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The French Letter

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A Novel

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Comment from Spitfire
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Ha,ha, You can't write a chapter without food or more observations about the sights to see in Paris and in commedia dell'arte troupe.
The plot is gaining speed with the info that her sister killed a gangster.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    :))) I only mentioned it as a passing thought! They didn't break their enforced diet - except maybe with the orange juice in the Harvey Wallbanger! I guess I'll just have to move them across to England, where the food isn't quite so tempting! LOL
Comment from krys123
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Cheers, Tony;
>What amazing chapter and well written also, Tony. I enjoyed your take on the atmosphere at any time and each moment you expressed in atmosphere around the characters especially with the kaleidoscopic lightning in the background setting the stage.
>You even go as far as having people getting a gastronomical excitement by having a frog tail pizza over a stomach full of snails could make anyone kinda sick. Chuckle!
>So, Kayla killed a man in Bangkok.
>Looking forward to the next installment thanks a lot Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alx

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Hi Alex. Glad to have entertained you with this one! All the best to you and your family, Tony
reply by krys123 on 30-Nov-2018
    You're very welcome, Tony.
    Alx
Comment from Aussie
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Scaramouche indeed. Your chapter was enthralling and I think this will be a most interesting book when finished. I love the French language and obviously you do too.
Well written and kept this reader's interest all the way through. XXK.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Kay. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony
Comment from estory
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There's a bit of a carnival atmosphere as the show lets out and the doorman stops them, and then that Scaramouche makes his strange appearance...a colorful character, but i'm not sure how it fits in with the story. The chapter takes off as Kayla relates the episode with Bukhari, and how she kills him in the car, trying to escape from his clutches. I think the dialogue is strong, you have lots of personality in the characters as they talk, great caricatures. Suspenseful at the end, as we wonder where there is leading. estory

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Thanks, estory. Andre (aka Scaramouche) has apparently been quite a help to Kayla since she arrived in France. He may reappear later in the story in that context. All the best, Tony.
Comment from sunnilicious
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Great novel installments. Easy to follow along. Good narrative. Good dialog. Creative. Interesting as it sparks continued interest. I like how you left the read hanging for the next installment. Enjoyable to read. Good author notes. Keep up the great work :)

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Very many thanks, Alicia, for your supportive comments and six star award. Much appreciated :) Tony
Comment from lyenochka
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Great job with the characterization and the humor. I laughed at the name "scaramouche" which is a well known drama caricature and you used him well for the humorous effect. I also liked how you seamlessly used the French and then the translation by the surly but bilingual guard. Now we have a lot more questions answered but the only thing that bothers me is that Kayla seems to know about Charles as if Helen had been in contact with Kayla before this time. I thought Helen didn't even know if Kayla was alive. She only met Charles at the beginning of the book.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Many thanks for your comment about Kayla and Helen. It had been my intention that Helen told Kayla about Charles while he and Andre were talking, but I didn?t really leave them enough time to do that, so maybe I?ll just take that sentence out. Many thanks for the sixth star Glad you enjoyed the surly doorman.
Comment from RGstar
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Just better and better. Not the guns and spills, speed and thrills, just good strong narrative with life and purpose taking center stage.
What can I say. An excellent read, where solid its foundations, and as interesting as though I had read all the chapters.
One can just feel the confidence and wellbeing of word itself.
Well done my friend.
My six stars for sure.
Best wishes.
RG

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
    Very many thanks, Roy. You are a great supporter of my writing, and I always value your reviews and opinion. I appreciate the extra star and your kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
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Wow! Kayla's quite a girl. At least, we can be sure the Madame is not to be trusted. I think Charles was right all along. Looking forward to more of the story. Great imagery and conversation throughout.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Yvonne. I appreciate your kind words and continued support. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
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Charles and Helen seek out Kayla, Helen's sister playing in a palsy house, meeting Andre, playing the part of Scaramouche, in a theatre production. And then Kayla starts to relay her story from when she was in Thailand. She had killed an adversary and disappeared, and obviously survived the Ordeal. Another great write in this mystery. Well done Tony, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Roy. I appreciate your kind words and continued support. Best wishes, Tony
reply by royowen on 25-Nov-2018
    Most welcome
Comment from robyn corum
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Tony,

Wow. How can two nice girls get in so much trouble? It shows again what a sad world it is and that everyone must be on their guard at all times to remain safe.

Nice chapter. I enjoyed!

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
    True!