The French Letter
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another beautiful chapter from this French Letter intriguing book. They escaped Lahore, but the future is uncertain. I like the way you end this chapter - an unfinished promise :"The engine let out a screech of exaltation that was echoed in my heart then, without warning, it plunged into the gaping maw of a tunnel. The brief moment of elation was swallowed in sooty darkness and a bone-rattling terror of the unknown; forewarning of adventures scarcely yet begun." Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Another beautiful chapter from this French Letter intriguing book. They escaped Lahore, but the future is uncertain. I like the way you end this chapter - an unfinished promise :"The engine let out a screech of exaltation that was echoed in my heart then, without warning, it plunged into the gaping maw of a tunnel. The brief moment of elation was swallowed in sooty darkness and a bone-rattling terror of the unknown; forewarning of adventures scarcely yet begun." Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Very many thanks for your comments, Iza, and for mentioning the part you liked best. Most affirming. Tony
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You are welcome:)
Comment from Mistydawn
Just when they thought they were free. It's well-written, interesting, suspenseful. Hellen was brave played the part well. I'm so glad his tan didn't run especially in front of the police.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Just when they thought they were free. It's well-written, interesting, suspenseful. Hellen was brave played the part well. I'm so glad his tan didn't run especially in front of the police.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Very many thanks for your comments, Monica. Yes, it might have been awkward for Charles. A dead giveaway! Tony
Comment from LisaMay
I am going to have to visit your earlier chapters to catch up with this book... I enjoyed this chapter with its authenticity of place, action and dialogue - I have not been to the Punjab but I have travelled in India by train. Your characterisation makes me want to read more.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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I am going to have to visit your earlier chapters to catch up with this book... I enjoyed this chapter with its authenticity of place, action and dialogue - I have not been to the Punjab but I have travelled in India by train. Your characterisation makes me want to read more.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Delighted to hear that this story has caught your interest, LisaMay. Thanks so much for this affirming review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, you outdid yourself with your writing. I swear this is the best novel on this site and I completely enjoy reading and look forward to your posts. Thank you.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Once again, you outdid yourself with your writing. I swear this is the best novel on this site and I completely enjoy reading and look forward to your posts. Thank you.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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What a lovely thing to say, Barbara. I really value your continuing support and encouragement. Thanks for the sixth star, too. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
Don't worry I have felt that terror when we journeyed across Eastern Europe Tony, in Moscow we discovered what it was like, not to register our whereabouts, but that's another story. So they've played out there roles well, Maharani Helen and a subservient Charles. Jesus actually told soldiers not to take advantage of their position. Well done my friend, excellent story, blesskngs, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Don't worry I have felt that terror when we journeyed across Eastern Europe Tony, in Moscow we discovered what it was like, not to register our whereabouts, but that's another story. So they've played out there roles well, Maharani Helen and a subservient Charles. Jesus actually told soldiers not to take advantage of their position. Well done my friend, excellent story, blesskngs, Roy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Roy. I?ve never travelled in that part of the world, but did make one or two trips up country from Singapore to Penang 50 years ago when they still operated the old colonial rolling stock.
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We?ve been to Penang a few times Tony,
Comment from damommy
Wow! What a chapter. I could feel the tension in Charles' body. That's as close a call that I'd ever want, too. Good touch having the soldier prod him with his gun. Great description on the men sharing their compartment.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Wow! What a chapter. I could feel the tension in Charles' body. That's as close a call that I'd ever want, too. Good touch having the soldier prod him with his gun. Great description on the men sharing their compartment.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Yvonne. The tension is beginning to build. I wouldn?t want to be in Charles?s shoes. One feels so helpless without the facility of language.
Comment from Ulla
My goodness, Tony. This is some heck of a story, and what a wonderful imagination you've got. I can just visualise it all in my mind's eye. I'm sure Helen is having a ball. At least she's on home ground. Now what? All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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My goodness, Tony. This is some heck of a story, and what a wonderful imagination you've got. I can just visualise it all in my mind's eye. I'm sure Helen is having a ball. At least she's on home ground. Now what? All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thanks, Ulla. The tension?s certainly beginning to build for poor Charles. It?s a good thing he has Helen with him - I think!
Comment from estory
I liked the way you started off with a high degree of tension as you watch the other couple getting roughly frisked by the Pakistani soldiers, and then there's that close call as they shove you along with a rifle butt. The end of the chapter was really good too, as the train slowly chugs out of the station, and into that black, uncertainty of a tunnel. Its a really great set up for the coming chapters. Lots of intrigue, you have that throw back to Rasheed, on the cover of the newspaper, to keep us on the edge of our seats; one more thing for Charles to worry about. estory
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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I liked the way you started off with a high degree of tension as you watch the other couple getting roughly frisked by the Pakistani soldiers, and then there's that close call as they shove you along with a rifle butt. The end of the chapter was really good too, as the train slowly chugs out of the station, and into that black, uncertainty of a tunnel. Its a really great set up for the coming chapters. Lots of intrigue, you have that throw back to Rasheed, on the cover of the newspaper, to keep us on the edge of our seats; one more thing for Charles to worry about. estory
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Very many thanks for your comments. Most affirming. That?s exactly what I was aiming for. Al the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter about the narrow escape at the train station. The train departs and the couple is safe for the time being, but who knows what may lie ahead in this foreign land.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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A very well-written chapter about the narrow escape at the train station. The train departs and the couple is safe for the time being, but who knows what may lie ahead in this foreign land.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Very many thanks for your comments, Sandra. Appreciated. Tony
Comment from Sankey
Glad the SIXES are still around over here too. Keep your eyes open I am doing more in my Rambles either today or tomorrow. You are always a good read and I will miss you when I go but you must keep me abreast of your stuff. Ulla gave me the idea of re-joining on a free account so I can read all your stuff. Can't remember if FREE allows reviews and stuff. No spags.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Glad the SIXES are still around over here too. Keep your eyes open I am doing more in my Rambles either today or tomorrow. You are always a good read and I will miss you when I go but you must keep me abreast of your stuff. Ulla gave me the idea of re-joining on a free account so I can read all your stuff. Can't remember if FREE allows reviews and stuff. No spags.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Very many thanks for your comments, Geoffrey, and for the sixth star. A free account sounds like a good idea, though I?m not sure how they work. Tony