Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter Three part drei"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from Lu Saluna
This is getting very good. More intense with each passing chapter. Anderson is being as helpful as he can but I can't help but wonder if he is the "good cop" to the "bad cops" chasing after Shana. I know I have to wait :-))
P.S. The character list really helps. I don't know about your other readers, but I am following about 4 other books and it is great to quickly scan the character list to refresh my memory. Especially if the posts are further apart. Thank you for doing it.
All the best to you. Lu
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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This is getting very good. More intense with each passing chapter. Anderson is being as helpful as he can but I can't help but wonder if he is the "good cop" to the "bad cops" chasing after Shana. I know I have to wait :-))
P.S. The character list really helps. I don't know about your other readers, but I am following about 4 other books and it is great to quickly scan the character list to refresh my memory. Especially if the posts are further apart. Thank you for doing it.
All the best to you. Lu
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from dweigt
Excellent. I like the way you are continuing to raise the tension.
The only thing I would suggest changing is a minor punctuation issue:
Shana looked down at Romeo who had put his head in her lap and then back at Anderson. -- I think you may need a couple of commas here. Maybe -- Shana looked down at Romeo, who had put his head in her lap, and then back at Anderson.
These aren't things needing correction, just thoughts I had while reading:
There are men out there who want something from you and aren't opposed to violence to get it. -- I understand Anderson's concern, but have we actually seen any evidence they would resort to violence? So far she has been followed and people have been aggressively questioned.
We're working hard to make sure those men aren't positive you're here. -- Yes, but... I wondered if Andrew should have told Shana's brother (or planned to tell Shana's grandmother) where she was. Either could accidentally reveal it, and there is always the possibility of "bugging" their home or office and picking up the information that way.
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Excellent. I like the way you are continuing to raise the tension.
The only thing I would suggest changing is a minor punctuation issue:
Shana looked down at Romeo who had put his head in her lap and then back at Anderson. -- I think you may need a couple of commas here. Maybe -- Shana looked down at Romeo, who had put his head in her lap, and then back at Anderson.
These aren't things needing correction, just thoughts I had while reading:
There are men out there who want something from you and aren't opposed to violence to get it. -- I understand Anderson's concern, but have we actually seen any evidence they would resort to violence? So far she has been followed and people have been aggressively questioned.
We're working hard to make sure those men aren't positive you're here. -- Yes, but... I wondered if Andrew should have told Shana's brother (or planned to tell Shana's grandmother) where she was. Either could accidentally reveal it, and there is always the possibility of "bugging" their home or office and picking up the information that way.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from giraffmang
hi Barbara,
Another good instalment on this third chapter. Shana sure picked a lucky car to jump into a while ago. Anderson is a very intriguing character indeed, and his entourage seem very capable.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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hi Barbara,
Another good instalment on this third chapter. Shana sure picked a lucky car to jump into a while ago. Anderson is a very intriguing character indeed, and his entourage seem very capable.
All the best
G
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from padumachitta
hi
I liked this story part...and found no obvious spag...not that i am good at that:-)
mostly it is about the character list...
i do not like them either...ut then...usually we read a book all the way through(if you are like me, often in one sitting)...but on this site we read bits and peices and lots of different stuff...as I get older it gets harder for me to keep a list, mental or written from all the stories i read here...so although i too do not like them....i know really appreciate them...it gives me a chance to remember all the people and recall the rest of the story...sorry this is long
mostly thanks for putting one in:-)
padumachitta
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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hi
I liked this story part...and found no obvious spag...not that i am good at that:-)
mostly it is about the character list...
i do not like them either...ut then...usually we read a book all the way through(if you are like me, often in one sitting)...but on this site we read bits and peices and lots of different stuff...as I get older it gets harder for me to keep a list, mental or written from all the stories i read here...so although i too do not like them....i know really appreciate them...it gives me a chance to remember all the people and recall the rest of the story...sorry this is long
mostly thanks for putting one in:-)
padumachitta
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I can't give you a six, I'm afraid, as I've used them all up. I think you are telling this story very vividly and you managed to keep the suspense throughout. I can't wait to see where this is going to take us. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Hi Barbara, I can't give you a six, I'm afraid, as I've used them all up. I think you are telling this story very vividly and you managed to keep the suspense throughout. I can't wait to see where this is going to take us. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. Virtual sixes count in my book. LOL
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This promises to be really intriguing, Barbara - altho I'm not yet
familiar with the story, I felt the tension amongst the characters
in this part - well presented - looking forward to the next part.
Happy New Year, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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This promises to be really intriguing, Barbara - altho I'm not yet
familiar with the story, I felt the tension amongst the characters
in this part - well presented - looking forward to the next part.
Happy New Year, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I'm glad you're back.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, this is getting serious, Barbara, why on earth do they want Shana so badly? And why are they going to see her family? Shana must have something on her they want, or perhaps she knows something that she doesn't realise? The plot thickens!! Congratulations on your trophy, my friend, you really deserve it. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Oh, this is getting serious, Barbara, why on earth do they want Shana so badly? And why are they going to see her family? Shana must have something on her they want, or perhaps she knows something that she doesn't realise? The plot thickens!! Congratulations on your trophy, my friend, you really deserve it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. As for the trophy, I am happy I got it too, only because I was competing against people who post every day. I only post once a week. It's my great fans that did it.
Comment from judiverse
this is great. You're really showing a lot of tension in this. The plot thickens as the people who are out to get whatever it is they think Shana has are now asking questions about Aaron at the hospital and have even visited her family. Anderson is going to have his hands full dealing with the situation, because Shana still hasn't a clue about what the men want. The old-fashioned values Shana shows are sweet. And she has the dog to protect her. Really six star work with this. judi
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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this is great. You're really showing a lot of tension in this. The plot thickens as the people who are out to get whatever it is they think Shana has are now asking questions about Aaron at the hospital and have even visited her family. Anderson is going to have his hands full dealing with the situation, because Shana still hasn't a clue about what the men want. The old-fashioned values Shana shows are sweet. And she has the dog to protect her. Really six star work with this. judi
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Always a pleasure to read your novels. judi
Comment from bookishfabler
Happy New Year my friend. I hope it started out well.
Anderson grabbed her phone, identified himself, and then said, "You must be Shana's brother. What's happened?" He listened, before he continued, "Shana's safe and will remain here. I'll handle things from this end." He paused before he asked, "Do you have any idea what these people want?(Question? How does her brother know that Anderson is a good guy and not one of the bad guys and has her held captive? Did she tell him at some point and I missed it perhaps?)
Thanks for another wonderful chapter.
hugs
Heidi
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Happy New Year my friend. I hope it started out well.
Anderson grabbed her phone, identified himself, and then said, "You must be Shana's brother. What's happened?" He listened, before he continued, "Shana's safe and will remain here. I'll handle things from this end." He paused before he asked, "Do you have any idea what these people want?(Question? How does her brother know that Anderson is a good guy and not one of the bad guys and has her held captive? Did she tell him at some point and I missed it perhaps?)
Thanks for another wonderful chapter.
hugs
Heidi
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. Very good question. I thought Shana told him about Anderson, but I had better check.
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You might have, maybe I just missed it at the time.
Comment from Ella25
It is an exciting chapter in your romance novel, a little suspense. Well-written with words flowing, easy to read. The Star of David lights up the words. Blessings, Ella
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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It is an exciting chapter in your romance novel, a little suspense. Well-written with words flowing, easy to read. The Star of David lights up the words. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You are welcome. Ella