Perennials of War
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A great chapter, Barbara - I particularly enjoyed the interaction between Emily and Shana -
Shana's lucky to have a decent man like Anderson helping her. Looking forward to find out what happens.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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A great chapter, Barbara - I particularly enjoyed the interaction between Emily and Shana -
Shana's lucky to have a decent man like Anderson helping her. Looking forward to find out what happens.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there; I love the relationship between Shana and Emily. We have been given a glimpse into the inner workings of the household, and it is easy to see how Anderson is able to get so much done with the help he has in the house.
I'm hoping Shana will start to get some answers. I think while she is enjoying her stay, she still is focused on the task at hand.
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Hi there; I love the relationship between Shana and Emily. We have been given a glimpse into the inner workings of the household, and it is easy to see how Anderson is able to get so much done with the help he has in the house.
I'm hoping Shana will start to get some answers. I think while she is enjoying her stay, she still is focused on the task at hand.
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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I appreciate your insight. Thank you.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Nice change of pace; the innocent 'presence' regarding Emily offering the reader a respite from the seriousness surrounding your characters.
"I am." He took a drink of milk. "Did you milk the cow too?"
"Silly, milk comes from the store." Priceless.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
Nice change of pace; the innocent 'presence' regarding Emily offering the reader a respite from the seriousness surrounding your characters.
"I am." He took a drink of milk. "Did you milk the cow too?"
"Silly, milk comes from the store." Priceless.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Sankey
Well done. Felt it was time for a SIX again. I loved the interraction between Shana and Emily. Also the fully compliant Dad which I feel Emily has missed with her boring mother. No spags and great story again.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Well done. Felt it was time for a SIX again. I loved the interraction between Shana and Emily. Also the fully compliant Dad which I feel Emily has missed with her boring mother. No spags and great story again.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Anderson's fathering skills will play an important role.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Nice break from tension with a lighthearted chapter about Emily. Anderson must be a decent guy, shown by how he is with his child. Shana was really lucky to have him come by when she needed help. :)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Nice break from tension with a lighthearted chapter about Emily. Anderson must be a decent guy, shown by how he is with his child. Shana was really lucky to have him come by when she needed help. :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara.
This part-chapter read well.
Only one nit to pick. You wrote:
It was hidden in the dense jungle. We had to stay low so the dangerous hyenas wouldn't find us."
Note: *Hyenas are not jungle animals; they tend to live in savannah grasslands.
Tigers--are jungle animals found in forests (China and India--very few left)
Jaguars--found in Amazon forests.
Leopards & Panthers--found in jungles, savannah, Asia; very adaptable.
Nicole
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Hi, Barbara.
This part-chapter read well.
Only one nit to pick. You wrote:
It was hidden in the dense jungle. We had to stay low so the dangerous hyenas wouldn't find us."
Note: *Hyenas are not jungle animals; they tend to live in savannah grasslands.
Tigers--are jungle animals found in forests (China and India--very few left)
Jaguars--found in Amazon forests.
Leopards & Panthers--found in jungles, savannah, Asia; very adaptable.
Nicole
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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I know that, but I felt the German Shepherds would be hyenas not any of the big cats.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, now that you've got me craving chocolate chip cookies and my mind won't focus on anything else, it's time to make a run to the supermarket. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Well, now that you've got me craving chocolate chip cookies and my mind won't focus on anything else, it's time to make a run to the supermarket. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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I hope you get plenty of chocolate chip cookies, enough to share. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is another fine piece of your story. I found a couple of things for you. 'you out did yourself' = outdid
he pushed his chair way from the table = he pushed his chair away from the table
I so enjoy the story, and I'm looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Hi Barbara, this is another fine piece of your story. I found a couple of things for you. 'you out did yourself' = outdid
he pushed his chair way from the table = he pushed his chair away from the table
I so enjoy the story, and I'm looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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I've made the changes. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from gene roush
This a nice post with good intrigue.
For the stiff dialogue I'd assume this to be a blue-blood family with pending affairs. There's one spaghetti to look at: "I think that's a great idea. You can play, oops, help wash dishes."
It ends with a nice hook to open the next post.
Thanks for sharing.
Gene
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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This a nice post with good intrigue.
For the stiff dialogue I'd assume this to be a blue-blood family with pending affairs. There's one spaghetti to look at: "I think that's a great idea. You can play, oops, help wash dishes."
It ends with a nice hook to open the next post.
Thanks for sharing.
Gene
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
It look like the ball is being put into play, but is the playing field level? Send all the kids to the principle office and leave them there for about an hour. That should give you some free time to review.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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It look like the ball is being put into play, but is the playing field level? Send all the kids to the principle office and leave them there for about an hour. That should give you some free time to review.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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LOL I wish. I have a feeling my principal would catch on. Thank you for the kind review.
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Look at the bright side. You might be suspended for a few days. Use them to review. Or teach Harley to review. He has plenty of time.