The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
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Comment from royowen
There are many things in life that are a puzzle, and many things that track the history of human beings antics, that may or may not have cause and affect, but that's why there are people like us to weave something through these stories. Creation of stories and scripts like this are clever. Beautifully written Jay, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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There are many things in life that are a puzzle, and many things that track the history of human beings antics, that may or may not have cause and affect, but that's why there are people like us to weave something through these stories. Creation of stories and scripts like this are clever. Beautifully written Jay, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Roy, thank you again ... so much for your refreshing evidence that you actually read my scene. That means a lot to me, friend.
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Good job
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a riveting scene, with lots of twists and turns as the story progresses. I'm glad to see the reporter has grown bolder in asking questions without stuttering. He's getting more and more information. I'm looking forward to finding out what happened during the trial. As it is, this story is full of surprises.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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This is a riveting scene, with lots of twists and turns as the story progresses. I'm glad to see the reporter has grown bolder in asking questions without stuttering. He's getting more and more information. I'm looking forward to finding out what happened during the trial. As it is, this story is full of surprises.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Hold your horses, Lorraine, if you think this has a lot of surprises. The trial is coming up, and I guarantee you, Fanny has a few more up her sleeve.
Jay
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another excellent chapter to read. Fanny surprised me with her intelligence about finances. Great job and have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Another excellent chapter to read. Fanny surprised me with her intelligence about finances. Great job and have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you, Shirley. Fanny is largely newspaper educated. That and life itself. I'm so happy you've chosen to continue on with this play. The next scene will be about the trial. Several twists await!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Jay,
Good stuff here again. The dribs & drabs of the details are quite compelling and help put the reader in the lace of the reporter.
March tweny-seben,- not sure if this is a typo or not seben / seven?
'Twarn't jest in the eyes o'- jest should probably be jes' here for consistency in dialect.
jes fer the money ya know. - jes' for consistency.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Hi Jay,
Good stuff here again. The dribs & drabs of the details are quite compelling and help put the reader in the lace of the reporter.
March tweny-seben,- not sure if this is a typo or not seben / seven?
'Twarn't jest in the eyes o'- jest should probably be jes' here for consistency in dialect.
jes fer the money ya know. - jes' for consistency.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Tweny-seben was an experiment. It sounds more like a southern lush than a homespun Texan. I think it will go the way of the chopping block. As to the old problem with jes, jes' and jest ... it jes comes up too often in her dialect not to have some inconsistency. Sometimes it comes with the elision against the following word as far as whether I occasionally leave the "t" on. I read every single sentence aloud to try and keep the language flowing. But sometimes errors still creep in. That's why I feel so privileged to have you stop by and pick up a few of the broken pieces. Your six stars blows my mind.
Comment from lyenochka
I like your historical reference to Mitchell and the connection to the Great Depression. I guess the reporter is planning to keep at Fanny until every detail is clearer. I'm glad he's getting into motives and getting Fanny to clarify what she knows after she pieced it together over the years.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I like your historical reference to Mitchell and the connection to the Great Depression. I guess the reporter is planning to keep at Fanny until every detail is clearer. I'm glad he's getting into motives and getting Fanny to clarify what she knows after she pieced it together over the years.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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You know, it hasn't been easy to keep the present cranking along while dredging up the past, all told in that dreadful dialogue I'll be happy to get away from. I'm just thrilled you have found some value in it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was interesting and shows just how awesome Fanny's intellect was. Wonder if her performance at the Taverns is going to convince the locals to laugh as they cash in their stocks. It's sad her Daddy had a problem he could not solve any other way.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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This was interesting and shows just how awesome Fanny's intellect was. Wonder if her performance at the Taverns is going to convince the locals to laugh as they cash in their stocks. It's sad her Daddy had a problem he could not solve any other way.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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You might be getting ahead of yourself about Fanny's Daddy ... or ahead of the storyline. I think you'll like the next scene, Carol.
Comment from BethShelby
This was another great post. The dialogue is right on. Fanny seems a little reluctant to tell the reporter certain things, but he wants the whole story and will keep on until he gets it. I'm anxious to here what came out in court that she hasn't told us yet. She has been side-stepping some of the questions about her father.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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This was another great post. The dialogue is right on. Fanny seems a little reluctant to tell the reporter certain things, but he wants the whole story and will keep on until he gets it. I'm anxious to here what came out in court that she hasn't told us yet. She has been side-stepping some of the questions about her father.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you, Beth. Yes, Fanny does seem to be a bit reluctant, doesn't she? And the reporter has developed some courage to rise above his awe of Fanny. Glad you've come along, Beth.
Comment from John Ciarmello
There is more to her daddy than meets the eye. This is the first time I've heard fanny get a bit aggressive but well-warranted. Another great Scene and act. Thanks for the read Jay.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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There is more to her daddy than meets the eye. This is the first time I've heard fanny get a bit aggressive but well-warranted. Another great Scene and act. Thanks for the read Jay.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Yes, John, there is more to Caleb Barnwarmer than meets the eye. More to come out in the next scene. You've been such a wonderful presence each week. Thank you for that!
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Welcome, sir! It's my pleasure.
Comment from Terry Broxson
I do appreciate your note at the end. I have thought from the first that the storyline was getting pretty close to the "crash", but I was not sure how if any it figured in the story. Good work. Terry.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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I do appreciate your note at the end. I have thought from the first that the storyline was getting pretty close to the "crash", but I was not sure how if any it figured in the story. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Well, the crash doesn't figure into the story directly. I was hoping it rounded out the setting more. So much is directed to the past. Thanks for reading and for the six stars.
Comment from Judy Lawless
You so a wonderful job of writing the dialogue of Miss Fanny in the southern accent, Jay, and she's such a colourful character. I love her. This scene brought us good information about the times. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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You so a wonderful job of writing the dialogue of Miss Fanny in the southern accent, Jay, and she's such a colourful character. I love her. This scene brought us good information about the times. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you, Judy. I'm happy it resonated with you. I tied the economic reality rather artlessly with her father's premonition to bring the conversation back around to him. And a six from you? What can I say? Thanks!
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You are most welcome, Jay. :)