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Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Tree Huggers"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
26 total reviews
Comment from nor84
Just so you know, the purpose of this review is to be helpful. I will point out any SPAG errors I see and rate according to site guidelines. SPAG means Spelling, Punctuation And Grammar. I may also comment on formatting issues. I will not give a five or six-star review unless I believe the work warrants it.
Good story. I do have a word change to recommend: limited VISABILITY not viability because you are talking about 'visual', being able to see and not 'viable' which being able to live.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Just so you know, the purpose of this review is to be helpful. I will point out any SPAG errors I see and rate according to site guidelines. SPAG means Spelling, Punctuation And Grammar. I may also comment on formatting issues. I will not give a five or six-star review unless I believe the work warrants it.
Good story. I do have a word change to recommend: limited VISABILITY not viability because you are talking about 'visual', being able to see and not 'viable' which being able to live.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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OMG thank you, I am so embarrassed! of course, you are correct, very good catch.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The story tells it well, but I would say that many of us who have never wanted a motorcycle are aware of the many tragic accidents experienced by those aboard. I often wonder why they are not more careful. They just don't get it.
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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The story tells it well, but I would say that many of us who have never wanted a motorcycle are aware of the many tragic accidents experienced by those aboard. I often wonder why they are not more careful. They just don't get it.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hi Ralf, yes most two wheel vehicles used by those who live on the edge can be badly hurt.
Comment from T.E. Loper
Just the title drew me in. I thought, "Did tree huggers somehow rescue him, or did he rescue tree huggers?" I had to find out. Now I'm thinking bikers need to get on board with saving the trees!
I live on a very busy road, so I know how witnessing this kind of scene can change you, and how it can stay with you. This was a good story. I'm glad I slowed down to read it.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Just the title drew me in. I thought, "Did tree huggers somehow rescue him, or did he rescue tree huggers?" I had to find out. Now I'm thinking bikers need to get on board with saving the trees!
I live on a very busy road, so I know how witnessing this kind of scene can change you, and how it can stay with you. This was a good story. I'm glad I slowed down to read it.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Tom, thank you! I am glad the title hooked you. Now I live in another area of the country with winding, narrow two-lane roads and the new OMG moments are the other bikers , is in the cyclist type with no bike lanes, UGH.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Wow, they were lucky to be able to grab onto the tree branches. You did a good job with your contest entry. You set the scene up well. Your words flow smoothly. I could see the bikers and their 'arrogance.' Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Wow, they were lucky to be able to grab onto the tree branches. You did a good job with your contest entry. You set the scene up well. Your words flow smoothly. I could see the bikers and their 'arrogance.' Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Jan thank you it was easy to write as the scene is still so vivid after many years.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Man, this sounds so crazy and scary: "
The two bikers who bailed were physically clinging to branches on two giant redwoods just downslope from the highway. Surprisingly alive, scratched-up, safely rescued.
From that day forward, I never wanted a motorcycle!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Man, this sounds so crazy and scary: "
The two bikers who bailed were physically clinging to branches on two giant redwoods just downslope from the highway. Surprisingly alive, scratched-up, safely rescued.
From that day forward, I never wanted a motorcycle!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Iza, scary and remarkable!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my goodness! What a scary thing to be thrown off a freeway off a speeding motorcycle and almost into the ocean and hanging by a tree. Glad they survived and hope the donate to help maintain the Redwood Forest ! Great story and best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Oh my goodness! What a scary thing to be thrown off a freeway off a speeding motorcycle and almost into the ocean and hanging by a tree. Glad they survived and hope the donate to help maintain the Redwood Forest ! Great story and best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Yes it was something, thanks for reading and commenting
Comment from Jimmy Hogg
For 250 words, this really delivers. I would suggest condensing the penguin paragraph, just so we can get into the story more quickly.
"Disaster can strike around every bend on Highway 1"- that might be all you need.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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For 250 words, this really delivers. I would suggest condensing the penguin paragraph, just so we can get into the story more quickly.
"Disaster can strike around every bend on Highway 1"- that might be all you need.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Jimmy, thanks I just learned a new term, penguin paragraph. I write Free Verse poetry and dabble in other poetic style. On a rare ocassoion I will drop into prose offering just to see what happens. I will look at that but then I will have to come up a replacement words to hit the required 250 word count.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, this story has got to be a winner, because you did exactly what was asked for. A story that proved life altering. My only confusion was clarified in the last line when you mentioned a motorcycle, until then I thought these were men on bicycles.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Dear JLR, this story has got to be a winner, because you did exactly what was asked for. A story that proved life altering. My only confusion was clarified in the last line when you mentioned a motorcycle, until then I thought these were men on bicycles.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Suzanna thank you, my intended little hooked worked at the end. I appreciate your comments,
Comment from Mastery
Bravo Jim! I have no sixes left but I am sure somebody will reward you for this story which really would have worked just a swell for the "True Story" contest, I think. Inn any event, I sure would be sour on bikes myself after witnessing that. :) Bob
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Bravo Jim! I have no sixes left but I am sure somebody will reward you for this story which really would have worked just a swell for the "True Story" contest, I think. Inn any event, I sure would be sour on bikes myself after witnessing that. :) Bob
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Thanks much 👍👍
Comment from BethShelby
That sounds like a terrible accident. I guess a tree would be an unexpected spot from which to rescue a biker. I hope everyone survived this accident but it sounds as though it might have taken some lives if it hit a car. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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That sounds like a terrible accident. I guess a tree would be an unexpected spot from which to rescue a biker. I hope everyone survived this accident but it sounds as though it might have taken some lives if it hit a car. Nicely written.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Beth, I believe both riders had the archangel Michael riding with them on this day.