Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great Chapter! Cordero is right about keeping Ali out of trouble. I think Cordero is going to end up killing someone over her. Have fun at the graduation, my friend.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This is a great Chapter! Cordero is right about keeping Ali out of trouble. I think Cordero is going to end up killing someone over her. Have fun at the graduation, my friend.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes.
Comment from Sankey
Glad there is something to read, Sorry I am late getting here. Busy day, yesterday. This was a great read. Ali seems to draw thee baddies doesn't she? Just one tiny spag, this round. you'll be tak(ing)[en] care of the ladies
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Glad there is something to read, Sorry I am late getting here. Busy day, yesterday. This was a great read. Ali seems to draw thee baddies doesn't she? Just one tiny spag, this round. you'll be tak(ing)[en] care of the ladies
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Made the correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from amahra
Barbara, your romance writing follows a great pattern. I'm almost inclined to say it's your signature in your novels. That is, just with Gabe and Katherine, you have Cord and Ali almost kissing. You seem to slowly allow your characters to restrain themselves until you feel the mood is right before taking them further.
Enjoy your trip. Stay safe.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Barbara, your romance writing follows a great pattern. I'm almost inclined to say it's your signature in your novels. That is, just with Gabe and Katherine, you have Cord and Ali almost kissing. You seem to slowly allow your characters to restrain themselves until you feel the mood is right before taking them further.
Enjoy your trip. Stay safe.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes. I do think the time has to be perfect. For Cord and Ali, it will come.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter, and Cord has rescued Ali again. How did the cameras and stuff show up as I don't think it was mentioned previously? It seems as if it would be quite a problem to do the electronics on a cattle drive.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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This is an interesting chapter, and Cord has rescued Ali again. How did the cameras and stuff show up as I don't think it was mentioned previously? It seems as if it would be quite a problem to do the electronics on a cattle drive.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Yes, they were mentioned earlier, and Jorge was going to order them. That's why they had to move the cattle, so they could set them up. Thank you fro the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barbra
I really like your characters and you for telling us reader who they are and what they do.
Barb your writing is excellent. And thank you for your great authors notes
I noticed a few place where you need a comma when you say 'but'
You have a nice time at your grand daughter's high school graduation.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Barbra
I really like your characters and you for telling us reader who they are and what they do.
Barb your writing is excellent. And thank you for your great authors notes
I noticed a few place where you need a comma when you say 'but'
You have a nice time at your grand daughter's high school graduation.
Gert
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I do love reading your stories. You did such a great job. I hope you have a wonderful time on your trip, and please be careful. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I do love reading your stories. You did such a great job. I hope you have a wonderful time on your trip, and please be careful. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes.
Comment from Jay Squires
Cord and Ali almost made it into a kiss. The fates are definitely against them. Personally, I don't like Hart. I'm glad he's going with Cord. I don't want him to be the first one getting Ali's kiss.
"Gary heard," [I wouldn't include this. It's subjective and the reader shouldn't be getting "inside" Gary's head. It's kind of jarring to the narrative]
Cordero watch Hart leave before he said, "Let's go inside." [Cordero WATCHED Hart leave ...]
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Cord and Ali almost made it into a kiss. The fates are definitely against them. Personally, I don't like Hart. I'm glad he's going with Cord. I don't want him to be the first one getting Ali's kiss.
"Gary heard," [I wouldn't include this. It's subjective and the reader shouldn't be getting "inside" Gary's head. It's kind of jarring to the narrative]
Cordero watch Hart leave before he said, "Let's go inside." [Cordero WATCHED Hart leave ...]
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for the catches. I made adjustments on both.
Comment from Ric Myworld
There is always a jerk that has to show up everything the pretty girls do, just luckily there was a cowboy to set him straight this time. LOL. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful vacation, and enjoy the little ones. They grow up so fast. :-)
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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There is always a jerk that has to show up everything the pretty girls do, just luckily there was a cowboy to set him straight this time. LOL. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful vacation, and enjoy the little ones. They grow up so fast. :-)
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Most cowboys are sweethearts, but then there are the ones who aren't. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Firstly have a great time at your granddaughter's graduation, you must be so proud, congrats to her. Beautifully written with Cord coming to Ali's rescue, although it's a bit much to try these things. But I think she might be able to take of things. Great episode Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : Cordero watch(ed) Hart leave.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Firstly have a great time at your granddaughter's graduation, you must be so proud, congrats to her. Beautifully written with Cord coming to Ali's rescue, although it's a bit much to try these things. But I think she might be able to take of things. Great episode Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : Cordero watch(ed) Hart leave.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the help and well wishes.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from lancellot
Another chapter, well edited and written according to the plan. I'm sure the rescue just in time scene and the helping and the apology and the respecting of women lecture, will go over well. Good luck on the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Another chapter, well edited and written according to the plan. I'm sure the rescue just in time scene and the helping and the apology and the respecting of women lecture, will go over well. Good luck on the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.