Blended Reality
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Rabbit Hole"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
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Comment from amada
I liked parts of the story, Others, like this line left me in blank: "and that, was by itself, enough of an experience for one..." I understand it is a story in a limited number of words.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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I liked parts of the story, Others, like this line left me in blank: "and that, was by itself, enough of an experience for one..." I understand it is a story in a limited number of words.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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thank you. I enjoyed letting my imagination hop onto the page. Just like in life rabbits can have surreal outcomes. LOL
Comment from Gideon300
This was a really fun read. I really liked the vivid imagery of falling through the hole and the age and gender switch around at the bottom. Probably Freud would have a lot to say about that and I'd bet he'd be wrong! Good luck with the contest! - Brenda
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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This was a really fun read. I really liked the vivid imagery of falling through the hole and the age and gender switch around at the bottom. Probably Freud would have a lot to say about that and I'd bet he'd be wrong! Good luck with the contest! - Brenda
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Brenda, It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. I rather imagine C.G. Jung my have postulated I was getting in touch with my anima ( feminine side ) LOL
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written story for the 60 word flash fiction contest. You have told a cute story full of magic and whimsy.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written story for the 60 word flash fiction contest. You have told a cute story full of magic and whimsy.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Dancemom, thank you! It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. Just as we find ourselves, in our daily lives, rabbit holes can be surreal events.
Comment from Sallyo
I think I'd be climbing out as fast as I could and sleeping it off in the vestry! This one sure is odd, which was your intention! I read it twice and it set me to thinking what else might change in rabbit holes without the benefit of Alice.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I think I'd be climbing out as fast as I could and sleeping it off in the vestry! This one sure is odd, which was your intention! I read it twice and it set me to thinking what else might change in rabbit holes without the benefit of Alice.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Sallyho, it was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. The fact is most rabbit holes we find ourselves in, from time to time, do seem to surreal.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Wow that was a good twist in the end! Reminded me of Alice in Wonderland! Opens up so many opportunities for expansion as I believe you can turn this into a novelette with this scenario right at the start! Would be a good read with 2 different identities clashing it out!
Best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Wow that was a good twist in the end! Reminded me of Alice in Wonderland! Opens up so many opportunities for expansion as I believe you can turn this into a novelette with this scenario right at the start! Would be a good read with 2 different identities clashing it out!
Best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Aaqib, it was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. Just like in real life, rabbit holes can be pretty surreal places we fall into in everyday life.
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It was a good read! Do think on expanding it! Cheers :-)
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well, this is a bit different! Kind of like Alice in Wonderland. Now we need some Jack and Jill? Good luck with the contest! Keep right on writing
Patty
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Well, this is a bit different! Kind of like Alice in Wonderland. Now we need some Jack and Jill? Good luck with the contest! Keep right on writing
Patty
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Patty, It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. But as the case with most rabbit holes things can get pretty dicey. LOL
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LOL!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I don't think that I like what happened during the descent. I was a man to start with who I suppose was suppose to be celibate. Now, I have extra hormones that I'll have to control while trying to live celibate. I vote for being changed back please. This was quite a ride. Thanks for sharing this interesting and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I don't think that I like what happened during the descent. I was a man to start with who I suppose was suppose to be celibate. Now, I have extra hormones that I'll have to control while trying to live celibate. I vote for being changed back please. This was quite a ride. Thanks for sharing this interesting and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Jeffrey,I am with you on the one. It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. But as the case with most rabbit holes things can get pretty dicey. LOL
Comment from LisaMay
Personally, I would not dare to follow, in case I, a woman of mature years enjoying who I am, arrived at the bottom of the rabbit hole as a young man of 20. What a horrendous thought!
Your words are intriguingly spun together, with only 2 sentences comprising the entire 60 words. Thank goodness for punctuation!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Personally, I would not dare to follow, in case I, a woman of mature years enjoying who I am, arrived at the bottom of the rabbit hole as a young man of 20. What a horrendous thought!
Your words are intriguingly spun together, with only 2 sentences comprising the entire 60 words. Thank goodness for punctuation!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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LisaMay, It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. But as the case with most rabbit holes things can get pretty dicey. LOL
Comment from Lu Saluna
I can imagine the middle-aged Priest would be quite surprised to find himself a young Nun after tumbling down a hole. It would be quite a shock to the senses.
Good story with minimal words. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I can imagine the middle-aged Priest would be quite surprised to find himself a young Nun after tumbling down a hole. It would be quite a shock to the senses.
Good story with minimal words. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Lu, It was fun to let my imagination hop onto the page. But as the case with most rabbit holes things can get pretty dicey. LOL
Comment from Debbie Pope
This flash fiction leaves me wanting more. You write beautifully. Your first line for instance. It's intriguing enough in itself to win most contests. You pose so many questions in this post. Why did you fall? Why are you a nun now? How will your life change? What era are we in now? This should be the prologue to a very interesting novel.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This flash fiction leaves me wanting more. You write beautifully. Your first line for instance. It's intriguing enough in itself to win most contests. You pose so many questions in this post. Why did you fall? Why are you a nun now? How will your life change? What era are we in now? This should be the prologue to a very interesting novel.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Debbie awesome prompts for certain, thank you for your kind validation.