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Football - A Novel

Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Football Chapter 17 part 1"
A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from robyn corum
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Barb,

I liked this post a lot. Any guy who's worried about a girl's reputation is a man to be considered for a long-term relationship. *smile* When he starts putting her well-being ahead of his own desires, you know it's real. Nice job!

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-A good image for the story, barbara.
-I liked the Mother's Day wishes at the end.
-Hope you had a good one.
-This was a good chapter showing
that Katherine was not concerned
about what people thought because
she and Gabe were not doing
anything anyone could criticize,
although someone things otherwise.
-They have a good discussion about
the girls' track team, and iron out
a few issues between them, and thoughts
they have, and it seems they are
back on track!
-It was interesting to see Frost's name
mentioned even though he seemed
like the likely suspect for causing
the disruption and making things
seem something they aren't.

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the understanding review.
reply by Pam (respa) on 10-May-2021
    You are very welcome.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Compelling and intense! As always, the interaction is brilliantly rendered and the characters are continually developed--kudos for letting the relationship develop at its own pace.

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
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Their relationship is progressing well, as they sort out their little issues and different perspectives. Your story continues to be well-written and clear. Thank you.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from lancellot
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I enjoy your writing skills, and I hope I am not out of line, but I wonder if this novel is just for the FanStory audience or possible publication? I ask because, I just don't understand what the issue is with your two Main characters dating?

Perhaps, I would understand better if I knew what actual chapter your novel is.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement. This will be published, but the audience I write for is more for the Hallmark channel type of people, or even Christian romance. It is simply a feel good and totally moral novel. It is in chapter 17. This is one of my longest novels. I just checked there are 52 total chapter. I have completed this novel. I know you write more contemporary than I do. I know you don't see an audience for my writing, but I promise there is one and they do buy books. One of my fans is only 17. There is an audience.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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Barbara:

Don't you just hate it when you feel your behavior has to be dictated by the unjust thoughts of others? I know I have been in that situation more than once. I hope that Gabriel keeps being a good friend to Katherine and the remainder of the Riley family and let the chips fall where they may.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Happy Mother's Day to all the mothers who have worked so hard and sacrificed just to hear those little ones say, I love you mommy. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 09-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
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Another wonderful chapter. Hopefully, some romance is coming eventually. the boys love Gabriel. He is the Dad they never had. That PI needs a wake-up call! No spags.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 09-May-2021
    I promise you a romance. LOL. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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Ah, things are definitely progressing, now they're saying it, I would miss you, that's the sure sign that one is becoming important and is necessary in one's life for its daily function and operation. This is beautifully written my friend, well done, good job, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 09-May-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
reply by royowen on 09-May-2021
    Most welcome
Comment from nomi338
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Argh! Come on already, just go ahead and get married for crying out loud! LOL. I want these two to become a loving couple so badly that I get way ahead of myself. Believe me, I know the process. Mu own relationship two a full two years to develop, and it has lasted without hiccup for nearly 48 years. It takes time, I know. Keep up the great job that your currently doing, despite the impatience of jerks like me.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021


reply by the author on 09-May-2021
    You are far from a jerk, you're a sweetheart. Their relationship will have many ups and downs. In a few posts, it will have down, I wonder how they will get through it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by nomi338 on 09-May-2021
    Thanks. I was hoping you would disagree with me calling myself a jerk. The story is advancing at a respectable clip.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
    Of course, why would I not?