Perennials of War
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Comment from Sasha
My goodness, what a scary event. I don't know if I could stay calm under such a frightening situation. They survived, but now they have to figure out how and why they attacked. I agree with Anderson, it is best to keep Shana out of this. I would have been hiding under the bed, even knowing if they had succeeded, that would be the first place they would have looked. I anxiously look forward to the next post. You did a great job with the action in this one. I found no errors or things that needed clarifying.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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My goodness, what a scary event. I don't know if I could stay calm under such a frightening situation. They survived, but now they have to figure out how and why they attacked. I agree with Anderson, it is best to keep Shana out of this. I would have been hiding under the bed, even knowing if they had succeeded, that would be the first place they would have looked. I anxiously look forward to the next post. You did a great job with the action in this one. I found no errors or things that needed clarifying.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post and due to the number of people I review I', out of sixes so a virtual six. Liked how you gradually increased the danger. You could cut the tension with a knife. The last line was an excellent hook. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post and due to the number of people I review I', out of sixes so a virtual six. Liked how you gradually increased the danger. You could cut the tension with a knife. The last line was an excellent hook. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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I love virtual sixes too. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
That was a shock. THey didn't wait long to come for Shana. Fortunately Drew had enough men to overpower them. But what happened to the others who were four minutes away? Did the Russians get them?
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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That was a shock. THey didn't wait long to come for Shana. Fortunately Drew had enough men to overpower them. But what happened to the others who were four minutes away? Did the Russians get them?
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Barbara, tears pooled in my eyes as I read this, but not for reasons that you think. The recent school shooting in Florida has left me raw and hypersensitive to the point where I see everything from that prism. The first thought that jumped out at me as I read this was "I wish our children got the level of security Shana received."
Usually I would cheer and celebrate the action and gun shooting, but the story here hit too close to home. When I read, "Surly they wouldn't attack here. There are innocent people living in this building," I felt that sentiment could apply to many places in America. As reality and the Russians in your novel prove, there are people who will attack no matter how many innocents are present. Anderson's thoughts echo those of many Americans at this juncture: "I should've added more security."
I had a flashback and felt I was in that school when I read, "He tilted his head at the cadence of brat tat, brat tat, brat tat. An assault weapon, probably Russian." I saw children being hit.
This is less a review than a raw, visceral response in which a grim reality intrudes upon romantic fiction. Your writing is as polished as ever, but what stands out is your closing line which reflects the zeitgeist of this moment: "I'm so sorry."
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Barbara, tears pooled in my eyes as I read this, but not for reasons that you think. The recent school shooting in Florida has left me raw and hypersensitive to the point where I see everything from that prism. The first thought that jumped out at me as I read this was "I wish our children got the level of security Shana received."
Usually I would cheer and celebrate the action and gun shooting, but the story here hit too close to home. When I read, "Surly they wouldn't attack here. There are innocent people living in this building," I felt that sentiment could apply to many places in America. As reality and the Russians in your novel prove, there are people who will attack no matter how many innocents are present. Anderson's thoughts echo those of many Americans at this juncture: "I should've added more security."
I had a flashback and felt I was in that school when I read, "He tilted his head at the cadence of brat tat, brat tat, brat tat. An assault weapon, probably Russian." I saw children being hit.
This is less a review than a raw, visceral response in which a grim reality intrudes upon romantic fiction. Your writing is as polished as ever, but what stands out is your closing line which reflects the zeitgeist of this moment: "I'm so sorry."
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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I completely understand.
Comment from Sankey
Top dramatic thrilling chapter. Great work and no spags. Glad it ended the way it did. I guess there will be more somehow. Great picture as well. Thanks again.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Top dramatic thrilling chapter. Great work and no spags. Glad it ended the way it did. I guess there will be more somehow. Great picture as well. Thanks again.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
It's kind of hard to know where the enemy is in the dark. The addition of an automatic weapon could kill friend and enemy. This is very well written with a tense flow of words.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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It's kind of hard to know where the enemy is in the dark. The addition of an automatic weapon could kill friend and enemy. This is very well written with a tense flow of words.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Ric Myworld
I see you've done some home work on your guns. I have a number of Sig Sauer models, including a P238 and the P938 which is made on the same micro frame. Plenty of stopping power in a easily hidden compact. Only problem for self protection is they only hold 7 bullets, or 8 with one in the chamber. Anderson needs something that uses a magazine that holds like 15. Maybe like a Barretta MP9. LOL! Who cares, I'm just teasing you. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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I see you've done some home work on your guns. I have a number of Sig Sauer models, including a P238 and the P938 which is made on the same micro frame. Plenty of stopping power in a easily hidden compact. Only problem for self protection is they only hold 7 bullets, or 8 with one in the chamber. Anderson needs something that uses a magazine that holds like 15. Maybe like a Barretta MP9. LOL! Who cares, I'm just teasing you. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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I know nothing about guns. I just did research and the sites told me it's a preferred gun for law enforcements. When I research, I go to numerous sites so I just don't get one opinion. I think my husband told me as a CID agent the Army issued Sig Sauer. I appreciate your review.
Comment from judiverse
Very suspenseful, and I'm happy to use one of my sixes. So the electrical lines were sabotaged. Those guys will stop at nothing. Anderson and his team went into action quickly and he got Shana to safety. She has really had her share of frightening experiences. I love the way you handled this Line: "A shadow moved. Anderson shot. The shadow fell." Great! Very intense, and Anderson is really challenged to stay on top of this situation. judi
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Very suspenseful, and I'm happy to use one of my sixes. So the electrical lines were sabotaged. Those guys will stop at nothing. Anderson and his team went into action quickly and he got Shana to safety. She has really had her share of frightening experiences. I love the way you handled this Line: "A shadow moved. Anderson shot. The shadow fell." Great! Very intense, and Anderson is really challenged to stay on top of this situation. judi
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're very welcome. A wonderful story. judi
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really well written, Barbara. the action, the thoughts of Anderson as it was all taking place, all added to the suspense of this part. Now Shana is really upset, probably because she still has that guilt complex about endangering Anderson and his friend's lives. I did find one little error...As a knock[ed] sounded at the door... take out the 'ed'. Well done, my friend. Oh, I bought the Kindle version of your book to read as soon as I've finished the one I'm reading at the moment. As least now I have a good one ready. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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That was really well written, Barbara. the action, the thoughts of Anderson as it was all taking place, all added to the suspense of this part. Now Shana is really upset, probably because she still has that guilt complex about endangering Anderson and his friend's lives. I did find one little error...As a knock[ed] sounded at the door... take out the 'ed'. Well done, my friend. Oh, I bought the Kindle version of your book to read as soon as I've finished the one I'm reading at the moment. As least now I have a good one ready. Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review and buying my book. I'm so happy.
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You are so very welcome. I can't wait to read it. I bought it on UK Amazon, so will put my review on there when I've finished it. I think I can still put it on Amazon.com, but it will come up as Amazon customer. The UK one will say, 'verified purchase' xxx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and so full of suspense. I think you handled that very well. The whole thing must be a nightmare for poor Shana. Didn't see anything to correct. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and so full of suspense. I think you handled that very well. The whole thing must be a nightmare for poor Shana. Didn't see anything to correct. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.