Perennials of War
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36 total reviews
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara. I actually enjoyed reading this chapter and I am looking forward to reading more. You are dealing with a contemporary issue here, and as awful as it is, forced prostitution and human trafficking exist.
No spags noticed.
Nicole
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi, Barbara. I actually enjoyed reading this chapter and I am looking forward to reading more. You are dealing with a contemporary issue here, and as awful as it is, forced prostitution and human trafficking exist.
No spags noticed.
Nicole
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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They sure do. I appreciate your generous review.
Comment from E.A.Pulliam
It's made me curious to read more. There's not a lot here to go on.
What there is is interesting and it flows nicely. One suggestion, the two dogs leaving the room when their master bangs the table is a little flat. Did they scoot out with their tails tucked? They're shephers, perhaps they should have bristled and growled.
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reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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It's made me curious to read more. There's not a lot here to go on.
What there is is interesting and it flows nicely. One suggestion, the two dogs leaving the room when their master bangs the table is a little flat. Did they scoot out with their tails tucked? They're shephers, perhaps they should have bristled and growled.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Since you haven't read my previous posts you don't know anything about these dogs. I am not sure why I should be knocked down on stars because you haven't read my previous posts.
Comment from light
Very intriguing chapter. One does Wonder a painting would be of such interest to the Russian mafia. Anderson ex-wife is an interesting intrusion in. Wonder why the police have been called to her house so often.
Elaine
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Very intriguing chapter. One does Wonder a painting would be of such interest to the Russian mafia. Anderson ex-wife is an interesting intrusion in. Wonder why the police have been called to her house so often.
Elaine
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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We will find out more about Patricia very soon. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Hi Barbara, I haven't been on here in awhile and am trying to come back. I enjoyed reading this and will have to read the previous chapters. I especially was intriqued by the prostitution part. My daughter and son-in-law belong to a group called "Operation Underground Railroad"... maybe you've heard of it. It is so sad how kids all over the world and caught and sold for this vicious reason. Gramalot8
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi Barbara, I haven't been on here in awhile and am trying to come back. I enjoyed reading this and will have to read the previous chapters. I especially was intriqued by the prostitution part. My daughter and son-in-law belong to a group called "Operation Underground Railroad"... maybe you've heard of it. It is so sad how kids all over the world and caught and sold for this vicious reason. Gramalot8
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I know of an underground railroad here in the US that helps abused spouses get to safety. I will do research on this one. Maybe I can highlight in my novel.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, an interesting story, and I hope they will eventually find out why her picture is of sush importance.
I think it should be 'prostitution ring'
I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi Barbara, an interesting story, and I hope they will eventually find out why her picture is of sush importance.
I think it should be 'prostitution ring'
I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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I will check that area. Thank you.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Excellent dialogue and interactions between characters.
I'm wondering what Shana is being followed.
A few minor things to look at, Barbara
largest underage prostitute rings on the East coast. - might I suggest Prostitution
Anderson('s) eyebrows crunched together
Daddy, can I have a snack[.](?)
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Excellent dialogue and interactions between characters.
I'm wondering what Shana is being followed.
A few minor things to look at, Barbara
largest underage prostitute rings on the East coast. - might I suggest Prostitution
Anderson('s) eyebrows crunched together
Daddy, can I have a snack[.](?)
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Ah, the plot thickens once again. It sounds like something is up in Patricia's household. Why on earth did she NOT feed her child?
Anyway, I am so curious to find out why Shana is being followed. I can only imagine.
I didn't have any nits or SPAG jump out at me and take away from my reading experience.
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Ah, the plot thickens once again. It sounds like something is up in Patricia's household. Why on earth did she NOT feed her child?
Anyway, I am so curious to find out why Shana is being followed. I can only imagine.
I didn't have any nits or SPAG jump out at me and take away from my reading experience.
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Patricia is a piece of work.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Letting up for the summer soon then. Oh joy. LOL I'm buying a house at the moment and hope to be moved by the summer.
Good chapter and some domestic revelations for Anderson upcoming.
largest underage prostitute rings on the East coast."
- maybe prostitution rings here.
Anderson eyebrows crunched together - Anderson's.
Patricia stepped off the elevator p perhaps from rather than off here?
"Daddy, can I have a snack. - needs a question mark here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Hi Barbara,
Letting up for the summer soon then. Oh joy. LOL I'm buying a house at the moment and hope to be moved by the summer.
Good chapter and some domestic revelations for Anderson upcoming.
largest underage prostitute rings on the East coast."
- maybe prostitution rings here.
Anderson eyebrows crunched together - Anderson's.
Patricia stepped off the elevator p perhaps from rather than off here?
"Daddy, can I have a snack. - needs a question mark here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the help.
Comment from bookishfabler
"It's not only girls. In countries like Thailand, many of the young males are sold into prostitution. Most countries, including the US, have problems with child prostitution but the main ones are Thailand, Brazil, India, Sri Lanka, and Mexico City. The Russian Mafias have their hands in all of it." Jeremy took a bite of a ham and cheese sandwich. "Starvation is a strong motivator." (Did you make this up, or is it true? )
After Anderson nodded, Jeremy continued, "We've been called to their apartment on more than one occasion." (Uh-Oh, Now I want to know why. Great cliff hanger)
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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"It's not only girls. In countries like Thailand, many of the young males are sold into prostitution. Most countries, including the US, have problems with child prostitution but the main ones are Thailand, Brazil, India, Sri Lanka, and Mexico City. The Russian Mafias have their hands in all of it." Jeremy took a bite of a ham and cheese sandwich. "Starvation is a strong motivator." (Did you make this up, or is it true? )
After Anderson nodded, Jeremy continued, "We've been called to their apartment on more than one occasion." (Uh-Oh, Now I want to know why. Great cliff hanger)
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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It is very true. It's what I found in research. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation! You continue to weave an intricate plot regarding the Russian Mafia and your characters. The dialogue and interactions between your characters really push the plot forward. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation! You continue to weave an intricate plot regarding the Russian Mafia and your characters. The dialogue and interactions between your characters really push the plot forward. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.