Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Anne Johnston
Thank you for this interesting chapter. It is quite fast paced. I wonder how Cord is going to get around this, scolding Ali in front of others and accusing her of being stupid.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you for this interesting chapter. It is quite fast paced. I wonder how Cord is going to get around this, scolding Ali in front of others and accusing her of being stupid.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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We'll see if what happens. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, Barbara
Comment from Ric Myworld
You don't even have to call a woman's actions stupid, just raise your voice a little, and all the immediate apologizes in the world still take months to lessen the retaliation. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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You don't even have to call a woman's actions stupid, just raise your voice a little, and all the immediate apologizes in the world still take months to lessen the retaliation. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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You're probably right. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
Cords parents are real gems They understand human nature very well. Jorge asking his son to grovel is a proof...
Jewel is a smart horse.
I am enjoying the incidents .The country life seems to be more interesting than city life.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Cords parents are real gems They understand human nature very well. Jorge asking his son to grovel is a proof...
Jewel is a smart horse.
I am enjoying the incidents .The country life seems to be more interesting than city life.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a nice, exciting chapter, although not so exciting as the last one. Ali needs a breather, anyway. Cord's dad is so right. Immediate apology sometimes works. Well done. One suggestion: . . . escaped its (captors) and . . .
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This is a nice, exciting chapter, although not so exciting as the last one. Ali needs a breather, anyway. Cord's dad is so right. Immediate apology sometimes works. Well done. One suggestion: . . . escaped its (captors) and . . .
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I made the change. I appreciate your help.
Comment from lancellot
Good chapter. Good editing.
"We've suspected something like that was happening but never had enough proof for probable cause. {Do you know if anybody's pressed charges? I sure hope so."}
- Why would the sheriff ask he that? If they 'pressed charges' they would've done so, with him? You mean pressing charges.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Good chapter. Good editing.
"We've suspected something like that was happening but never had enough proof for probable cause. {Do you know if anybody's pressed charges? I sure hope so."}
- Why would the sheriff ask he that? If they 'pressed charges' they would've done so, with him? You mean pressing charges.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I changed it. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Jay Squires
I feel like there should be a transition into the second scene, when Ali falls into the horse trough. In the preceding scene the men had left to go find the bull. Then you had a 5-aserisk scene change and without any explanation of the result of the bull problem, we find Cord is back and calling Ali stupid for getting near Jewel alone. This is a strong feeling I have without any suggestion for a solution. Accept or reject.
"I guess I caused too much trouble. [Closed quote needed.]
We'll need as men as possible. [Did you leave out "many"]
and scanned the work that needed to done. [Left out "be"]
I have a hunch you were quick to get this to post. You don't usually make mistakes over things like this.
Jay
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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I feel like there should be a transition into the second scene, when Ali falls into the horse trough. In the preceding scene the men had left to go find the bull. Then you had a 5-aserisk scene change and without any explanation of the result of the bull problem, we find Cord is back and calling Ali stupid for getting near Jewel alone. This is a strong feeling I have without any suggestion for a solution. Accept or reject.
"I guess I caused too much trouble. [Closed quote needed.]
We'll need as men as possible. [Did you leave out "many"]
and scanned the work that needed to done. [Left out "be"]
I have a hunch you were quick to get this to post. You don't usually make mistakes over things like this.
Jay
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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A couple of them, the last two I had already corrected, actually right after it was posted. I will think about your suggestion. I was wondering about that, but really didn't have a lot to say. Only fixing dinner and getting the bull, but that doesn't really move the story along. I'll see what I can do. Thank you.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Well, I am out of sixes again. They just don't last long enough. Great chapter as usual. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. Can you do a chapter a day? :)
Wonderful job. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Well, I am out of sixes again. They just don't last long enough. Great chapter as usual. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. Can you do a chapter a day? :)
Wonderful job. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. The story is finished, I could do a story a day. I already review a lot every day. If I did a chapter a day, I would never get anything else done because of reviewing even more to promote it. I know people who post twice a week, and they are high on the charts. I refuse to play that game. I'm #3 and only post once a week. I feel that says a lot, at least in my mind.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed its post, as it is well constructed and well written.
The dialogue reads authentically and has a natural flow.
I appreciate the shorter paragraphs, for me they create
a smooth read.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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I enjoyed its post, as it is well constructed and well written.
The dialogue reads authentically and has a natural flow.
I appreciate the shorter paragraphs, for me they create
a smooth read.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
An excellent and exciting episode, with lots and lots going on her, firstly the news that Ali caught Pat with a woman who was looking for a loan, but could only get it it by fooling around, (Talk about Weinstein) and lay on him the accusation, the a bull escaping, and now Jewel protection Ali, but Cord is in trouble...again, well done Barbara, excellent episode, blessing, Roy
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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An excellent and exciting episode, with lots and lots going on her, firstly the news that Ali caught Pat with a woman who was looking for a loan, but could only get it it by fooling around, (Talk about Weinstein) and lay on him the accusation, the a bull escaping, and now Jewel protection Ali, but Cord is in trouble...again, well done Barbara, excellent episode, blessing, Roy
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Cord may remain in trouble. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done
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Well done
Comment from eliz100
This is another great chapter. You moved your story along nicely. It was nice to see everyone supporting Ali for her brave deed. Adding the out-of control-bull, added excitement to the story.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This is another great chapter. You moved your story along nicely. It was nice to see everyone supporting Ali for her brave deed. Adding the out-of control-bull, added excitement to the story.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.