Wilderness Redemption Road
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Comment from equestrik
Good writing in this next chapter of your book. I like your dialogues as well as the characterizations. I especially enjoy the toughness of Roseanna as she takes care of business even though she wishes to be protected and stood up for.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Good writing in this next chapter of your book. I like your dialogues as well as the characterizations. I especially enjoy the toughness of Roseanna as she takes care of business even though she wishes to be protected and stood up for.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I appreciate you taking the timer to read and review my work.
Comment from robyn corum
Earl,
I really enjoyed this chapter, especially. I love the flavor of the times that you give the pieces - the dialogue seems real and the motivations seem authentic. Kudos!
Notes:
1.) "No, return here(. W)e need to get on the trail."
2.) She turned to Richard and whispered(,) "We should have left with Doo."
3.) She wouldn't have trusted any of them f(s)rther than she could throw them.
--> 'farther' for distances
4.) The muzzle of the rifle looked like a/cavern and twice as dark.
5.) "Be quick about it, you heard Godfrey, (we're) leaving in ten minutes."
I look forward to the next installment!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Earl,
I really enjoyed this chapter, especially. I love the flavor of the times that you give the pieces - the dialogue seems real and the motivations seem authentic. Kudos!
Notes:
1.) "No, return here(. W)e need to get on the trail."
2.) She turned to Richard and whispered(,) "We should have left with Doo."
3.) She wouldn't have trusted any of them f(s)rther than she could throw them.
--> 'farther' for distances
4.) The muzzle of the rifle looked like a/cavern and twice as dark.
5.) "Be quick about it, you heard Godfrey, (we're) leaving in ten minutes."
I look forward to the next installment!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much for honoring me with six stars Robyn. I'm appreciate the editing tips. I'm glad you're enjoying my book, I hope yopu notice my female characters are strong.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Good for you, Roseanna! Let nobody call you a wench or any other disrespectful name! And when they tried to fight with your brother with a knife, only because he tried to defend you, you did more than well to defend him. They will not try things with you again.
Well written chapter.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Good for you, Roseanna! Let nobody call you a wench or any other disrespectful name! And when they tried to fight with your brother with a knife, only because he tried to defend you, you did more than well to defend him. They will not try things with you again.
Well written chapter.
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I appreciate you taking the timer to read and review my work.
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Welcome to the review, Earl.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This western fiction has a well written narrative taletelling themed about call of the wild, brief and appropriate dialogues contributory to the thematic maturation and a balanced plot development; good beginning and a curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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This western fiction has a well written narrative taletelling themed about call of the wild, brief and appropriate dialogues contributory to the thematic maturation and a balanced plot development; good beginning and a curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much ALCREATOR, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I appreciate you taking the timer to read and review my work.