Perennials of War
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So now they've hired Patricia to kill Shana. Good plan, but she's high on drugs and not thinking clearly. Shana can use that to stop her. I don't think Pat wants to kill her anyway. Most women are not murderers at heart. I wonder how Shana will get out of this.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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So now they've hired Patricia to kill Shana. Good plan, but she's high on drugs and not thinking clearly. Shana can use that to stop her. I don't think Pat wants to kill her anyway. Most women are not murderers at heart. I wonder how Shana will get out of this.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I am wondering how Shana will get out too. Hmm. Thank you for the kind review.
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You'd better KNOW now she gets out. LOL!
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Really liked the situation Shana must face with Patricia. The angst and and tension she feels is palpable. Initially one comes a way fro the post with Patricia being a real b----- only to realize at the end her mind is plagued with the idea she's being watched. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Really liked the situation Shana must face with Patricia. The angst and and tension she feels is palpable. Initially one comes a way fro the post with Patricia being a real b----- only to realize at the end her mind is plagued with the idea she's being watched. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Nice twist here. Drew's ex-wife is a piece of work all right, isn't she? lol
"I see my ex, filled you in." - not sure you need the comma here.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Nice twist here. Drew's ex-wife is a piece of work all right, isn't she? lol
"I see my ex, filled you in." - not sure you need the comma here.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I know I had to put that comma in, but I have no idea what it's doing there myself. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tpa
Enjoy story. A very strong character (Patricia). You dialogue is written so well, very blunt and to the point. The words flowed nicely throughout the chapter. looking forward to your next.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Enjoy story. A very strong character (Patricia). You dialogue is written so well, very blunt and to the point. The words flowed nicely throughout the chapter. looking forward to your next.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
It's understandable you're busy with school stuff. Thanks for keeping us posted.
As usual, this is well paced with fine characterization and dialog as well as sentence mechanics. Draws the reader right in. Holds attention easily. Excellent deep POV with internal dialog. The closing twist is awesome with tension and suspense. What a situation. I admire how calm and cool Shana is in front of the pistol!
NOTES
*Is nosey UK spelling? In USA it is NOSY
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"I see my ex,(no ,) filled you in."
*See(,) Drew left me penniless.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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It's understandable you're busy with school stuff. Thanks for keeping us posted.
As usual, this is well paced with fine characterization and dialog as well as sentence mechanics. Draws the reader right in. Holds attention easily. Excellent deep POV with internal dialog. The closing twist is awesome with tension and suspense. What a situation. I admire how calm and cool Shana is in front of the pistol!
NOTES
*Is nosey UK spelling? In USA it is NOSY
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"I see my ex,(no ,) filled you in."
*See(,) Drew left me penniless.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
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Happy to be of service, dear B. :-)
Comment from c_lucas
It looks like the new help is not doing their job. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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It looks like the new help is not doing their job. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from apky
Oh no, Shana could be in trouble with Patricia. But I'm comforted by the thought that since she's the heroine, she'll come out of the situation intact. I like how you not only brought Patricia in but how you surprised the reader with her suddenly pulling out a gun and saying she's hired to kill Shana. It sounded very convincing after we know there are people after killing Shana.
"I see my ex(delete-,) filled you in."
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Oh no, Shana could be in trouble with Patricia. But I'm comforted by the thought that since she's the heroine, she'll come out of the situation intact. I like how you not only brought Patricia in but how you surprised the reader with her suddenly pulling out a gun and saying she's hired to kill Shana. It sounded very convincing after we know there are people after killing Shana.
"I see my ex(delete-,) filled you in."
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I guess this story has gone on too long, because people have forgotten about Patricia and her meeting with Drew at the penthouse. Drew left with $30,000 a month alimony and $25,000 month child support. She's doing okay, I would say. Thank you for the kind review. I have no clue how or why that comma is there, myself. I am wondering about gremlins. LOL
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It was me, Commander-in-Chief of gremlins!
Comment from Ben Colder
Well what a surprise! The ex is harping a song of murder. Never know about a desperate woman. LOL. Good one Barbara. I find nothing wrong. Now along comes Drew.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Well what a surprise! The ex is harping a song of murder. Never know about a desperate woman. LOL. Good one Barbara. I find nothing wrong. Now along comes Drew.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, It's not a pleasant situation to be in for Shana, and a difficult as well. No wonder she wants Drew to be back to sought out his domestic affairs.
The latter half of your writing is in italics. Don't know what's gone wrong. All the best.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Hi Barbara, It's not a pleasant situation to be in for Shana, and a difficult as well. No wonder she wants Drew to be back to sought out his domestic affairs.
The latter half of your writing is in italics. Don't know what's gone wrong. All the best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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I will check it out. I must have forgotten to add the correct mark. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb,
why did you leave us to wonder what happens next.
The way you told us of the freighting scene with Shana and Patricia Drew's ex- wife
put me on edge and I could feel of how Shana
trying to be calm figuring out what to do when she saw Patrica's shaking hand as she held a gun
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Barb,
why did you leave us to wonder what happens next.
The way you told us of the freighting scene with Shana and Patricia Drew's ex- wife
put me on edge and I could feel of how Shana
trying to be calm figuring out what to do when she saw Patrica's shaking hand as she held a gun
Gert
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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I needed a place to stop it and it seemed like a good place, so the post wouldn't be too long. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
to me you stopped at the perfect time leaving us in suspense
Gert