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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Late to the Wake"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
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Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Late to the Wake, has the correct word count and uses all the assigned words as well. We see here a man who has missed his own funeral, as it were, through a series of missteps. Funny.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This one-hundred-word story, Late to the Wake, has the correct word count and uses all the assigned words as well. We see here a man who has missed his own funeral, as it were, through a series of missteps. Funny.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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thanks for walking through my piece with the air of the intended humor.
Comment from Mia Twysted
It leaves a mystery to the mind not knowing what celebration the person is missing out on. And it shows how absent-minded this person is as well, waiting for a call they cannot receive.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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It leaves a mystery to the mind not knowing what celebration the person is missing out on. And it shows how absent-minded this person is as well, waiting for a call they cannot receive.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you for reviewing my intended humor.
Comment from Rikki66
I have heard of being late to one own funeral this is a first, late to the wake. Good luck in the contest.*************************************************************************
Rikki:)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I have heard of being late to one own funeral this is a first, late to the wake. Good luck in the contest.*************************************************************************
Rikki:)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you for reviewing my work and enjoying my twisted humor.
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Welcome.
Rikki:)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
So you are going to be late for your own wake! Worse still, you weren't even going! LOL, You should have paid your phone bill on time! What a fabulous flash fiction, and you used those words brilliantly. A virtual 6, author, I'd have give it a six had I got one. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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So you are going to be late for your own wake! Worse still, you weren't even going! LOL, You should have paid your phone bill on time! What a fabulous flash fiction, and you used those words brilliantly. A virtual 6, author, I'd have give it a six had I got one. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Your kind words humble me...thank you!
Comment from john mallahan
I like the idea of being late for your own wake! Maybe some of us would enjoy that. I mean, if ya gotta be dead, don't you have a choice in the matter?
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I like the idea of being late for your own wake! Maybe some of us would enjoy that. I mean, if ya gotta be dead, don't you have a choice in the matter?
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Roger that! :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Very interesting choice of words to create an image that must be forces into 150 words. For sure you rocked that phone bill that stop your clock in the light:) Good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Very interesting choice of words to create an image that must be forces into 150 words. For sure you rocked that phone bill that stop your clock in the light:) Good luck!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks, it was fun to play around with this challenge.
Comment from Susan Morritt
This is a very unique idea for a fictional story. I found it very amusing, especially the surprise ending, "so I decided to stay home." Your description preceding the story has a mistake in it (remove the first "to".) Overall, your story made me laugh and it was very original.
Susan
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This is a very unique idea for a fictional story. I found it very amusing, especially the surprise ending, "so I decided to stay home." Your description preceding the story has a mistake in it (remove the first "to".) Overall, your story made me laugh and it was very original.
Susan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you and corrected. :)
Comment from Sallyo
Well, that was fun! I expect our character is now hanging about, ghost -like, waiting for someone else to pay the phone bill! This contest is a good one, and I'm really enjoying seeing what people come up with using the required words. There's something a bit odd about this sentence though:
Looking at the dim light on the clock and already the hour hand was showing it was past 7:00 AM
I think it needs to be "I looked". You might need to lose a word elsewhere though.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Well, that was fun! I expect our character is now hanging about, ghost -like, waiting for someone else to pay the phone bill! This contest is a good one, and I'm really enjoying seeing what people come up with using the required words. There's something a bit odd about this sentence though:
Looking at the dim light on the clock and already the hour hand was showing it was past 7:00 AM
I think it needs to be "I looked". You might need to lose a word elsewhere though.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Corrected, painfully I still show my amateurism, thanks for the corrective advice.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a neat entry. I always find it hard to do one of these include-the-words contests. It invariably turns out somewhat contrived in order to meet the remit.
Here is just one point for you to consider:
when I heard a small, still voice -- This is rather picky. I've no idea what a "still" voice is. If this was mine, I'd look for a better adjective.
Good luck with the competition :)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This is a neat entry. I always find it hard to do one of these include-the-words contests. It invariably turns out somewhat contrived in order to meet the remit.
Here is just one point for you to consider:
when I heard a small, still voice -- This is rather picky. I've no idea what a "still" voice is. If this was mine, I'd look for a better adjective.
Good luck with the competition :)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This still, small voice is a common theme in my world of Spiritual Contemplative practice. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my work.
Comment from tfawcus
You've used the required words in a creative way to write an amusing anecdote. This really is a case of being late for one's own funeral! Cleverly put together for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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You've used the required words in a creative way to write an amusing anecdote. This really is a case of being late for one's own funeral! Cleverly put together for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you.