The French Letter
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Comment from JudyE
I am really enjoying this story and find myself waiting impatiently for the next episode. I know a little French but the way you paraphrase it each time works really well and in no way detracts.
I would have queried 'a slither of light' and suggested 'sliver' but when I researched it, it seems 'slither' is 'informal British'.
Bon jour, Monsieur Brandon. - bonjour is one word. Cheers. Judy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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I am really enjoying this story and find myself waiting impatiently for the next episode. I know a little French but the way you paraphrase it each time works really well and in no way detracts.
I would have queried 'a slither of light' and suggested 'sliver' but when I researched it, it seems 'slither' is 'informal British'.
Bon jour, Monsieur Brandon. - bonjour is one word. Cheers. Judy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Joan. I appreciate your comments. I have had one or two people concerned about the use of French - some for and some against. I'm trying to steer a middle path!
'Sliver' is what I intended and I have changed it. Bonjour, too!
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Put me down as another vote for the French. :) And I think you've pretty much nailed the middle path.
And I even edit replies! It's Judy, not Joan but that's okay. lol
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Mind in neutral. I apologise about the name change! Will try not to do it again.
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No problem. I've been called worse.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. You do a great job with the pace of the story and making it believable. I will have to continue following the rest of the story. Thanks for sharing. Bill
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. You do a great job with the pace of the story and making it believable. I will have to continue following the rest of the story. Thanks for sharing. Bill
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Bill, and for your comments about the pacing and believability. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
Once again, so glad to see you back. Such an interesting read. I love your descriptive storytelling style. I wish I had done French instead of Latin for my elective. No spags and a wonderful chapter. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Once again, so glad to see you back. Such an interesting read. I love your descriptive storytelling style. I wish I had done French instead of Latin for my elective. No spags and a wonderful chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks for your continued encouragement, kind words and the sixth star. All much appreciated, Tony.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Tony. I enjoyed this new chapter with the exception of some spots of french, which I do not understand and so it always gives me pause to figure things out of course.
I admire your use of imagery , here for instance: "he few people on the street hurried as they made their way to work, heads down and with thin trails of mist trailing from their breath."
Good hook at the end, my friend. " I was just beginning to retrace the journey in my mind when I heard voices at the front door, followed by footsteps on the stair." (suspenseful)
Good job, Tony. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Hi, Tony. I enjoyed this new chapter with the exception of some spots of french, which I do not understand and so it always gives me pause to figure things out of course.
I admire your use of imagery , here for instance: "he few people on the street hurried as they made their way to work, heads down and with thin trails of mist trailing from their breath."
Good hook at the end, my friend. " I was just beginning to retrace the journey in my mind when I heard voices at the front door, followed by footsteps on the stair." (suspenseful)
Good job, Tony. Bob
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks for your continued encouragement and kind words. Much appreciated. Wherever I use French, I try to translate the gist of it in the text (e.g. 'Only an hour before the forensics team would arrive' and 'How true that was. I was indeed happy to have returned') - except, of course, when it is just a greeting or exclamation. It can be a bit of a balancing act at times. All the best, Tony.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi TF,
This is another intriguing chapter you have composed. It is very well written, as always. Nothing to suggest improving upon. I am curious about the drawing... And who is it coming at the end? Ha ha! Great cliff hanger, TF.
Thank you for a delightful read.
Jan :-)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Hi TF,
This is another intriguing chapter you have composed. It is very well written, as always. Nothing to suggest improving upon. I am curious about the drawing... And who is it coming at the end? Ha ha! Great cliff hanger, TF.
Thank you for a delightful read.
Jan :-)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks for your continued encouragement and kind words, Jan. Much appreciated, Tony.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really do like this story. I am wondering who the footsteps belong to, but I fear it may not be somebody visiting to share tea. You are doing a great job writing this.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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I really do like this story. I am wondering who the footsteps belong to, but I fear it may not be somebody visiting to share tea. You are doing a great job writing this.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks, Barbara, for your continued encouragement, kind words and the sixth star. All much appreciated, Tony.
Comment from royowen
What an exciting, but singular look through our hero's eyes, presuming he was our unconscious "saboteaur", is making life emotionally uncomfortable for Charles. The fact that he is a bomber, he steals a Painting of Lautrec, that maybe of the grandmother of Alain Gaudin. Excellent work Tony, enjoyable episode. (I was down your way on a church camp on the weekend) but well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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What an exciting, but singular look through our hero's eyes, presuming he was our unconscious "saboteaur", is making life emotionally uncomfortable for Charles. The fact that he is a bomber, he steals a Painting of Lautrec, that maybe of the grandmother of Alain Gaudin. Excellent work Tony, enjoyable episode. (I was down your way on a church camp on the weekend) but well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Roy, and for your comments about the viewpoint. I hope you enjoyed your visit to the South Coast. If you are ever down this way again, it would be good to catch up. Best wishes, Tony
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Of course Tony.
Comment from damommy
What a nightmare Charles had been put into. I can't imagine how he's ever going to get out of it. Now, the footsteps don't bode well for him. Don't keep me in suspense too long.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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What a nightmare Charles had been put into. I can't imagine how he's ever going to get out of it. Now, the footsteps don't bode well for him. Don't keep me in suspense too long.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Yvonne, and for your comments. At least Charles has managed to make his escape. Whether he can stay free or not may be another matter! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from bmethner
Wonderful description which created visuals to follow the story line. The flow of the piece moved easily creating intrigue to engage the reader's interest. The character was well developed and easy to relate to.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Wonderful description which created visuals to follow the story line. The flow of the piece moved easily creating intrigue to engage the reader's interest. The character was well developed and easy to relate to.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, bmethner, and for your comments about the descriptions and flow. Glad you enjoyed the characterisation, too. I appreciate the sixth star. Most generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is a great continuation to the story and full of suspense as well. Brandon makes it safely back to his flat but now somebody is approaching. What is happening now?
There was an chill in the morning air as the city began to wake up. = There was a chill in the morning air as the city began to wake up.
All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Hi Tony, this is a great continuation to the story and full of suspense as well. Brandon makes it safely back to his flat but now somebody is approaching. What is happening now?
There was an chill in the morning air as the city began to wake up. = There was a chill in the morning air as the city began to wake up.
All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 07-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for your review, Ulla, and for your comments about the suspense. Thanks for picking up the spag. I deleted an adjective and forgot about the 'an'! Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Best wishes, Tony