Perennials of War
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Comment from Sasha
Poor Drew. He means well but it seems he has touched a nerved with Shana. I am wondering if the fire has anything to do with the Russians, it seems they are capable of anything. I look forward to the next post.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Poor Drew. He means well but it seems he has touched a nerved with Shana. I am wondering if the fire has anything to do with the Russians, it seems they are capable of anything. I look forward to the next post.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. Shana will forgive Drew and he learns a little more about her, from his mom.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, trouble ahead for Drew. He is so silly, he should know Shana by now. How is this going to affect their 'friendship'? You have it all in this chapter, Barbara, fun, making the bed. (Glad I won't be sleeping on it!) A bit of tension with the fire on the oil rig, and a huge row heading Drew's way when you start the next part! LOL, I can't wait to read that part. Men seem to think money is the be all and end all of everything. Well done my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Oh dear, trouble ahead for Drew. He is so silly, he should know Shana by now. How is this going to affect their 'friendship'? You have it all in this chapter, Barbara, fun, making the bed. (Glad I won't be sleeping on it!) A bit of tension with the fire on the oil rig, and a huge row heading Drew's way when you start the next part! LOL, I can't wait to read that part. Men seem to think money is the be all and end all of everything. Well done my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Oh so true. Drew just thought he was helping. Sometimes men are clueless. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
See, Anderson's getting pretty creepy now. Controlling and looking quite manipulative as well...
Well written chapter but Mr Sharp ain't looking too great right now.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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See, Anderson's getting pretty creepy now. Controlling and looking quite manipulative as well...
Well written chapter but Mr Sharp ain't looking too great right now.
G
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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I can promise you Drew will redeem himself. Shana will hold her own. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A lighter mood for a change. Men assembling a bed without looking at instructions is probably a worldwide phenomenom. I don't blame Shana for being angry about Drew giving her money, behind her back, no less!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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A lighter mood for a change. Men assembling a bed without looking at instructions is probably a worldwide phenomenom. I don't blame Shana for being angry about Drew giving her money, behind her back, no less!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from judiverse
You've produced some humor with the attempts to put the bed together. Then the oil rig fire adds excitement. Zach is the one who's going off to see to it. He has a handgun, too. It the fire an accident or more of the plot against Shana? I assume the call from Shana's father notified her about the money in her checking account. She immediately berates Drew about doing it, saying she's not for sale. Drew forgets how proud Shana is, and she doesn't like to owe anyone. Great development in this chapter. judi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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You've produced some humor with the attempts to put the bed together. Then the oil rig fire adds excitement. Zach is the one who's going off to see to it. He has a handgun, too. It the fire an accident or more of the plot against Shana? I assume the call from Shana's father notified her about the money in her checking account. She immediately berates Drew about doing it, saying she's not for sale. Drew forgets how proud Shana is, and she doesn't like to owe anyone. Great development in this chapter. judi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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He sure did. I have a feeling this might change their relationship. HMMM, Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. Drew is trying too hard, and that's putting her off. judi
Comment from royowen
I don't think I've ever been truly happy with alive written either Barbara. . There's a serious fire on one of the oil rigs and Zachery departs to fix it, plus Hiis gun. I think this is Kuznetsov again I'll bet. Later Shana storms out of the room, because Drew has deposited money in her account. She's proud, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I don't think I've ever been truly happy with alive written either Barbara. . There's a serious fire on one of the oil rigs and Zachery departs to fix it, plus Hiis gun. I think this is Kuznetsov again I'll bet. Later Shana storms out of the room, because Drew has deposited money in her account. She's proud, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done,
Comment from tfawcus
The family dynamics work well in this chapter, with its teasing repartee. I like the way you are beginning to draw the plot elements together, too.
Just a couple of minor editing suggestions:
the extra parts(') drawer
Moments later, with his bag in hand(,) Zachery stood in the doorway.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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The family dynamics work well in this chapter, with its teasing repartee. I like the way you are beginning to draw the plot elements together, too.
Just a couple of minor editing suggestions:
the extra parts(') drawer
Moments later, with his bag in hand(,) Zachery stood in the doorway.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I had the second comma there and took it out. DARN!!! I second guessed myself. Thank you for the kind review and the catches.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, so Drew has stepped in it yet again. You would have thought that he would know how Shana would react to that one. I found a couple of things:
"I need to leave. One of sites by Corpus has a fire. I'll be in touch." = "... One of the sites by Corpus ..."
Anderson stood and stared the direction had she left. = Anderson stood and stared in the direction she had left.
I'm looking forward to what will happen next. All the best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Hi Barbara, so Drew has stepped in it yet again. You would have thought that he would know how Shana would react to that one. I found a couple of things:
"I need to leave. One of sites by Corpus has a fire. I'll be in touch." = "... One of the sites by Corpus ..."
Anderson stood and stared the direction had she left. = Anderson stood and stared in the direction she had left.
I'm looking forward to what will happen next. All the best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Corrections have been made. Thank you for the review and the catches. I appreciate both.
Comment from Sankey
Oops! Looks like Drew has overstepped the line again with Shana. Good chapter again. Only one little tiny spag this time. Anderson stood and shook his brother's hand. "I plan to[o]. Take care." They embraced in a brothers' version of a hug.
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Oops! Looks like Drew has overstepped the line again with Shana. Good chapter again. Only one little tiny spag this time. Anderson stood and shook his brother's hand. "I plan to[o]. Take care." They embraced in a brothers' version of a hug.
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I am off to fix that. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Ben Colder
I like the way this is going. Good write about action toward reaction to money deposit. Give reader questions. Excellent exit leaving me to wonder . Well done writer. Brother comments perfect.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I like the way this is going. Good write about action toward reaction to money deposit. Give reader questions. Excellent exit leaving me to wonder . Well done writer. Brother comments perfect.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.