Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from lancellot
Very nice. Nice scenes. Nice conversations. Nice family. This was another well written and wholesome chapter.
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"How can I help?"
- Seriously, These four words may be overused in your stories.
Slightly raising her blouse, Rosa exposed a holstered gun.
- how big is her 'blouse'?
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Very nice. Nice scenes. Nice conversations. Nice family. This was another well written and wholesome chapter.
notes
"How can I help?"
- Seriously, These four words may be overused in your stories.
Slightly raising her blouse, Rosa exposed a holstered gun.
- how big is her 'blouse'?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I have gone out of my way to not use 'How can I help?' I've cut out most of them. Sorry you didn't notice. As for the size of the blouse, I'm not sure of the inches. I know I have to raise mine slightly. Thank you for the kind review.
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I did notice. I read the characters speaking about Cord's helping.
How about instead of blouse, you say sweater, or coat. Even when I wear my gun. I always wear a long sweater or coat. Anything else will either ride up or the bulge would be visible. In my mind, a blouse is a thin material garment. Like a shirt but not. I guess, you would know better.
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I thought guns are illegal in Illinois, especially in Chicago. the problem with a sweater or coat is they are in Texas. We've already it 98 degrees a few days. Today, it's cooler, only 82. I promise to keep and eyes on the helping issue.
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Nope. Supreme court made carrying and owning guns legal across the country a few years ago.
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I just read that handguns are illegal in Illinois unless bought before 1982. I'm originally from Illinois. Move from the state when my husband jointed the Army.
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Nope. Handguns are legal in every state now. Here you just need a FOID card. And to carry in public you need to take a class and get your permit.
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Wow! so much for the media saying Chicago has the strictest gun laws in the country.
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It had, but the SCOUTS ruling ended that across most of the country. I think California and New York make you apply at your local police station for a permit, and they drag things out until you give up.
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I've heard Chicago's mayor speak. She talked like Chicago had a stick gun law and all the crime was being comment by illegal guns coming from other states.
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Lori lies a lot. It's not all her fault. She is not allowed speak the truth. She would be fired if she did. That has happened to leaders who dared do it.
Chicago does have very strict gun laws. We just aren't allowed to enforce them. The simple truth is, If we enforced the laws, most of the crime would stop and the city would be a great deal safer and would thrive.
But, we are not allowed to do that. Most of the crime is committed by young black males. If we enforced the laws and sentences, they would go and stay in prison. But, that is not allowed in our city and state. Black people are a protected class here. They also commit the majority of crime. But, because of the politics and ideology of most of the public, media and voters, we are not allowed to say or to do anything about it. We can only pass laws, we don't enforce and blame Indiana (because they are a red state)
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Thanks for sharing the semblance of a picnic with us; it is such an exhilarating piece of work, most especially, the array of flowers and animals illuminated in it.
It is more so of a picnic for Alexandra, who like her Mom appears to enjoy both the company of Cord, Rosa, Jim and the burgeoning array of flowers and animals.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of life spent in a livestock farm; with slight manoeuvres into horticulture.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thanks for sharing the semblance of a picnic with us; it is such an exhilarating piece of work, most especially, the array of flowers and animals illuminated in it.
It is more so of a picnic for Alexandra, who like her Mom appears to enjoy both the company of Cord, Rosa, Jim and the burgeoning array of flowers and animals.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of life spent in a livestock farm; with slight manoeuvres into horticulture.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love the sprinklings of Spanish, Barbara, it's been 8 years since I lived in Spain, so it's good to know I can still read the language.
I don't think Jorge is very happy with Cord. Of course, he's going to feel angry, he's been a hard worker all his life, and to be warned about his health doesn't sit well with him. I enjoyed the ride out with Rosa and Ali, it sounds such a pretty place. Another lovely chapter, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I love the sprinklings of Spanish, Barbara, it's been 8 years since I lived in Spain, so it's good to know I can still read the language.
I don't think Jorge is very happy with Cord. Of course, he's going to feel angry, he's been a hard worker all his life, and to be warned about his health doesn't sit well with him. I enjoyed the ride out with Rosa and Ali, it sounds such a pretty place. Another lovely chapter, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm starting to detect a bit of pridefulness in Jorge. He wants to make sure that Cord accepts his (Jorge's) preeminence in the household. Machismo!
Cord grabbed her, blocking her fall. [Consider prefacing this with some mention that Cord was there. Especially after Rosa saying she would be there if Ali needed help ... all of a sudden Cord is there]
"Cord, what's blessed in Spanish?" [might want to italicize "blessed". I thought he meant what sort of things are blessed in Spanish.]
Add anything, I forgot. [Don't need the comma after "anything".]
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I'm starting to detect a bit of pridefulness in Jorge. He wants to make sure that Cord accepts his (Jorge's) preeminence in the household. Machismo!
Cord grabbed her, blocking her fall. [Consider prefacing this with some mention that Cord was there. Especially after Rosa saying she would be there if Ali needed help ... all of a sudden Cord is there]
"Cord, what's blessed in Spanish?" [might want to italicize "blessed". I thought he meant what sort of things are blessed in Spanish.]
Add anything, I forgot. [Don't need the comma after "anything".]
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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The changes are made. Thank you for the eagle eye. I appreciate it.
Comment from nomi338
This story is proving to be as much fun as the prior story "Football." I am so pleased that not only have you retained your touch, your creative hand is steady and you are providing as much entertaining reading as ever. Please continue to do so.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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This story is proving to be as much fun as the prior story "Football." I am so pleased that not only have you retained your touch, your creative hand is steady and you are providing as much entertaining reading as ever. Please continue to do so.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Ahhh, thank you for the encouragement. You're sweet.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Your six for the week, Madam. You did a great job, and I can feel it heating up between Codero and Alex, but at this point they are in denial. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Your six for the week, Madam. You did a great job, and I can feel it heating up between Codero and Alex, but at this point they are in denial. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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They remain in denial for a while. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter. Still a good read. Always looking forward to where this is all going. Were you or are you fluent in Spanish? If you remember Sasha, I talk to the folks who were looking after her in Mexico. Thanks to Google Translate. No spags.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Another great chapter. Still a good read. Always looking forward to where this is all going. Were you or are you fluent in Spanish? If you remember Sasha, I talk to the folks who were looking after her in Mexico. Thanks to Google Translate. No spags.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Sasha passed away a few years ago.
Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, I knew that. Still in contact with her carers in Mexico.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The story is going well. The pace is good. The characters are becoming more full. The language is appropriate to the setting. The images are crisp.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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The story is going well. The pace is good. The characters are becoming more full. The language is appropriate to the setting. The images are crisp.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
Jorge sounds like an incredibly proud man, but life and health tend to walk hand in hand with life, and have an affect on one eventually, as Jorge will find out. Rosa discovers that Alexandra blushes every-time she mention Cord, beautifully written Barbara, , blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Jorge sounds like an incredibly proud man, but life and health tend to walk hand in hand with life, and have an affect on one eventually, as Jorge will find out. Rosa discovers that Alexandra blushes every-time she mention Cord, beautifully written Barbara, , blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Jorge is very proud.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter a lot, and, of course, it being about horses I was taken in at once.
Only one little, but important thing. As the foal is a she, it cannot be Bendecido. It has to be the feminine form, Bendecida. It's just plain grammar in the Spanish language. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter a lot, and, of course, it being about horses I was taken in at once.
Only one little, but important thing. As the foal is a she, it cannot be Bendecido. It has to be the feminine form, Bendecida. It's just plain grammar in the Spanish language. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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You are 100% correct. I will correct that. I messed it up. Thank you for the catch.