Perennials of War
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Comment from rheabug
This is a really good entry for your book. It is interesting all that goes on within the conversationsof the group. Hope you have recoverd nicely from your virus and getting back to writing. Hugs
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This is a really good entry for your book. It is interesting all that goes on within the conversationsof the group. Hope you have recoverd nicely from your virus and getting back to writing. Hugs
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the concern and for the encouraging review.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
Good to see a post from you, my friend.
"I bet it's from Kuznetsov and it's the receipt." (Ouch! That could complicate things.)
"What does this mean? How can it be? My family didn't sell the painting. I'm positive." (Corruption is my guess.)
"according to this, they never auctioned that painting." (There ya go!)
"Of course, white always looks classy." (Not on me it doesn't. I get it dirty before we leave the house lol.)
"I'll pass, but it sounds really good." Shana took a bite of fruit that had been left on her plate." (You might want to think about this line a bit. I could be wrong as I haven't finished my morning coffee yet... but to me it sounds like somebody left some fruit on her plate. It could be spiked lol. Well not there, but anywhere else it could be. If that makes sense.)
"What's a Rabbi? Is it a type of rabbit?" (Hahahaha! Too cute.)
Another great chapter combing tension and cute humor. The finish was well timed. Saved by the bell, indeed.
Great work and I'm looking forward to the Austrian call.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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G'day Barbara.
Good to see a post from you, my friend.
"I bet it's from Kuznetsov and it's the receipt." (Ouch! That could complicate things.)
"What does this mean? How can it be? My family didn't sell the painting. I'm positive." (Corruption is my guess.)
"according to this, they never auctioned that painting." (There ya go!)
"Of course, white always looks classy." (Not on me it doesn't. I get it dirty before we leave the house lol.)
"I'll pass, but it sounds really good." Shana took a bite of fruit that had been left on her plate." (You might want to think about this line a bit. I could be wrong as I haven't finished my morning coffee yet... but to me it sounds like somebody left some fruit on her plate. It could be spiked lol. Well not there, but anywhere else it could be. If that makes sense.)
"What's a Rabbi? Is it a type of rabbit?" (Hahahaha! Too cute.)
Another great chapter combing tension and cute humor. The finish was well timed. Saved by the bell, indeed.
Great work and I'm looking forward to the Austrian call.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Always welcome, mate.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
You know what is so good about your writing in this novel of yours is how you show tension and them how Emily -- Anderson's five year old daughter with with her curious little mind to ask questions, which to me seems to should I say breaks up the tension, then all of a sudden you leave us hanging with suspense with your last sentence.
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hello Barb
You know what is so good about your writing in this novel of yours is how you show tension and them how Emily -- Anderson's five year old daughter with with her curious little mind to ask questions, which to me seems to should I say breaks up the tension, then all of a sudden you leave us hanging with suspense with your last sentence.
Gert
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the wonderfully encouraging review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter. Wish it was longer, but I understand. Where ya bin? Have not seen you for a while? I need to get back to writing myself. Thanks again still a very exciting and "grabbing" story.
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Good chapter. Wish it was longer, but I understand. Where ya bin? Have not seen you for a while? I need to get back to writing myself. Thanks again still a very exciting and "grabbing" story.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara;
Now, I'm stuck wondering what is in that package. I think you did a good job of having Shana explain to Emily the meaning of Kosher without going into too much detail.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
A few nits: '"You're correct. The carrier wanted to deliver it himself, but I assured him I'd make (sure)you got it."'
'"To be honest(+,) I have no idea.'
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hi, Barbara;
Now, I'm stuck wondering what is in that package. I think you did a good job of having Shana explain to Emily the meaning of Kosher without going into too much detail.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
A few nits: '"You're correct. The carrier wanted to deliver it himself, but I assured him I'd make (sure)you got it."'
'"To be honest(+,) I have no idea.'
~patty~
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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I am off to make the corrections. I appreciate the kind review.
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you're welcome
Comment from Sharon Haiste
It's always good when a chapter, or part of a chapter, can stand alone as a story. You've managed to do that well.
The story is clear, characters are good.
Well done.
I look forward to the next piece.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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It's always good when a chapter, or part of a chapter, can stand alone as a story. You've managed to do that well.
The story is clear, characters are good.
Well done.
I look forward to the next piece.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Barb
= LOL ... saved by the bell, when it came to going into detail about 'Kosher'.
= I'm enjoying Emily's character.
= Well penned installment.
= Missing a (t).
"It says he bought the pain(t)ing at an auction
= Is this a spacing issue, or FanStory gremlin? (*<*)
She studied it for a few moments. "What does this mean? How can it be?
My family didn't sell the painting. I'm positive."
Cheers, J
Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hi, Barb
= LOL ... saved by the bell, when it came to going into detail about 'Kosher'.
= I'm enjoying Emily's character.
= Well penned installment.
= Missing a (t).
"It says he bought the pain(t)ing at an auction
= Is this a spacing issue, or FanStory gremlin? (*<*)
She studied it for a few moments. "What does this mean? How can it be?
My family didn't sell the painting. I'm positive."
Cheers, J
Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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I fixed the missing 't' and the spacing issue. I changed that line after I posted and I guess a space squeezed it's way in. LOL Thank you for the catches.
Comment from royowen
So, Kuznetsov has produced a receipt, saying he purchased the painting at a popular purchasing place in Austria, but later find that no such record exists, so Philip is asked to investigate further, Emily asks what kosher means...then saved by the doorbell and a package.. Well done Barnara, blessings, Roy
Typo : but I assured him I'd make (sure) you got it 2: it says he bought the pain(t)ing... 3: "Would someone tell (me)what kosher means?
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So, Kuznetsov has produced a receipt, saying he purchased the painting at a popular purchasing place in Austria, but later find that no such record exists, so Philip is asked to investigate further, Emily asks what kosher means...then saved by the doorbell and a package.. Well done Barnara, blessings, Roy
Typo : but I assured him I'd make (sure) you got it 2: it says he bought the pain(t)ing... 3: "Would someone tell (me)what kosher means?
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
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My pleasure Barbara
Comment from c_lucas
This is very very well written making for a very interesting read. I see your first graders may have to edit your post. (HA HA)
He's thet (that) lawyer
the paining (painting) at an auction
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This is very very well written making for a very interesting read. I see your first graders may have to edit your post. (HA HA)
He's thet (that) lawyer
the paining (painting) at an auction
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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LOL I think they did do it. I will make the corrections. Thank you. Corrections made.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Sasha
Yes, I want to know if the receipt is real too. That would be a big item to add to their list of questions. I certainly wouldn't trust the Russians, no matter what they submit as evidence of ownership. Nice work with this chapter. I enjoyed it very much.
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Yes, I want to know if the receipt is real too. That would be a big item to add to their list of questions. I certainly wouldn't trust the Russians, no matter what they submit as evidence of ownership. Nice work with this chapter. I enjoyed it very much.
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for stopping by and leaving this kind review.