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Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Things Warm Up at Moonrakers"A Novel
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Comment from juliaSjames
Okay Tony, enough already. Now that Charles and Helen have literally burnt their metaphorical bridges, it's time for them to embark on the adventure.
Meanwhile I love the description of Charles in the throes of infatuation. It would border on the farcical if it weren't for his fleeting moment of self realization. I wonder if they have a future together. Or if she's really a peri. Only you know, or maybe you don't yet.
Lovely description of the English countryside. My sister-in-law lives in a thatched cottage in Devon. So I know first hand about those high hedged lanes. My husband and I had several close calls with farm equipment driven at breakneck speed.
Excellent writing.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Okay Tony, enough already. Now that Charles and Helen have literally burnt their metaphorical bridges, it's time for them to embark on the adventure.
Meanwhile I love the description of Charles in the throes of infatuation. It would border on the farcical if it weren't for his fleeting moment of self realization. I wonder if they have a future together. Or if she's really a peri. Only you know, or maybe you don't yet.
Lovely description of the English countryside. My sister-in-law lives in a thatched cottage in Devon. So I know first hand about those high hedged lanes. My husband and I had several close calls with farm equipment driven at breakneck speed.
Excellent writing.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Julia. As always, I appreciate your support. Glad you enjoyed this one. I lived on the edge of the Cotswolds for a few years. One of the local farmers had a wooden leg. Lovely man, but best to give him a wide birth when driving a tractor! All the best, Tony
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You're welcome Tony. Although I consider the UK my second home there's so much I haven't seen, like the Cotswolds.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I'm out of six stars again, Tony, and this is so deserving. This is one of my favorite chapters. When you edit this work, do not take out a word of your description of the English countryside. Your plot is outstanding with it's twists and turns, but your description of the Cotswalds is moving. It makes me want to travel back to England. I hope the lovely Moonraker Cottage does not burn down. Helen is definitely not worth it.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I'm out of six stars again, Tony, and this is so deserving. This is one of my favorite chapters. When you edit this work, do not take out a word of your description of the English countryside. Your plot is outstanding with it's twists and turns, but your description of the Cotswalds is moving. It makes me want to travel back to England. I hope the lovely Moonraker Cottage does not burn down. Helen is definitely not worth it.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Debbie. As always, I appreciate your support and suggestion of six-worthiness. Glad you enjoyed this one. I've got a soft spot for the Cotswolds, too, having lived there for a number of years. Sadly, Charles and Helen won't be there for long. All the best, Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed this chapter, Tony. It read smoothly with some good and fun info. You did a great job describing the trip to the cabin. the dialogue was interesting and fitting. You ended at a crucial place for sure. Your title does double duty--warm romantic fire and a kind of warm that spells trouble in the way of a fire. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed this chapter, Tony. It read smoothly with some good and fun info. You did a great job describing the trip to the cabin. the dialogue was interesting and fitting. You ended at a crucial place for sure. Your title does double duty--warm romantic fire and a kind of warm that spells trouble in the way of a fire. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Jan. As always, I appreciate your support. Glad you enjoyed this one. All the best, Tony
Comment from barkingdog
I can already see the lower level of the cottage in flames. And they're still at it upstairs. There's no time to wait. Hurry write another chapter. Get them out of there. Can they save the car?
Fantastic imagery and a marvelous vocabulary were a pleasure to read.
One of my favorite passages:
'As we followed the meander of the Thames towards Reading, watery sunshine filtered through a fairy-tale canopy of amber and bronze, throwing a shadow-speckle across the bonnet of the car.'
Suggestions
-pre-cooked(precooked) meals for the freezer(,)and I felt sure
-I eased myself out of the seat gingerly and went around to open the door for Helen. (I gingerly ease myself out of the seat ...)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I can already see the lower level of the cottage in flames. And they're still at it upstairs. There's no time to wait. Hurry write another chapter. Get them out of there. Can they save the car?
Fantastic imagery and a marvelous vocabulary were a pleasure to read.
One of my favorite passages:
'As we followed the meander of the Thames towards Reading, watery sunshine filtered through a fairy-tale canopy of amber and bronze, throwing a shadow-speckle across the bonnet of the car.'
Suggestions
-pre-cooked(precooked) meals for the freezer(,)and I felt sure
-I eased myself out of the seat gingerly and went around to open the door for Helen. (I gingerly ease myself out of the seat ...)
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Ellen. I appreciate your supportive comments and suggestions, which I have implemented. Glad you enjoyed this one. All the best, Tony
Comment from JudyE
Oh my goodness. Surely you're not going to burn his house down? There is some very beautiful descriptive passages here.
I might have said 'I gingerly eased myself out of the seat' rather than 'I eased myself out of the seat gingerly'
Cheers
Judy
I eased myself out of the seat gingerly and went around to open the door for Helen.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Oh my goodness. Surely you're not going to burn his house down? There is some very beautiful descriptive passages here.
I might have said 'I gingerly eased myself out of the seat' rather than 'I eased myself out of the seat gingerly'
Cheers
Judy
I eased myself out of the seat gingerly and went around to open the door for Helen.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thanks for this review, Judy, and for the six star award. Much appreciated, as always. I agree about the placement of 'gingerly' and have amended it. Thanks for the suggestion. All the best, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
Good coming through on the other side. I did not see that funny little miss I saw elsewhere. Well done looks like you would have had to wait till tomorrow for the SIXES to return.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Good coming through on the other side. I did not see that funny little miss I saw elsewhere. Well done looks like you would have had to wait till tomorrow for the SIXES to return.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Geoffrey and Louise. As always, I appreciate your support. Glad you enjoyed this one. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
What fate awaits this frisky pair I wonder, certainly doesn't sound good.
Never sure what to expect with Helen and Charles, you keep us guessing Tony. Enjoyed this chapter and look forward to the next,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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What fate awaits this frisky pair I wonder, certainly doesn't sound good.
Never sure what to expect with Helen and Charles, you keep us guessing Tony. Enjoyed this chapter and look forward to the next,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Valda. As always, I appreciate your support. Glad you enjoyed this one. All the best, Tony
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Okay, Mr. TFawcus, this seriously deserves 6 stars, but I have a problem with the ending of the chapter. I realize there is more but as a reader, I hate the way it ended. Not that I hate your writing. You are just cliffhanging me and it drives me crazy! Which I guess is a good thing to gain readership. I hope I remember to come back around because I loved every single solitary word and description of this luscious chapter and the way your described everything you even gave me a new vocabulary word which is pretty rare! I will take "Invective" and have to make it useful to me in some of my writing. Thank you for broadening my perspective on descriptions as well! VIRTUAL SIX - Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Okay, Mr. TFawcus, this seriously deserves 6 stars, but I have a problem with the ending of the chapter. I realize there is more but as a reader, I hate the way it ended. Not that I hate your writing. You are just cliffhanging me and it drives me crazy! Which I guess is a good thing to gain readership. I hope I remember to come back around because I loved every single solitary word and description of this luscious chapter and the way your described everything you even gave me a new vocabulary word which is pretty rare! I will take "Invective" and have to make it useful to me in some of my writing. Thank you for broadening my perspective on descriptions as well! VIRTUAL SIX - Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Fonda. These cliff-hangers are part and parcel of serialisation! Sixty-eight posts doesn't equate to sixty-eight chapters. Many of these will be linked during the final edit.
I appreciate your positive comments and encouragement. Best wishes, Tony
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Okay, that is good to hear - on final edit- Tony - thank you for the clarification. I think I need to hit that Fan button so that I don't miss the next one huh? Best wishes back to you too. I think it has some evocative properties for me. Cheers, Fonda
Comment from djsaxon
Excellent chapter, mister. Minor typo - and disconnect her battery, but (,) in the meantime. Comma shift.
Who knows how long it lay there before the first flickering tongues of flame started to take hold? After a few minutes, wisps of smoke were creeping (crept) under the bedroom door. Even that, initially, did nothing to disturb either of us. (our post-coital bliss - Nah!) Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Excellent chapter, mister. Minor typo - and disconnect her battery, but (,) in the meantime. Comma shift.
Who knows how long it lay there before the first flickering tongues of flame started to take hold? After a few minutes, wisps of smoke were creeping (crept) under the bedroom door. Even that, initially, did nothing to disturb either of us. (our post-coital bliss - Nah!) Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks, DJ. I must stop writing these chapters at midnight. The mind wanders where it ought not.
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Wander where it ought at any hour. I had over dosed on 'anal' meds - D
Comment from Sankey
Good work again. Hope the place didn't burn down while they were "coitering" IN the following Intro stuff was missing on the page but when I copied and pasted it in Reviewing it showed up?? Chapter 68
Although Ian was effusive in his thanks for the help I'd given him, I...(funny thing I copied and pasted the following that was missing on your page but it came up in here??)t didn't take long for me to realise he needed time alone, working through his grief without the distraction of others. Essentially a shy and private person, he didn't find it easy to fulfil the role of host. He might have coped better if I'd come without Helen. Her presence was adding an element of tension. I had noticed it in some of his snappish comments over the past twenty-four hours....this was not showing.,
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Good work again. Hope the place didn't burn down while they were "coitering" IN the following Intro stuff was missing on the page but when I copied and pasted it in Reviewing it showed up?? Chapter 68
Although Ian was effusive in his thanks for the help I'd given him, I...(funny thing I copied and pasted the following that was missing on your page but it came up in here??)t didn't take long for me to realise he needed time alone, working through his grief without the distraction of others. Essentially a shy and private person, he didn't find it easy to fulfil the role of host. He might have coped better if I'd come without Helen. Her presence was adding an element of tension. I had noticed it in some of his snappish comments over the past twenty-four hours....this was not showing.,
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Geoffrey. I'm not sure what would have caused that - just a temporary glitch, I imagine.