The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
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Comment from royowen
Yes I thought RGs advice is very sound, he has been part of the stage for sometime now, my young grandson won the part of the boy "Gavroche" in a professional production of Les Miserable, and performed brilliant, I made my stage debut at 54, his is 9. This is much easier to read and follow Jay, I enjoyed, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Yes I thought RGs advice is very sound, he has been part of the stage for sometime now, my young grandson won the part of the boy "Gavroche" in a professional production of Les Miserable, and performed brilliant, I made my stage debut at 54, his is 9. This is much easier to read and follow Jay, I enjoyed, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Roy, I never cease to learn about your life. An actor! My oh my! Thank you for commenting on RG's advice. If you read my answer to him, you'll see that its truth struck me full-on, and led to my decision. It's good to hear some validation from others. Thank you, sir!
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Well done
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a captivating story told in a script. I am familiar with Sojourner Truth's life as a slave and the horrors that brought, and her courageous efforts as a women's rights activist. But, I googled Juniper Eileen Albright to see if she were a real person, and WALA! Google brought up a variety of Albrights, as well as your Texas picture, the name of this script, "Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer," and your name, referencing FanStory.com, with a button to visit and read the script. You're famous.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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This is a captivating story told in a script. I am familiar with Sojourner Truth's life as a slave and the horrors that brought, and her courageous efforts as a women's rights activist. But, I googled Juniper Eileen Albright to see if she were a real person, and WALA! Google brought up a variety of Albrights, as well as your Texas picture, the name of this script, "Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer," and your name, referencing FanStory.com, with a button to visit and read the script. You're famous.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Gosh, if you could find it again and send me the link, I'd appreciate it, Lorraine. I googled all the way to the 10th page with no success. That would be a rush! Meanwhile, thank you for reading. No, Sojourner's child (which would have fit this timeframe) would have been Diana and I didn't search her to see if she had a history worth exploring. I made up the name Juniper Eileen Albright.
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I googled Juniper Eileen Albright which took me to a page of pictures of people names Albright. Under the pictures are lists of websites dealing with Albright. Third on that list is the Fanstory link to your story. It looks like this:
Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer by Jay Squires - FanStory.comhttps://www.fanstory.com ? displaystory
2 days ago ? FANNY: Fact is, she come from mighty fine stock. Juniper Eileen Albright?that's her full name?was the gran'chil' of Isabella Baumfree ?
At the top of the page, above the Albright pictures I clicked on "images" and it took me to your thumbnail picture of Texas. The only link was FanStory.com I hope you can find it.
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Hey, I finally found it, thanks to your description. My sytem uses Yahoo search, but when I initiated Google Search with the name, sure enough, it came up on page 1 the 3rd entry. That's gold! Thanks a bunch!
Comment from amahra
I generally stay away from any story, (books, movies, poems, songs, etc.) about African-Americans being victims of racism. It's so depressing because I lived it. But it's you so I'll hang in there.
Notwithstanding, it is realistic that they would hang the white father. I remember hearing racists say, "The only thing they hated worst than a 'N' was a 'N' lover." So, great writing, Jay.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I generally stay away from any story, (books, movies, poems, songs, etc.) about African-Americans being victims of racism. It's so depressing because I lived it. But it's you so I'll hang in there.
Notwithstanding, it is realistic that they would hang the white father. I remember hearing racists say, "The only thing they hated worst than a 'N' was a 'N' lover." So, great writing, Jay.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Yeah, I know it's a subject that's festering for some and my handling of it might seem exploitive, and for that I'm sorry. I'm honestly trying to get at the human condition that's at the center of us all, but to do that I have to peel back all the frightening, stupid, hateful, ignorant, bungling layers wherein I see myself peering out as well. And I don't like that.
Thank you, dear friend, for your kindnesses and the six stars!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I just love the regional dialect and dry humor. I like how Fanny is making the reporter nervous: "No ... I--" You've some interesting angles here about race. It is the ancestors who carry the most painful stories.
On another hanging topic, I just learned that Lincoln ordered 39 Indigenous hanged. It's got a little longer story to it, but it made me think of it.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I just love the regional dialect and dry humor. I like how Fanny is making the reporter nervous: "No ... I--" You've some interesting angles here about race. It is the ancestors who carry the most painful stories.
On another hanging topic, I just learned that Lincoln ordered 39 Indigenous hanged. It's got a little longer story to it, but it made me think of it.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I'd heard about Lincoln's blind side as well. And it wasn't a right-wrong, black-white situation, as I recall. I'll research that part of it, but it seems it wasn't an easy decision, that there were severe consequences on both sides.
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Yuh, check it out. As I read, it, 200+ were jailed & to be hung. I don't know if someone told him they were short of hanging rope or what, but he ended up having only 39 hung. They were doing what comes natural, defending their land.
So picture this, these colonizers reach new land to begin a new life and there are annoying savages on their newly claimed. Exterminate...exterminate. This is one of the reasons there are such conflicting opinions about the vaccine. There is well justified suspicion of its safety for them. Someone could easily slip something in, to eliminate some more of these annoyances. The government's lack of action of the missing & murdered Indigenous people is more proof they are though to be a disposable people. Well, I'm stepping off my 'soapbox'
Thank you for listening.
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Thank you Liz, for doing the research for me.
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***smile***
Comment from Spitfire
This isn't what I expected the play to be about. Unfortunately what Fanny tells the reporter is the truth of what happened to many 'African Americans' . I'm anxious to find out who Fanny wants to kill.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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This isn't what I expected the play to be about. Unfortunately what Fanny tells the reporter is the truth of what happened to many 'African Americans' . I'm anxious to find out who Fanny wants to kill.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Shari. For your kind words and for the six stars! You are appreciated. You'll get your anxieties settled in a scene or two.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like that this script is telling a story as it should be told, of the terror of being black in the those days. It also helps we non-Americans to understand more about the Civil War and treatment. You've done an excellent job, Jay. I look forward to what follows.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I like that this script is telling a story as it should be told, of the terror of being black in the those days. It also helps we non-Americans to understand more about the Civil War and treatment. You've done an excellent job, Jay. I look forward to what follows.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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You are so kind, Judy. I appreciate your presence onboard this play. I'm only trying to tell a story but the setting just happened to be in Civil War times where pain and shame are never far from the surface. Both have been carried forward to the present day and are often entertwined.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, what can I say, Ray. This is just so well written and shows all the ugliness in man. How ignorant and downright cruel in their mindset some were back then, and may I say some still are.
This was a fantastic read and very disturbing, indeed. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Wow, what can I say, Ray. This is just so well written and shows all the ugliness in man. How ignorant and downright cruel in their mindset some were back then, and may I say some still are.
This was a fantastic read and very disturbing, indeed. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Hey, Ulla, thanks for your kind words and for the six lovely stars. Yes we had some ugliness in us back then (and still do). I'm glad you felt that reading it was worthwhile.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Don't you think this should be: figured she was his chattel. His slave. -> figured she was his chattel, his slave.
Poor Juniper had to watch her dad dying from hanging. It's good that you have RGStar as a consultant. Looking forward to the next one. I thought this was more a comedy but now I'm not sure. It's more of a political in the America south.
Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Don't you think this should be: figured she was his chattel. His slave. -> figured she was his chattel, his slave.
Poor Juniper had to watch her dad dying from hanging. It's good that you have RGStar as a consultant. Looking forward to the next one. I thought this was more a comedy but now I'm not sure. It's more of a political in the America south.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Lisa. I think it could go either way. My way it's sort of a run-on sentence, but your way it would be a sentence fragment. A stickler for grammar would punish both of us, but in today's writing climate, I think both are accepted. Thanks for pointing it out, though, Lisa.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A wonderful second chapter. I felt chills when you described the lynching scene. I continue to like the dialogue format and the well-crafted speaking style of the protagonist.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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A wonderful second chapter. I felt chills when you described the lynching scene. I continue to like the dialogue format and the well-crafted speaking style of the protagonist.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Many thanks, Tim. Any suggestions about the odd juxtaposition of Juniper in the main (1929) action? (If you read Helen's ... Lyonochka's ... review alongside my answer to it, you'll get an idea of what I mean.) It takes the mind of a poet to help me pull her out of the bog in which she is slowly sinking.
Again, thanks for reading, Tim.
I like your updated biopic.
Comment from Lobber
Hi Jay,
- glad you agreed to add a sound track
- pleased to see Juniper come to life
- off-stage voice adds another nice dimension
- fewer )switch to(s work for me
- nice job
Jerry
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Hi Jay,
- glad you agreed to add a sound track
- pleased to see Juniper come to life
- off-stage voice adds another nice dimension
- fewer )switch to(s work for me
- nice job
Jerry
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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"- glad you agreed to add a sound track" : Um... most happy to oblige, LOL. Or, as Sheldon Cooper would say, "Is that sarcasm?" Seriously, Jerry, thank you for reading this, for your observations (even that!), and of course the 6 stars.