layout is a doozy! I did edit the copy and dropped it to the bottom of the photo, the wrapped line on the old format is gone and now complies with six lines
Comment from muffinmama
This is hilarious, especially when combined with the photo! For some reason, it evokes in me a feeling of country fun, country roads, total summer sun and fishing. Not sure how the gun fits into the scenario, but what the heck, maybe hunting and not fishing. In any case, really got a kick out of this tribute to a beloved dog.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is hilarious, especially when combined with the photo! For some reason, it evokes in me a feeling of country fun, country roads, total summer sun and fishing. Not sure how the gun fits into the scenario, but what the heck, maybe hunting and not fishing. In any case, really got a kick out of this tribute to a beloved dog.
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks muffinmama!
Comment from Ben B.
I wouldn't exactly call a pug's snout "long" unless of course that was some metaphor. He was a cute little dog. Maybe instead of just "boy" you should say "my boy." That might sound better.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I wouldn't exactly call a pug's snout "long" unless of course that was some metaphor. He was a cute little dog. Maybe instead of just "boy" you should say "my boy." That might sound better.
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Ben thanks!