Blended Reality
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "My wife joined the sisterhood..."A collection of stories: Some True, some not
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
It is critical that she continue to be checked out (PET etc.) regularly as the various meds and treatments (radiation, for example) have a high incidence of causing other forms of cancer down the road. I know this since I have been battling cancer since 2012. If you or she ever need an ear, please don't hesitate to PM me since I have been assisting cancer patients, care givers, etc. for quite some time. This is a well penned entry. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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It is critical that she continue to be checked out (PET etc.) regularly as the various meds and treatments (radiation, for example) have a high incidence of causing other forms of cancer down the road. I know this since I have been battling cancer since 2012. If you or she ever need an ear, please don't hesitate to PM me since I have been assisting cancer patients, care givers, etc. for quite some time. This is a well penned entry. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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First and foremost, thank you for your honest vulnerability and good wishes. We truly do take it one day at a time. With the cancer drug, she takes for three more years, we just believe it is doing what needs to do. I have made a note of your offer, just in case, thank you! Anon
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Thank you for this soul-wrenching, loving, vulnerable, tribute to your wife and yur journey together t hrough her cancer. Praise God she is cancer free! How wonderful for you both, and for all those who love you.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you for this soul-wrenching, loving, vulnerable, tribute to your wife and yur journey together t hrough her cancer. Praise God she is cancer free! How wonderful for you both, and for all those who love you.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from tfawcus
This is a poignant account of a disease that afflicts so many. You have taken us through, step by step, in a a most graphic and vivid way. A true story that touches the heart.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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This is a poignant account of a disease that afflicts so many. You have taken us through, step by step, in a a most graphic and vivid way. A true story that touches the heart.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Coco Jane
Good story!
I pasted the whole thing in so that I can comment right in the text. You have several mechanical errors, and it's easier to point them out this way.
Everything was just as we planned for; THIS SHOULD BE A COLON the brand-new retirement home, nestled in the mountains on our little acre of heaven. We were planning to move in the next week.
Having finally a date set for my retirement and then, cancer came unwelcomed to our door. THIS IS NOT A SENTENCE. AFTER
"THEN," YOU NEED TO STATE WHO SET THE DATE. USE SOMETHING LIKE "...RETIREMENT, WE HAD AN UNWELCOME VISITOR--CANCER."
The doctor's words were echoing in my ears,THIS SHOULD BE A COLON "the tumor is positive," yes this was an unwelcomed, unplanned event. Completely and with DO YOU MEAN WITHOUT EQUIVOCATION? equivocation, this news was not anything she or I wanted to hear. Is it DO YOU MEAN IT IS not like just plain fact, that every way they spin the words, they all are the same, THIS SHOULD BE A PERIOD its THIS SHOULD BE IT'S
CANCER, you need to remove it as soon as possible.
Then the litany begins,.. it is okay, it's early, oh, it is so very treatable. But, then the caution and the final summation of encouragement and plans and procedures the last words, it is CANCER, and your body is under attack.
So now, my soul mate has this heavy numbness. Indeed, no longer just a scare. This news has become surreal so soon! She is, we are worried, we both are optimistic for sure, but still, she has this unwelcomed, unplanned rap, NO COMMA NEEDED HERE. at our door. Her body is under attack, and she is now a part of this crazy, hazy, sisterhood.
So many questions! Somethings, THIS SHOULD BE TWO SEPARATE WORDS I will even not know to ask! I could not have prepared for, nor had I never thought about, nor did not also consider, that one of us and mainly she would get cancer! We could never imagine having even the slightest thought about talking about this topic!
Now, all that spins and flows through and over in my mind is that my precious soulmate has cancer. My soulmate is so youthful and full of life and happy and playful! All the hope and dreams for the days ahead, became hours crashing under the waves of so much uncertainty.
We are just wrapping my mind OUR MINDS around all the clinical terms, the radiation oncologist, sentinel node injection, Nuclear medicine, surgery, mastectomy, partial mastectomy. Boy! Profound choices! Then the added burdens of recovery, radiation treatment, and treatment and treatment if all goes well, we will do chemo. I'm standing beside her, thinking," it is just implacable IS THIS THE RIGHT WORD? IMPLACABLE MEANS NOT TO BE CHANGED. to put poison into a body and not expect some terrible things to occur." All the while, I am smiling and telling her, "we will get through this."
I yelled out to GOD... this is not right, this is unwelcomed, this is far too much information, no wait!
GOD this is not enough information, where are you? Why now? Why her? Begging, pleading to the unspoken stillness that surrounded us. Stop! Tell me! Explain to me! Do not talk over me, around me! My dearest wife and I have plans and you "Big C" was----. No, you "Big C" are not a part of our program!
Then you make that decision only a woman can make. The doctor was telling you, "we just need to do a lumpectomy," OMIT THIS QUOTATION MARK AND PUT IT AFTER EARLY we caught it early. Your operation will be a simple procedure. You, however, had spent some deep personal time alone and decided to do a radical double mastectomy. When you informed the doctor that is was your decision, your body, he said, "I think that is too much," OMIT THIS QUOTATION MARK. USE A PERIOD.
THEN PUT THE CLOSING QUOTES AFTER MOVE. don't need to make such an aggressive move. You, my dear, stood your ground! When the lab returned a week after your surgery with the results, you shed mighty tears. COMMA HERE, NOT A PERIOD. Knowing that you have instinctively made the right choice and then having the surgeon tell you, "we simply did not see cancer in the other breast,PERIOD HERE you made the right decision."
So began the next year of reconstructive surgery and the waiting to get some clarity about this new life that has just started. Simple things like finding stillness each day, seeing birds gathering at the feeder in a more connected manner. Watching the rainfall and feeling as though your soul was being washed and cleansed. Planning also changed. We now approached our retirement in a five-year window and having HAVE become more spontaneously active.
Rise to this, we surely did. This cancer came unwelcomed at our door, and we celebrate two years today that my precious wife is cancer-free!
I BELIEVE THE CORRECT WORD IS UNWELCOME, NOT UNWELCOMED. THAT IS WHY IT'S UNDERLINED IN RED SQUIGGLE.
I LIKE THE LINE ABOUT CRAZY HAZY SISTERHOOD.
THIS IS A GREAT STORY AND TRIBUTE TO YOUR WIFE'S BATTLE. CLEAN UP THE ERRORS AND YOU WILL HAVE A REALLY GOOD PIECE.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Good story!
I pasted the whole thing in so that I can comment right in the text. You have several mechanical errors, and it's easier to point them out this way.
Everything was just as we planned for; THIS SHOULD BE A COLON the brand-new retirement home, nestled in the mountains on our little acre of heaven. We were planning to move in the next week.
Having finally a date set for my retirement and then, cancer came unwelcomed to our door. THIS IS NOT A SENTENCE. AFTER
"THEN," YOU NEED TO STATE WHO SET THE DATE. USE SOMETHING LIKE "...RETIREMENT, WE HAD AN UNWELCOME VISITOR--CANCER."
The doctor's words were echoing in my ears,THIS SHOULD BE A COLON "the tumor is positive," yes this was an unwelcomed, unplanned event. Completely and with DO YOU MEAN WITHOUT EQUIVOCATION? equivocation, this news was not anything she or I wanted to hear. Is it DO YOU MEAN IT IS not like just plain fact, that every way they spin the words, they all are the same, THIS SHOULD BE A PERIOD its THIS SHOULD BE IT'S
CANCER, you need to remove it as soon as possible.
Then the litany begins,.. it is okay, it's early, oh, it is so very treatable. But, then the caution and the final summation of encouragement and plans and procedures the last words, it is CANCER, and your body is under attack.
So now, my soul mate has this heavy numbness. Indeed, no longer just a scare. This news has become surreal so soon! She is, we are worried, we both are optimistic for sure, but still, she has this unwelcomed, unplanned rap, NO COMMA NEEDED HERE. at our door. Her body is under attack, and she is now a part of this crazy, hazy, sisterhood.
So many questions! Somethings, THIS SHOULD BE TWO SEPARATE WORDS I will even not know to ask! I could not have prepared for, nor had I never thought about, nor did not also consider, that one of us and mainly she would get cancer! We could never imagine having even the slightest thought about talking about this topic!
Now, all that spins and flows through and over in my mind is that my precious soulmate has cancer. My soulmate is so youthful and full of life and happy and playful! All the hope and dreams for the days ahead, became hours crashing under the waves of so much uncertainty.
We are just wrapping my mind OUR MINDS around all the clinical terms, the radiation oncologist, sentinel node injection, Nuclear medicine, surgery, mastectomy, partial mastectomy. Boy! Profound choices! Then the added burdens of recovery, radiation treatment, and treatment and treatment if all goes well, we will do chemo. I'm standing beside her, thinking," it is just implacable IS THIS THE RIGHT WORD? IMPLACABLE MEANS NOT TO BE CHANGED. to put poison into a body and not expect some terrible things to occur." All the while, I am smiling and telling her, "we will get through this."
I yelled out to GOD... this is not right, this is unwelcomed, this is far too much information, no wait!
GOD this is not enough information, where are you? Why now? Why her? Begging, pleading to the unspoken stillness that surrounded us. Stop! Tell me! Explain to me! Do not talk over me, around me! My dearest wife and I have plans and you "Big C" was----. No, you "Big C" are not a part of our program!
Then you make that decision only a woman can make. The doctor was telling you, "we just need to do a lumpectomy," OMIT THIS QUOTATION MARK AND PUT IT AFTER EARLY we caught it early. Your operation will be a simple procedure. You, however, had spent some deep personal time alone and decided to do a radical double mastectomy. When you informed the doctor that is was your decision, your body, he said, "I think that is too much," OMIT THIS QUOTATION MARK. USE A PERIOD.
THEN PUT THE CLOSING QUOTES AFTER MOVE. don't need to make such an aggressive move. You, my dear, stood your ground! When the lab returned a week after your surgery with the results, you shed mighty tears. COMMA HERE, NOT A PERIOD. Knowing that you have instinctively made the right choice and then having the surgeon tell you, "we simply did not see cancer in the other breast,PERIOD HERE you made the right decision."
So began the next year of reconstructive surgery and the waiting to get some clarity about this new life that has just started. Simple things like finding stillness each day, seeing birds gathering at the feeder in a more connected manner. Watching the rainfall and feeling as though your soul was being washed and cleansed. Planning also changed. We now approached our retirement in a five-year window and having HAVE become more spontaneously active.
Rise to this, we surely did. This cancer came unwelcomed at our door, and we celebrate two years today that my precious wife is cancer-free!
I BELIEVE THE CORRECT WORD IS UNWELCOME, NOT UNWELCOMED. THAT IS WHY IT'S UNDERLINED IN RED SQUIGGLE.
I LIKE THE LINE ABOUT CRAZY HAZY SISTERHOOD.
THIS IS A GREAT STORY AND TRIBUTE TO YOUR WIFE'S BATTLE. CLEAN UP THE ERRORS AND YOU WILL HAVE A REALLY GOOD PIECE.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Coco Jane, As a novice writer, I am so very grateful for people, such as yourself, that takes to task the depth of helping those of us who are starving for better writing capabilities. I took every comment to heart, effected changes and hope that the effect does improve the read. Sincerely, Anon
Comment from J W Warner
I am a survivor of male breast cancer, a mastectomy, and Chemo (four years in May 2019). It was good to read an account, not from the patient herself, but from her spouse. You've captured the fear and other reactions you experienced watching your beloved go through treatment.
I wish you both the best. There are many resources for getting through post-treatment ups and downs.
Very well done, and a comfort to spoused in your position.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I am a survivor of male breast cancer, a mastectomy, and Chemo (four years in May 2019). It was good to read an account, not from the patient herself, but from her spouse. You've captured the fear and other reactions you experienced watching your beloved go through treatment.
I wish you both the best. There are many resources for getting through post-treatment ups and downs.
Very well done, and a comfort to spoused in your position.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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My gratitude is voluminous....
Comment from Gail Denham
Not something you ever want to have to consider,think about, decide upon. And the fear must come wailing to your door as well.
As for the writing of this account, I would break up the long paragraphs. Make some sentences long and some short. Watch for repetition of the same phrases.
Nit pickin' - but so thankful with you that your wife is two years cancer free. a man I worked for - his wife had the same cancer maybe 40 years ago and she's still fine. God was merciful.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Not something you ever want to have to consider,think about, decide upon. And the fear must come wailing to your door as well.
As for the writing of this account, I would break up the long paragraphs. Make some sentences long and some short. Watch for repetition of the same phrases.
Nit pickin' - but so thankful with you that your wife is two years cancer free. a man I worked for - his wife had the same cancer maybe 40 years ago and she's still fine. God was merciful.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Thank you I have taken your input very much to heart and change some structure, I am grateful.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is excellently done not only in wording and form, but also in content and a message to all of us that we need to keep on, keeping on. My prayers to you and your family
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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This is excellently done not only in wording and form, but also in content and a message to all of us that we need to keep on, keeping on. My prayers to you and your family
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you for reading and commenting on my submission, we are so grateful for everyday.
Comment from LisaMay
What a terribly ravaging sisterhood to have to belong to! While you joined the concerned and grieving and angry and querying brotherhood of husbands. Your story takes us along with you and your brave, strong-willed wife on your emotional journey. I am profoundly pleased to hear that 2 years has gone by safely.
Just a couple of things I noticed:
it's okay, it's early, oh, it (is) so very treatable.
This has become really surreal to (too) soon! (actually, maybe you meant 'so' soon?)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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What a terribly ravaging sisterhood to have to belong to! While you joined the concerned and grieving and angry and querying brotherhood of husbands. Your story takes us along with you and your brave, strong-willed wife on your emotional journey. I am profoundly pleased to hear that 2 years has gone by safely.
Just a couple of things I noticed:
it's okay, it's early, oh, it (is) so very treatable.
This has become really surreal to (too) soon! (actually, maybe you meant 'so' soon?)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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I am grateful for your comments and edit suggestions, thank you.
Comment from victor 66
I celebrate your good fortune. I don't think anyone has a concept of what a life should really be. Maybe it's just a series of dreams we hope it to be. You did that with your retirement home. But all hopes and dreams are just ideas or plans that we make and we hope that do happen. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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I celebrate your good fortune. I don't think anyone has a concept of what a life should really be. Maybe it's just a series of dreams we hope it to be. You did that with your retirement home. But all hopes and dreams are just ideas or plans that we make and we hope that do happen. Best wishes.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Thank you, you are so correct. No o e said life was a straight and easy journey!
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You are most welcome. Like Bette Davis said in an old movie, "buckle up, it's going to be a bumpy ride".
Comment from shaffer40
The big C. You've done a beautiful job of describing what it does to its hosts. How it shows up and everything changes, nothing can be taken for granted, life becomes so uncertain--more so than it already is. I see people around me falling and I wonder who's next, maybe I am. I think it's so interesting that she decided over what the doctors "knew" and she was right and probably saved herself. That's scary. Anyway, you'll probably win the contest with this beauty. And I hope you and she have many long years together.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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The big C. You've done a beautiful job of describing what it does to its hosts. How it shows up and everything changes, nothing can be taken for granted, life becomes so uncertain--more so than it already is. I see people around me falling and I wonder who's next, maybe I am. I think it's so interesting that she decided over what the doctors "knew" and she was right and probably saved herself. That's scary. Anyway, you'll probably win the contest with this beauty. And I hope you and she have many long years together.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Thank you, I so much appreciate your words. We both feel like true winners and are very humbled and thankful,