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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Broken bones"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
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Comment from David R. Davis
Well done. It's difficult to tell a story in six words, even harder to evoke an emotion in so few, you did both. The older I get, the more "crapola" seems to fit in my life. Take care and watch out for toothpicks on the sidewalk, they're easy trip over. Go well.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Well done. It's difficult to tell a story in six words, even harder to evoke an emotion in so few, you did both. The older I get, the more "crapola" seems to fit in my life. Take care and watch out for toothpicks on the sidewalk, they're easy trip over. Go well.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Very answer fact, it?s the damned tooth picks that will make you stumble...
Comment from Debbie Pope
I have entered this contest, but have no idea what to say. So, I'm checking out the entries to see the proper approach. Your entry certainly says a lot. You've got the fall, the cussing, and the only possible conclusion that you could have used. Unless your character died of course. I like your ending better, harsh as it is.
I'm having fun with this. You have captured life as a senior citizen. Well done. Thanks for not killing your character.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I have entered this contest, but have no idea what to say. So, I'm checking out the entries to see the proper approach. Your entry certainly says a lot. You've got the fall, the cussing, and the only possible conclusion that you could have used. Unless your character died of course. I like your ending better, harsh as it is.
I'm having fun with this. You have captured life as a senior citizen. Well done. Thanks for not killing your character.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Never give up, we always can turn over a new leaf, grow a beard, add tattoos and go into the witness protection program or just live life as it is thrown at us, cold water and all
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How could we go on if we didn't think something good was going to happen?
Comment from Rikki66
Best of luck in the contest, this is a horror for people of my age. Good story.***************************************************************************************************************************************************
LXVI
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Best of luck in the contest, this is a horror for people of my age. Good story.***************************************************************************************************************************************************
LXVI
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks, we do have to attentive, falls can be disastrous.
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Amen.
LXVI
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ugh! scary story and I will stay away from that part, if the winter lets me:) Other wise I will hear too:"Kerplunk! Bam! Broken bones, surgical repairs." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Ugh! scary story and I will stay away from that part, if the winter lets me:) Other wise I will hear too:"Kerplunk! Bam! Broken bones, surgical repairs." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I truly hope that this never comes to pass for you.... ski the bunny slopes :)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a solid entry to the contest. It fulfills all the requirements, including managing to avoid being poetry. The six words create a strong image of hip or knee replacement, and the author has made good use of the extra words allowed in the descriptive sentence to add the detail to the landscape.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a solid entry to the contest. It fulfills all the requirements, including managing to avoid being poetry. The six words create a strong image of hip or knee replacement, and the author has made good use of the extra words allowed in the descriptive sentence to add the detail to the landscape.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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You kind words do offer encouragement, thank you.
Comment from Coco Jane
This tells a whole story without the details--but we all know them and don't need them!
Maybe replace either "kerplunk" or "bam" with something indicating pain--ouch, s**t, crunch, or the like--since the two words have similar meanings.
Good choice of a picture here.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This tells a whole story without the details--but we all know them and don't need them!
Maybe replace either "kerplunk" or "bam" with something indicating pain--ouch, s**t, crunch, or the like--since the two words have similar meanings.
Good choice of a picture here.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Ah heck... Crapola! Does it for me :). Thanks to you....
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I like crapola! It fits nicely with kerplunk.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery Writer. You presented a graphics description of what happens when we topple over. Your comment about Humans being fragile is quite true. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hello mystery Writer. You presented a graphics description of what happens when we topple over. Your comment about Humans being fragile is quite true. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks Robert.
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You're welcome
Comment from Patty Palmer
You did it~~LOL made a story out of 6 words.! That's not easy to do. I hope your day is going well!
God bless! "Keep right on writing!"
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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You did it~~LOL made a story out of 6 words.! That's not easy to do. I hope your day is going well!
God bless! "Keep right on writing!"
Patty
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I love the blessing and send it right back in grand volume!
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Thanks!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written six-word story about an accidental breaking of bones that need urgent surgical repairs to get the one up and running around again.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A very well-written six-word story about an accidental breaking of bones that need urgent surgical repairs to get the one up and running around again.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks Sandra
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yep -- takes like forever to heal these days...even a simple sprain hurts for much longer than expected!! :) A great offering for this contest - best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Yep -- takes like forever to heal these days...even a simple sprain hurts for much longer than expected!! :) A great offering for this contest - best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, dear friend!