The French Letter
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Comment from Ulla
Wow, Tony, this story gets better and better and if your writing could get any better it certainly does. Brilliant springs to mind. I hope one day you'll find the time to read Robert Goddard. He's a wonderful British writer and you'll see what I mean. I know, I've mentioned it before.
So now we're to learn what Bisto's great grandfather wrote. Can't wait. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Wow, Tony, this story gets better and better and if your writing could get any better it certainly does. Brilliant springs to mind. I hope one day you'll find the time to read Robert Goddard. He's a wonderful British writer and you'll see what I mean. I know, I've mentioned it before.
So now we're to learn what Bisto's great grandfather wrote. Can't wait. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review and encouragement, Ulla. Yes, I did look up Robert Goddard and I think I downloaded one of his books onto Kindle - but haven't got around to reading it yet. Must move it further up the list of things to do! LOL
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I'm glad to hear that.:)
Comment from Mastery
Very interesting chapter, Tony. You have begun to take the French Letter in an entirely different direction, I think.
I loved this passage. great imagery and fantastic writing to boot:
"I climbed the stairs with care, so as not to wake Helen but floorboards in old houses creak and groan. I felt as if I were treading on ancient ghosts, disturbing their sleep. A threadbare carpet of oriental design ran the length of the corridor and a blue-and-white potpourri holder stood like a sentinel, on a flame mahogany whatnot between two doors. However, the dried petals of summer were unable to mask the pervading odour of fust and decay. Moonlight filtered through a skylight above the landing, illuminating the wooden stand, making the rich colour of its wood glisten like freshly spilled blood."
Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Very interesting chapter, Tony. You have begun to take the French Letter in an entirely different direction, I think.
I loved this passage. great imagery and fantastic writing to boot:
"I climbed the stairs with care, so as not to wake Helen but floorboards in old houses creak and groan. I felt as if I were treading on ancient ghosts, disturbing their sleep. A threadbare carpet of oriental design ran the length of the corridor and a blue-and-white potpourri holder stood like a sentinel, on a flame mahogany whatnot between two doors. However, the dried petals of summer were unable to mask the pervading odour of fust and decay. Moonlight filtered through a skylight above the landing, illuminating the wooden stand, making the rich colour of its wood glisten like freshly spilled blood."
Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your comments, as always, and your encouragement. I have more or less decided how I am going to tie this all together now. It will take a few more chapters but I think there will be quite a bit to cut out of the earlier parts when it comes time for the final edit.
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Sounds like a good plan, Tony. Good Luck. Bob
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I see you have already posted the sequel to this and I can't wait to read it. I am hurrying this review so I can rush right there and read. That's a mark of a good author.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I see you have already posted the sequel to this and I can't wait to read it. I am hurrying this review so I can rush right there and read. That's a mark of a good author.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Barbara. I thought it a bit long for one post, so decided to split it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. The older houses have a way to creak and bump through the nights when the old ghosts make their appearances.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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A very well-written chapter. The older houses have a way to creak and bump through the nights when the old ghosts make their appearances.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. You are always good reading dear friend. You have a real art with the pen. Have already mad comments elsewhere so won't go into it more here. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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This was a great chapter. You are always good reading dear friend. You have a real art with the pen. Have already mad comments elsewhere so won't go into it more here. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Again - many thanks for your support and encouragement. Tony
Comment from JudyE
Off to read the next chapter and wondering about the slight change in Bisto's attitude. I didn't find anything to comment on or suggest. It's a very entertaining story.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Off to read the next chapter and wondering about the slight change in Bisto's attitude. I didn't find anything to comment on or suggest. It's a very entertaining story.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Judy. Bisto does seem to be a bit on edge. I wonder if it's because of his current situation or something deeper. Appreciate the sixth star. All the best, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Tony,
very nice movement in this finely written transitional chapter. I am quitter interested to find out the contents of said journal myself. lol
illuminating the wooden stand, making the rich colour of its wood glisten like freshly spilled blood.- lovely. lol Charles is a dreamer... lol
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Hi Tony,
very nice movement in this finely written transitional chapter. I am quitter interested to find out the contents of said journal myself. lol
illuminating the wooden stand, making the rich colour of its wood glisten like freshly spilled blood.- lovely. lol Charles is a dreamer... lol
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thanks again, Gareth. These bloody antiques bring out the romantic in all of us.
Comment from Tootsie55
Entrancing chapter. Good work as usual. Looking forward to where this is all going. Just one possible little tiny spag if you will. pervading odour of [f](d)ust and decay.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Entrancing chapter. Good work as usual. Looking forward to where this is all going. Just one possible little tiny spag if you will. pervading odour of [f](d)ust and decay.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thanks again, Louise. 'Fust' is an rare word these days - though people still talk about things being 'fusty' (smelling stale, damp, or stuffy).
Comment from lyenochka
You did a marvelous job with the setting in this part, Tony. You already peeked our interest with the mention of the fairies. And the "eastern veil" of the sky and the gossamer webbing all set the scene for some magical story which you'll tell us soon.
I like old Bisto, he's pragmatic and he's thoughtful and sensitive to remove the markhor decor.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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You did a marvelous job with the setting in this part, Tony. You already peeked our interest with the mention of the fairies. And the "eastern veil" of the sky and the gossamer webbing all set the scene for some magical story which you'll tell us soon.
I like old Bisto, he's pragmatic and he's thoughtful and sensitive to remove the markhor decor.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thanks very much for your comments about this one. Yes, I'd deliberately dropped in a couple of hints - delighted that you picked them up.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Excellent storyline. I did note a couple of spelling errors. Although lengthy also a compelling read. Excellent depiction of scenery and landscape. Well written. This would lend itself well to an animated feature film. You might even consider animal characters as opposed to humans. It might prove an interesting twist. Keep it up!
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Excellent storyline. I did note a couple of spelling errors. Although lengthy also a compelling read. Excellent depiction of scenery and landscape. Well written. This would lend itself well to an animated feature film. You might even consider animal characters as opposed to humans. It might prove an interesting twist. Keep it up!
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your interesting comments, Brenda. I shall bear your suggestions in mind.
I should be grateful if you could point out the spelling errors. This is written in British English, which doesn?t always align with American spelling.
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"Fairies" and "odor". However, the British English is more charming for your this piece. Again beautifully written!