Perennials of War
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I love your dialogue, the way it bounces like real conversation. Can we just take a minute for the ginger kitten? I adore them they are my favorite animal since my first cat, aptly named Ginger, who I truly believe was an angel not just a cat. Back to your writing, always enjoyable. I sense something looming on the horizon! I am amazed that you can just keep producing chapters like this, poems work for me but I cannot keep up the momentum for chapters, that is where I always fail. I admire you for that and this amazing work of course kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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I love your dialogue, the way it bounces like real conversation. Can we just take a minute for the ginger kitten? I adore them they are my favorite animal since my first cat, aptly named Ginger, who I truly believe was an angel not just a cat. Back to your writing, always enjoyable. I sense something looming on the horizon! I am amazed that you can just keep producing chapters like this, poems work for me but I cannot keep up the momentum for chapters, that is where I always fail. I admire you for that and this amazing work of course kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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Thank have two male tabbies. They are real stinkers. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Lilol
I'm sorry, but this chapter is just too short and you still aren't getting onto the point of the story yet. You aren't writing about the painting and how it's going to be recovered.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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I'm sorry, but this chapter is just too short and you still aren't getting onto the point of the story yet. You aren't writing about the painting and how it's going to be recovered.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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#1 This isn't a chapter. The chapter is divided into four parts and this is only one part of it. #2 Earlier I wrote plenty about the painting. #3 I need to define the characters before I go on. #4 Not every post is going to be exciting and discuss the painting. #5 I notice you write poetry so really don't understand how to write a novel. #6 Thank you for dropping by.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Hello, Barbara, I loved the scene with
the little cutie.
Shana and Emily have a good relationship.
This is a great chapter, moving the story along.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Hello, Barbara, I loved the scene with
the little cutie.
Shana and Emily have a good relationship.
This is a great chapter, moving the story along.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation. The more I read the more I know what drives your characters. As I've come to expect the flow, dialogue and interaction between characters were spot on. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation. The more I read the more I know what drives your characters. As I've come to expect the flow, dialogue and interaction between characters were spot on. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind reviews. I often get told they want more excitement,, but I like to develop the characters.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sweet scene with a cute kid. She is one more way Anderson can wiggle his way into Shana's heart. Though I'm sure his billions and charm and kindness are plenty! :)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Sweet scene with a cute kid. She is one more way Anderson can wiggle his way into Shana's heart. Though I'm sure his billions and charm and kindness are plenty! :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Anderson will find out that Shana isn't interested in his billions. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rheabug
I love this story line and can not wait to read more. I see no need for any changes. Just keep on writing with your talented pen! I commend you on you work and hope someday to achieve some little amount of this talent. Love the imagery! Hugs....
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I love this story line and can not wait to read more. I see no need for any changes. Just keep on writing with your talented pen! I commend you on you work and hope someday to achieve some little amount of this talent. Love the imagery! Hugs....
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Barbara, you succeeded here in cementing Shana and Emily's relationship over playing puzzles and baking cookies. Even Emily's questions about kosher is instructive. This is a transitional chapter designed to build character and relationships.
My favorite scene here was when Helen tried to make Shana feel at home in her culture by cooking Kosher:
"I'll have you know there's not one piece of pork or shellfish on this cart. Matter-of-fact, I researched kosher foods now I know what to fix."
This shows a lot of care and respect for people of different cultures. Shana, accustomed to living in a non-Kosher world, is warming to live her faith and culture.
Your prose, dialogue, and descriptions are smooth. I found one omission:
"I won't tell you the rest until you finish (the) puzzle."
Thank you for sharing your entertaining chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Barbara, you succeeded here in cementing Shana and Emily's relationship over playing puzzles and baking cookies. Even Emily's questions about kosher is instructive. This is a transitional chapter designed to build character and relationships.
My favorite scene here was when Helen tried to make Shana feel at home in her culture by cooking Kosher:
"I'll have you know there's not one piece of pork or shellfish on this cart. Matter-of-fact, I researched kosher foods now I know what to fix."
This shows a lot of care and respect for people of different cultures. Shana, accustomed to living in a non-Kosher world, is warming to live her faith and culture.
Your prose, dialogue, and descriptions are smooth. I found one omission:
"I won't tell you the rest until you finish (the) puzzle."
Thank you for sharing your entertaining chapter.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I have added the missing word. Thank you.
Comment from apky
This was a relaxing fun chapter, considering what the story is about. I found it entertaining, and learnt more about Shana's food preferences.
"I bet we can arrange that. I'll talk with Helen." Jane added a piece. (")There are only two pieces left." She held them up. "Think you can put them in?"
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This was a relaxing fun chapter, considering what the story is about. I found it entertaining, and learnt more about Shana's food preferences.
"I bet we can arrange that. I'll talk with Helen." Jane added a piece. (")There are only two pieces left." She held them up. "Think you can put them in?"
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I have added the missing quotation mark. Thank you.
Comment from Sasha
This was a fun and entertaining chapter. I enjoyed it very much. I am pleased you are focusing on the development of Shana and Emily's relationship. I hope you had a nice vacation and don't wear yourself out getting ready to go back to school.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This was a fun and entertaining chapter. I enjoyed it very much. I am pleased you are focusing on the development of Shana and Emily's relationship. I hope you had a nice vacation and don't wear yourself out getting ready to go back to school.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I have challenged myself with cleaning my college son's room. I am a glutton for punishment. I force myself to do 1/7 of it daily. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter again. I love the interaction with Emily. I know my wife would have too. So sad God never gave us kids. Only one suggestion on this round. Talking to a kid I know but...finish (the)puzzle." I put up my one and only 1 act play again today. can't remember if you are a blonde hehe.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Great chapter again. I love the interaction with Emily. I know my wife would have too. So sad God never gave us kids. Only one suggestion on this round. Talking to a kid I know but...finish (the)puzzle." I put up my one and only 1 act play again today. can't remember if you are a blonde hehe.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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LOL I have added the missing 'the'. Thank you for the kind review.