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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Fresh perspective on failure--compelling points. (Curious why you cast this as free verse with odd mid-line breaks--it's better suited to prose--you classified it as commentary fiction). I like the way you think!
doing [there=>THEIR] level best
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Fresh perspective on failure--compelling points. (Curious why you cast this as free verse with odd mid-line breaks--it's better suited to prose--you classified it as commentary fiction). I like the way you think!
doing [there=>THEIR] level best
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Elizabeth, thanks for catching the spag....
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Excellent job on this one. I enjoyed reading. I always said why can't they use a better word than failure it sounds so bad. I tried a new job one time it didn't work out. They said I had a failed trial period. I said to them why can't you use the word unsuccessful instead of failed. As you said in your writing it just sounds better. Since then they used unsuccessful instead of failed. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Excellent job on this one. I enjoyed reading. I always said why can't they use a better word than failure it sounds so bad. I tried a new job one time it didn't work out. They said I had a failed trial period. I said to them why can't you use the word unsuccessful instead of failed. As you said in your writing it just sounds better. Since then they used unsuccessful instead of failed. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
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Joanne thank you!
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great comments about failure. Like the lines:
"Surely we must then realize no one truly can be a failure!
Especially, when someone is without question
doing there level best to put their best foot forward."
You might want to change "there" to "their."
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Great comments about failure. Like the lines:
"Surely we must then realize no one truly can be a failure!
Especially, when someone is without question
doing there level best to put their best foot forward."
You might want to change "there" to "their."
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Anne thank you done with correction.
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You are very welcome
Comment from Tpa
Quite a controversy writing that seems to embellish the mind that stems from a pessimistic observation of life. Each individual as you say has that 'free will,' which endures your being of making the life you want.
good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Quite a controversy writing that seems to embellish the mind that stems from a pessimistic observation of life. Each individual as you say has that 'free will,' which endures your being of making the life you want.
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Tpa not so much really, thanks!
Comment from victor 66
Thomas Edison once said something to the effect, " I didn't fail. I just found 999 ways of not making a lightbulb". And In some respects, I find failure or success, is a matter of perception. You just have to decide what direction you're going. And I asked the same question that you do, how can you fail if you've given your all? . Best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Thomas Edison once said something to the effect, " I didn't fail. I just found 999 ways of not making a lightbulb". And In some respects, I find failure or success, is a matter of perception. You just have to decide what direction you're going. And I asked the same question that you do, how can you fail if you've given your all? . Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Thank you Victor 66! We are both on the same page.
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You are most welcome. I think it's too bad that there aren't more of us "on the same page".
Comment from Jennifer L Newcomb
This was fantastic! What a perceptive on how that word can be such a wall for many and keep us in the wrong frame of mind. Most do not put value on often used words, how they define us or break us. Again, this was a wonderful read and it speaks volumes...I wouldn't change a thing.
Thanks for sharing
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This was fantastic! What a perceptive on how that word can be such a wall for many and keep us in the wrong frame of mind. Most do not put value on often used words, how they define us or break us. Again, this was a wonderful read and it speaks volumes...I wouldn't change a thing.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Wow! Thank you so very, very much!
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear author,
An awesome and inspiring piece!!! Amazing job!! Thanks for sharing!!! Best have of luck with the contest!! May God bless you and your family!!!!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Dear author,
An awesome and inspiring piece!!! Amazing job!! Thanks for sharing!!! Best have of luck with the contest!! May God bless you and your family!!!!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Anne-Marie, thanks for the good wishes.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, this was a thoughtful piece on the topic of failure - but I would consider this to be straight out prose, not free verse. I would strongly advise you to Google a definition of free verse and some of the features it contains and what sets it apart from other writing arts. It's not just 'free writing' (Sorry.)
Also:
--> doing (their) level best to put (their) best foot forward.
I do like your message. With some careful adjustments, you could have a quality entry! Thank you!
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, this was a thoughtful piece on the topic of failure - but I would consider this to be straight out prose, not free verse. I would strongly advise you to Google a definition of free verse and some of the features it contains and what sets it apart from other writing arts. It's not just 'free writing' (Sorry.)
Also:
--> doing (their) level best to put (their) best foot forward.
I do like your message. With some careful adjustments, you could have a quality entry! Thank you!
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Robyn I write a lot of free verse I need no explanation, I have used a good number poetic devices , but because I always value your opinion I will re visit this.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Commentary and Philosophy Fiction speaks the commentaries about failures and exemplifies what sometimes make human beings unsuccessful; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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This Commentary and Philosophy Fiction speaks the commentaries about failures and exemplifies what sometimes make human beings unsuccessful; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Thanks so much!
Comment from royowen
I do not understand how one can call a child "a failure", particularly if that child is
"Flesh of one's own flesh", such a sad thing, I adore my children/grands, and could never call them that. It commits them to a life long sentence of disapproval, they unbelievably valuable. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, congrats, blessings Roy
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I do not understand how one can call a child "a failure", particularly if that child is
"Flesh of one's own flesh", such a sad thing, I adore my children/grands, and could never call them that. It commits them to a life long sentence of disapproval, they unbelievably valuable. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, congrats, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Roy, I so agree about the need to foster sustaining your children with the confidence to try and try again, thanks for the good wishes.
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Most welcome