Wilderness Redemption Road
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Comment from Bonnie Seach
The story is well structured and well spaced (except for the size of the spaces)
It is an enjoyable story.
It should deserve a higher rating but for errors. Below are just a few.
Work is needed to achieve a higher rating
*Smyrthe change to
Smythe
*me, The one called
? a capital T after a comma?
*speak the white men's tongue for me, T
Change to white man's
*The spaces between paragraphs are wider than required
She *have* him a quick squeeze.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less when work is needed
Wishing you success. Kind regards
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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The story is well structured and well spaced (except for the size of the spaces)
It is an enjoyable story.
It should deserve a higher rating but for errors. Below are just a few.
Work is needed to achieve a higher rating
*Smyrthe change to
Smythe
*me, The one called
? a capital T after a comma?
*speak the white men's tongue for me, T
Change to white man's
*The spaces between paragraphs are wider than required
She *have* him a quick squeeze.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less when work is needed
Wishing you success. Kind regards
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Sorry it's taken me so long to reply. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I think things are slowing down enough I'll be able to get on Fanstory more frequently.
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I've been away for a few weeks. Glad to hear from you. Thanks! Take care
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Good to hear from you! I hope it is going really well.